EXPOSITORY ESSAY - SCIENCE FAIR PROJECT-

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Table of Contents 1. TABLE OF CONTENTS 2. FORMATIVE REQUIREMENTS COVER3. BRAINSTORM / RESEARCH (ideas, reference paper,

mind-map) 4. EXAMPLE OF PROJECT (cut/paste from reference paper.)5. GRAPHIC ORGANIZER (flow chart)6. ESSAY MAP 7. ORIGINAL DRAFT: (Name of peer who revised) 8. REVISED DRAFT: (Name of peer who edited)9. PUBLISHED WORK- ORIGINAL 10. RUBRIC (self graded)11. PUBLISHED WORK - TEACHER’S COMMENTS

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Friday 26th November, 2010 Teacher: Neville

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Wanrada Sakornsukon

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Expository Essay- Science Fair Project.(One page essay)

Students are expected to explain the process of a Science Fair Project,

as published in Teaching ESOL Through Science Fair Experiments, by Judie Haynes.

Structure Expository Essay, published on student’s weblog (including all prewriting).

Procedure Students log on to class weblog/ formative page and download the following files: EXPOSITORY SCIENCE FORMATIVE SCIENCE PROJECT

The EXPOSITORY SCIENCE FORMATIVE file should be immediately published onto the student’s weblog.

The above files contain all the information needed to complete this exercise.

Students’ production

By Wednesday 8 th December, 2010 , students will have completed their work.

Students are required to publish updates of their file, progressively.

Teacher will then comment on individual student’s 9. PUBLISHED WORK- ORIGINAL and email it to them for pasting to the final page of their file;11.PUBLISHED WORK - TEACHER’S COMMENTS

Objectives

Students will display knowledge of the elements of an Expository Essay by explaining the process, in logical order, for a science fair experiment.

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PROJECT EXAMPLE

Egg in a BottleQuestionWhat happens when air molecules expand?HypothesisI think that air pressure will make the egg fit through the neck of a bottle.MaterialsHard-boiled eggA glass bottlePiece of paperMatchesProcedure1. Hard boil an egg.2. Take the shell off the egg.3. Light a small piece of paper and drop it into the bottle.4. Put the egg on the neck of the bottle.ResultsThe egg popped into the bottle.ConclusionThe fire makes the air molecules move further apart and expand. The pressure pulls the egg into the bottle.

References: Haynes, J. (2006). River Edge Public Schools River Edge, N.J. Tampa, Florida

BRAINSTORMING, RESEARCH, MIND-MAP

GRAPHIC ORGANIZER

Egg in the bottle

BRAINSTORMING- Egg will pop into the bottle- Air molecules expand- The pressure- Experiments

Question

What happens when air molecules expand ?

Hypothesis

I think that air pressure will make the egg fit through

the neck of a bottle.

Materials

VariableProcedureConclusion

Result Matches

Hard-boiledEgg

A glass bottle

Piece of paper

Air pressure1. Hard boil an egg

2. Take the shell off the egg

3. Light a small piece of paper and drop it into the bottle

4. Put the egg on the neck of the bottle

The fire makes the air molecules move further apart and expand. The pressure pulls the egg into the bottle.

The egg popped into the bottle.

ESSAY MAP

Introduction

Hook, Background, Purpose of Writing, Main ideas

Main idea 2

Hypothesis

Supporting details 2

2.1 I think that air pressure will make the egg fit

through the neck of a bottle.

Conclusion

Summarize Main ideas, Link to P.O.W. Make a point

Main idea 1

Question / problem

Supporting details 1

1.1 What happens when air molecules expand ?

TOPIC: LAST: Conclusion

FIRST: Question/Problem

NEXT: Hypothesis

NEXT: Materials

NEXT: Procedure

NEXT: Table / Graph

NEXT: Analysis of Result

NEXT: Constant & variable

Egg in the bottle

What happens when air molecules expand ?

- Hard-boiled egg- A glass bottle- Piece of paper- Matches

1. Hard boil an egg.2. Take the shell off the egg.3. Light a small piece of paper and drop it into the bottle.4. Put the egg on the neck of the bottle.

Air pressure

The fire makes air molecules expand and that made the pressure pull egg into the bottle.

Present the experiment by making table, graph and take a photo while do this experiment.

The fire makes the air molecules move further apart and expand. The pressure pulls the egg into the bottle.

ORIGINAL DRAFTEgg in the bottle

Do you know (the) air pressure? Do you think the egg can pass the neck of the bottle and pop into the bottle? I think your answer must be ‘NO !’ but don’t I’m going to explain you the process of this experiment from the first step to last step and at last, you will know the conclusion of this experiment. You will know that the egg will pop into the bottle or not.

