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Tired language is dull, unimaginative, and monotonous.
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Can you spot the tired language in the following sentence?
Late in the 4th quarter, the quarterback added insult to injury by passing for two back-to-back touchdowns.
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Tired language is dull, unimaginative, and monotonous.
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Can you spot the tired language in the following sentence?
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Tired language is dull, unimaginative, and monotonous.
Late in the 4th quarter, the quarterback added insult to injury by passing for two back-to-back touchdowns.
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How could you revise this sentence using more vivid language?
Late in the 4th quarter, the quarterback added insult to injury by passing for two back-to-back touchdowns.
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Tired language is dull, unimaginative, and monotonous.
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Late in the 4th quarter, the quarterback added insult to injury by passing for two back-to-back touchdowns.
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Late in the 4th quarter, the quarterback stunned the opposition by passing for two back-to-back touchdowns.
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Tired language is dull, unimaginative, and monotonous.
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Which word is an example of tired language in this sentence?
The teacher looked mad when I was late for class again.
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Which word is an example of tired language in this sentence?
The teacher looked mad when I was late for class again.
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How could you revise this sentence to get rid of the tired word?
The teacher looked mad when I was late for class again.
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The teacher looked mad when I was late for class again.ORIGINAL
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The teacher looked exasperated and impatient when I was late for class again.
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Use the following strategies to revise tired language. Click on the strategy you want to explore.
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•Replace Clichés•Use Precise Nouns•Find Vivid Verbs•Replace Empty Modifiers
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Replace Clichés A cliché is an overused, worn-out expression.
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Replace Clichés Tired Language
Here are examples of some familiar clichés. You have probably heard these expressions before.
•happy as a lark•easier said than done•call it quits•reinvent the wheel
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A cliché is an overused, worn-out expression.
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Replace Clichés Tired Language
Use these strategies to avoid clichés:
• Find a fresh image for what you want to say.• Connect with feeling. For example, how does boredom feel?
Is it endless, dull, weary?• Use ordinary language. If you can't think of a fresh image,
then choose clear, everyday words instead of a worn-out expression.
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Replace Clichés What is the cliché in this sentence?
The politician gave a sigh of relief when the debate finally ended.
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Replace Clichés What is the cliché in this sentence?
The politician gave a sigh of relief when the debate finally ended.
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Replace Clichés How could you avoid the cliché in this sentence?
The politician gave a sigh of relief when the debate finally ended.
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The politician gave a sigh of relief when the debate finally ended.
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The politician loosened his tie and relaxed his shoulders when the debate finally ended.
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Replace Clichés The revised sentence describes the politician’s actions. These details show rather than tell how he felt when the debate ended.
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Use Precise NounsTired Language
Use nouns that give specific information. Replace common nouns with the names of specific places, people, or things.
Common Noun
dog
drink
game
book
Specific Noun
poodle
coffee, lemonade
chess, baseball
dictionary, almanac
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Use Precise NounsTired Language
Use nouns that give specific information. Replace common nouns with the names of specific places, people, or things.
Common Noun
dog
drink
game
book
Specific Noun
poodle
coffee, lemonade
chess, baseball
dictionary, almanac
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Use Precise NounsWhat are the non-specific nouns in this sentence?
The man spotted the car by the side of the road.
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Use Precise NounsWhat are the non-specific nouns in this sentence?
The man spotted the car by the side of the road.
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Use Precise NounsHow would you revise this sentence to use precise nouns?
The man spotted the car by the side of the road.
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The man spotted the car by the side of the road. ORIGINAL
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The police officer spotted the dark blue minivan in the breakdown lane.
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Find Vivid VerbsTired Language
Use verbs that convey a true sense of the action you want to describe.
Generic Verb
talk
give
drink
look
Specific Verb
chat, gossip, discuss
confer, bestow, grant
swallow, slurp, gulp
scrutinize, glimpse, peek
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Find Vivid VerbsTired Language
Use verbs that convey a true sense of the action you want to describe.
Generic Verb
talk
give
drink
look
Specific Verb
chat, gossip, discuss
confer, bestow, grant
swallow, slurp, gulp
scrutinize, glimpse, peek
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Find Vivid VerbsWhat are the generic verbs in this sentence?
The car stopped after it turned the corner and hit the streetlight.
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Find Vivid VerbsWhat are the generic verbs in this sentence?
The car stopped after it turned the corner and hit the streetlight.
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Find Vivid VerbsWhat specific verbs could you use in this sentence instead of the generic verbs?
The car stopped after it turned the corner and hit the streetlight.
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The car stopped after it turned the corner and hit the streetlight.
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The car screeched to a stop after it clipped the corner and sideswiped the streetlight.
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What specific verbs could you use in this sentence instead of the generic verbs?
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Replace Empty ModifiersTired Language
Modifiers (adjectives and adverbs) can have many shades of meaning. Choose modifiers that convey exactly what you mean. You may also need to add details to make your meaning clear.
Generic Modifier
awful
pretty
interesting
fun
Specific Modifier
appalling, frightful, disgustingstunning, gorgeous, attractiveabsorbing, captivating, fascinating amusing, enjoyable, entertaining
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Replace Empty ModifiersTired Language
Modifiers (adjectives and adverbs) can have many shades of meaning. Choose modifiers that convey exactly what you mean. You may also need to add details to make your meaning clear.
Generic Modifier
awful
pretty
interesting
fun
Specific Modifier
appalling, frightful, disgustingstunning, gorgeous, attractiveabsorbing, captivating, fascinating amusing, enjoyable, entertaining
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Replace Empty ModifiersWhat are the empty modifiers in this sentence?
The acrobat performed a nice somersault on the thin high wire to the applause of the watchful crowd.
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Replace Empty ModifiersTired Language
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What are the empty modifiers in this sentence?
The acrobat performed a nice somersault on the thin high wire to the applause of the watchful crowd.
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Replace Empty ModifiersWhat more specific modifiers could you use in this sentence?
The acrobat performed a nice somersault on the thin high wire to the applause of the watchful crowd.
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The acrobat performed a nice somersault on the thin high wire to the applause of the watchful crowd.
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The acrobat performed a graceful somersault on the threadlike high wire to the applause of the captivated crowd.
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Replace Empty Modifiers What more specific modifiers could you use in this sentence?
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What is the empty modifier in this sentence?
My summer job was terrible.
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What is the empty modifier in this sentence?
My summer job was terrible.
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How could you revise this sentence to make it less tired and more descriptive?
My summer job was terrible.
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How could you revise this sentence to make it less tired and more descriptive?
My summer job was terrible.
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My summer job was terrible.
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colorful.
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terrible.
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My summer job was
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My summer job was
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mind-numbingly tedious.
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My summer job was mind-numbingly tedious.
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