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Peer Review Sheet: Ethnography Paper

Author’s name: ________Danny deRoos_______________

Reviewer’s name: ___________Romelo Perry____________

Author: Before exchanging papers with one of your classmates !ll in the following

information a"out your draft#

$# State the main purpose of your ethnography: Are you trying to explain an

aspect of the su"culture%site to outsiders& Do you want to convince outsiders of the

su"culture%site’s value& 'ould you li(e mem"ers of the su"culture%site to examine

something a"out themselves& Are you comparing outsiders to insiders& )f so do you

favor one side&

* ) am trying to explain that soccer is more than a wea( sport as most people

thin(# +ther than the game the fans are similar to all other sports# ) would li(e

you to notice that

,# Descri"e the "est section of your ethnography#

* -he "est section of my ethnography is going in depth and descri"ing what ) had

o"served when watching the soccer games at ./00# -he crowd and who was in

the crowd especially#

1# 2xplain one or two pro"lems that you are having with this draft that you

want your reader to focus on#

* 3y organi4ation s(ills are very "ad* 5ow can ) reword the part where ) tal( a"out people’s chemistry or add to it&

Reviewer: Read the author’s comments a"ove and read the entire draft through

once without ma(ing any comments# -hen reread the draft in order to answer the

following 6uestions#

$# 7ocate at least two (ey passages in the ethnography# 8ive an example of

something the writer does well# Suggest areas that could "ene!t from more

description of the su"culture more explanation of the thesis or forms of



information that are needed to improve the passages#

* -he part of the crowd description was good#* /eed to wor( on the organi4ation part of the essay

,# 9ind a section where the author uses primary research# )s the research used

appropriately& )s it clear how the research supports the point "eing made "y the

author& Suggest areas where more primary research would "e useful to help

improve the ethnography#

* Descri"ing crowd was good and visual# 5ave a good amount in there already

1# 9ind a section where the author uses secondary research# )s the research

used appropriately& )s it clear how the research supports the point "eing made "y

the author& Suggest areas where more secondary research would "e useful to help

improve the ethnography#

* Did you have secondary&

# 'hat overall idea does the ethnography convey to you& 5ow does your

notion of the main idea compare to the author’s& 2xplain how the author might

revise the essay to ma(e the thesis clearer; point out speci!c ways to accomplish

this#

* ) thin( he is saying that soccer is not as hard or physically wea(er than other

sports that are seen as rough li(e foot"all#



<# Suggest solutions to the pro"lem=s> the author wanted you to focus on#

* Add more to the chemistry part in what you mean "y that# 'or( on organi4ation# )t

?umped around a little "it#

)mportant: 'hen your reviewers return your peer review sheets please pay close

attention to ="ut also evaluate> all comments and suggestions for revision# Please

seriously consider your peers@ suggestions on how to improve your paper and

convey your main idea successfully#