Main idea 6

Analysis of Result

Main idea 5

Variable of the experiment

Main idea 8

Conclusion

Main Ideas

Support P.O.W. Fact, Explain, Define, Other elements

Main idea 7

Presentation

Do you know air pressure? Do you think the egg can pass the neck of the bottle and pop into the bottle? I think your answer must be ‘NO !’ but don’t I’m going to explain you the process of this experiment from the first step to last step and at last, you will know the conclusion of this experiment. You will know that the egg will pop into the bottle or not.

Main idea 4

Procedure

Main idea 3

Materials needed

Supporting details 44.1 Hard boil an egg4.2 Take the shell off the egg4.3 Light a small piece of paper and drop it into the bottle4.4 Put the egg on the neck of the bottle

Supporting details 66.1 The fire makes air molecules expand and that made the pressure pull egg into the bottle.

Supporting details 3

3.1 Matches3.2 Hard-boiled Egg3.3 A glass bottle3.4 Piece of paper

Supporting details 5

5.1 Air pressure

Supporting details 77.1 Table7.2 Photograph7.3 Graph

Supporting details 88.1 The fire makes the air molecules move further apart and expand. The pressure pulls the egg into the bottle.

Supporting details

Detail supporting Main idea and further describe, explain, define, or give examples

All process that I’ve shown you is called as ‘Scientific method’. Doing the experiment is the way that gives you the knowledge. Like that I did. All process above made me know about air pressure. Everybody can do scientific method also but maybe do in others topic. Doing the experiments should start with select the topic. Next, make hypothesis and preparing materials. Then do it from first step to last step, after doing that we will know

the conclusion of the experiment and think about variable and then present the result of the experiment by the chart, table or photograph

Firstly, we have to select the topic. Thinking which experiments we want to do, which is the most interested. In this case, I selected this experiment ‘Egg in the bottle’. I want to know how can egg pop in the bottle because it’s bigger than the bottle’s neck.

Secondly, making (make up the) hypothesis, it’s the result that we think it will be. It can be true or false but it doesn’t matter. In this experiment, I think that air pressure will make the egg fit through the neck of a bottle.

After that, we have to prepare the materials that we need in this experiment. Should prepare it carefully and completely. This experiment needs hard-boiled egg, a glass bottle, piece of paper and matches.

When you finish preparing the materials, it’s time for doing the experiment. You should be careful and do it step by step. Boil the egg and take the shell off. Then light the piece of paper and drop it into the bottle. After that, put the egg on the bottle’s neck and see what happen.

Then, we should think about the variable. Variable is also important in the experiment. The variable is air pressure. The fire makes air molecules expand and that made the pressure pull egg into the bottle.

After we have done the experiment, the result of the experiment can answer the hypothesis. I observe(d) that the egg can pop into the bottle by air pressure.

Now, the next step is present the experiment. We can present by many ways that’s easy to understand such as present by chart and table or we can use the photograph that we take while we doing this experiment.

We concluded that the fire makes the air molecules move further apart and expand. The pressure pulls the egg into the bottle.

All process that I’ve shown you is called as ‘Scientific method’. Doing the experiment is the way that gives you the knowledge. Like that I did. All process above made me know about air pressure. Everybody can do scientific method also but maybe do (it) in others topic. Doing the experiments should start with select the topic. Next, make hypothesis and preparing materials. Then do it from first step to last step, after doing that we will know the conclusion of the experiment and think about variable and then present the result of the experiment by the chart, table or photograph.

Peer’s name: Phiphatnaree T. No.6

REVISED DRAFTEgg in the bottle

Do you know (the) air pressure? Do you think the egg can pass the mouth of the bottle and pop into the bottle? I think your answer must be ‘NO !’ but don’t I’m going to explain you the process of this experiment from the first step to last step and at last, you will know the conclusion of this experiment. You will know that the egg will pop into the bottle or not.

Firstly, we have to select the topic. Thinking which experiments we want to do, which is the most interested. In this case, I selected this experiment ‘Egg in the bottle’. I want to know how can egg pop in the bottle because it’s bigger than the bottle’s mouth.

Secondly, making (make up the) hypothesis, it’s the result that we think it will be. It can be true or false but it doesn’t matter. In this experiment, I think that air pressure will make the egg fit through the neck of a bottle.

After that, we have to prepare the materials that we need in this experiment. Should prepare it carefully and completely. This experiment needs hard-boiled egg, a glass bottle, piece of paper and matches.

When you finish preparing the materials, it’s time for doing the experiment. You should be careful and do it(in) step by step. Boil the egg and take the shell off. Then light the piece of paper and drop it into the bottle. After that, put the egg on the bottle’s mouth and see what happen.

Then, we should think about the variable. Variable is also important in the experiment. The variable is air pressure. The fire makes air molecules expand and that made the pressure pull egg into the bottle.

