2. STRETCH THE MAIN EVENT! Instead of writing about too many
things, focus on one event and stretch it. To do this: 1. Describe
the action using the Show, Not Tell strategy. 2. Add action and
suspense. 3. Add dialogue. 4. Add thoughts and emotions. Adapted
from Dr Cheah Yee Mins Write It Well! 3. SHOW, NOT TELL! A method
to inform your reader about your characters, action and other story
elements Subject See Touch Emotions or Thoughts (Feel) Hear Taste
Smell Dialogues Adapted from Dr Cheah Yee Mins Write It Well! 4.
SHOW, NOT TELL! 1. What is good to show? The horrible accident that
cost John his left leg. 2. Use dialogue to show. Instead of you
telling, get your character to talk to another character. Adapted
from Dr Cheah Yee Mins Write It Well! 5. SHOW, NOT TELL! 3. Use
action to show a quality your character possesses e.g. mischievous.
4. Show by description. Describe what you can see, hear, smell,
taste or touch/feel. Engage the some of the five senses. Tell: The
room was in a mess. Show: Clothes were strewn all over the room.
The bed was unmade and a smelly pillow stained with dark patches of
grease was on it. Adapted from Dr Cheah Yee Mins Write It Well! 6.
SHOW, NOT TELL! 5. Add emotions or thoughts to show how characters
are feeling. Emotion How the body shows this emotion Anger Heavy
breathing or deep silence Clenched fists Eyes flashing, nostrils
flaring, red cheeks Happy Eyes beaming Wearing a grin from ear to
ear Laughing heartily Terrified Body crouched Hands covering face
Hands / legs trembling Clammy palms Adapted from Dr Cheah Yee Mins
Write It Well! 7. STRETCH THE ACTION Summary (Tell): The lift was
jammed. Sam was trapped inside. (Show) The lift jerked as it began
moving to the tenth floor of Sams flat. Grunkgrunkit went as it
inched its way to the fifth floor. Sam was too exhausted to pay
attention to the noise. He just wanted to get home. Once the
display showed 9, the lift gave an extra loud, shuddering sound and
stopped suddenly GRONK! It was as if it took one last breath.
Before Sam could react, the lights went off and everything was
pitch dark. He could not see anything. Argh! he let out, feeling
extremely annoyed. He reached his hand to touch the lift panel,
hoping to find the emergency button that he could press for help.
8. USE YOUR FIVE SENSES AND EMOTIONS. FOCUS ON 2 OR 3 SENSES, NOT
ALL. See Touch Feel Hear Speech/Dialogue Emotions The lift jerked
as it began moving to the tenth floor of Sams flat. Grunkgrunkit
went as it inched its way to the fifth floor. Sam was too exhausted
to pay attention to the noise. He just wanted to get home. Once the
display showed 9, the lift gave an extra loud, shuddering sound and
stopped suddenly GRONK! It was as if it took one last breath.
Before Sam could react, the lights went off and everything was
pitch dark. He could not see anything. Argh! he let out, feeling
extremely annoyed. He reached his hand to touch the lift panel,
hoping to find the emergency button that he could 9. WHICH ARE THE
SENSES? His father rose while it was still very dark to go to work
and his mother was awake as well to fix him whatever was available
for breakfast. They had stayed up late last night discussing the
'friend' Charlie had told his mother about. Mr. Bucket had finally
decided that Mrs. Bucket was right and he didn't have the heart to
forbid Charlie's exchanging waves with the stranger. He kissed his
wife warmly and opened the door to leave for the toothpaste
factory, only to stumble over a basket that lay just outside. It
was a rather large basket. Curious as to what it could contain, he
brought it back inside. "What is that, dear? "I don't know," Mr.
Bucket answered his wife truthfully. She turned from where she was
working to come see what he had. The first thing they found was
that the cloth that covered the basket was actually a blanket, a
large, woolen blanket, very warm and soft and pink. Never had they
touched such soft wool. As Mrs. Bucket rubbed her cheek against it,
she discovered that it was not the least bit scratchy as wool 10.
WHICH ARE THE SENSES SHOWN? His father rose while it was still very
dark to go to work and his mother was awake as well to fix him
whatever was available for breakfast. They had stayed up late last
night discussing the 'friend' Charlie had told his mother about.
Mr. Bucket had finally decided that Mrs. Bucket was right and he
didn't have the heart to forbid Charlie's exchanging waves with the
stranger. He kissed his wife warmly and opened the door to leave
for the toothpaste factory, only to stumble over a basket that lay
just outside. It was a rather large basket. Curious as to what it
could contain, he brought it back inside. "What is that, dear? "I
don't know, Mr. Bucket answered his wife truthfully. She turned
from where she was working to come see what he had. The first thing
they found was that the cloth that covered the basket was actually
a blanket, a large, woolen blanket, very warm and soft and pink.
Never had they touched such soft wool. As Mrs. Bucket rubbed her
cheek against it, she discovered that it was not the least bit
scratchy as wool frequently was. Dialogues Sight Sight Touch
Emotion https://www.fanfiction.net/s/2607422/6/Chocociology 11. TRY
STRETCHING THE ACTION WITH 2 OR 3 OF THE 5 SENSES WITH EMOTIONS
& DIALOGUES! What do you? see hear taste smell feel (touch)
What are the? emotions dialogues