After we have done the experiment, the result of the experiment can answer the hypothesis. I observe(d) that the egg can pop into the bottle by air pressure.

Now, the next step is present the experiment. We can present by many ways that’s easy to understand such as present by chart and table or we can use the photograph that we take while we doing this experiment.

We concluded that the fire makes the air molecules move further apart and expand. The pressure pulls the egg into the bottle.

All process that I’ve shown you is called as ‘Scientific method’. Doing the experiment is the way that gives you the knowledge. Like that I did. All process above made me know about air pressure. Everybody can do scientific method also but maybe do (it) in others topic. Doing the experiments should start with select the topic. Next, make hypothesis and preparing materials. Then do it from first step to last step, after doing that we will know the conclusion of the experiment and think about variable and then present the result of the experiment by the chart, table or photograph.

Peer’s name Suparpich S. No.32

Do you know the air pressure? Do you think the egg can pass the mouth of the bottle and pop into the bottle? I think your answer must be ‘NO !’ but I’m going to explain you the process of this experiment from the first step to last step, you will know the conclusion of this experiment. You will know that the egg will pop into the bottle or not.

Firstly, we have to select the topic. Thinking which experiments we want to do, which is the most interested. In this case, I selected this experiment ‘Egg in the bottle’. I want to know how can egg pop in the bottle because it’s bigger than the bottle’s mouth.

Secondly, make up the hypothesis, it’s the result that we think it will be. It can be true or false but it doesn’t matter. In this experiment, I think that air pressure will make the egg fit through the neck of a bottle.

After that, we have to prepare the materials that we need in this experiment. Should prepare it carefully and completely. This experiment needs hard-boiled egg, a glass bottle, piece of paper and matches.

When you finish preparing the materials, it’s time for doing the experiment. You should be careful and do it in step by step. Boil the egg and take the shell off. Then light the piece of paper and drop it into the bottle. After that, put the egg on the bottle’s mouth and see what happen.

Then, we should think about the variable. Variable is also important in the experiment. The variable is air pressure. The fire makes air molecules expand and that made the pressure pull egg into the bottle.

After we have done the experiment, the result of the experiment can answer the hypothesis. I observed that the egg can pop into the bottle by air pressure. Now, the next step is present the experiment. We can present by many ways that easy to understand such as present by chart and table or we can use the photograph that we take while we doing this experiment.

We concluded that the fire makes the air molecules move further apart and expand. The pressure pulls the egg into the bottle.

All process that I’ve shown you is called as ‘Scientific method’. Doing the experiment is the way that gives you the knowledge. Like that I did. All process above made me know about air pressure. Everybody can do scientific method also but do it in others topic. Doing the experiments should start with select the topic. Next, make hypothesis and preparing materials. Then do it from first step to last step, after doing that we will know the conclusion of the experiment and think about variable and then present the result of the experiment by the chart, table or photograph.

Writing by: Wanrada Sakornsukon EP 4/1 NO.27 File name: expository_science_formative Website: http://33663.weebly.com References: - Haynes, J. (2006). River Edge Public Schools River Edge, N.J. Tampa, Florida

Photos : http://activitymama.files.wordpress.com/2008/10/img_1339.jpg http://www.thenakedscientists.com/HTML/uploads/RTEmagicC_EggBottle-match.png.png http://gotoknow.org/file/tomkku/egg.jpg

Expository- Science FairObjective Emerging 1 Developing 2 Accomplished 3 Exemplary 4 Score

PUBLISHING

The writing demonstrates little or no attention to visual presentation elements and is uninviting to the reader.

Limited attention to visual presentation is demonstrated. The writing creates low desire to be read. Reflects many “lost opportunities”. .

Attention to visual presentation elements is strongly exhibited with only a few minor “lost opportunities”

Attention to visual presentation elements is such that the writing has an immediate impact and is highly inviting to the reader.

(Finished look)

Uniform spacing3

Appropriate use of font style, sizes and colors. 4

Appealing use of white space 4

Effective integration of text and illustrations, photos, charts, graphs, maps and tables. 4

Skillful and tasteful use of colors in layout. 4

The blog reflects the personality of the writer. 4

EXPOSITORY ESSAY ELEMENTS

Gives facts. Explains. Steps in a process. Present ideas in logical order, correct sequence.

Writing does not display elements of an Expository Essay

Contains all elements but does not meet

criteria in one or moreAll elements are

present and complete.Expository Structure exceeds requirement 4

ESSAY STRUCTURE

INTRO- contains strong Purpose of Writing.

PARAGRAPHS-Topic sentence, plus supporting ideas and examples. Transitional words used.

CONCLUSION- links back to P.O.W.

Basic Structure is incomplete. Display

little structure.

Structure is generally evident and mostly

correctStructure is complete

Structure exceeds standards and

enhances the writing4