C Paired Poem Comparison KimSoyoonby Soyoon Kim

WORD COUNT 1196

CHARACTER COUNT 5875

TIME SUBMITTED 16-OCT-2013 01:30AM

PAPER ID 362368509

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PEERMARK REPORT

QUESTION 1 - CHECK THE TITLE. IS IT INTERESTING? DOES IT MAKE YOU WANT TO READ ON?

1 = Boring, 4 = Very interesting

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QUESTION 2 - AT WHICH POINT DID YOU FEEL MOST INTERESTED BY THIS PIECE? WHENLEAST? EXPLAIN.

The most interesting point in this writing would be the introduction and the title. The title seems tograb the reader's attention since the reader would start wondering what this writing would be about.The hook of the introduction seems to get the reader even more persuaded into reading this type ofwriting. It would have been better if you had made the differences between the two poems moreclearer in the body paragraph. I admire of how you organized your paragraphs, but I generally thinkthat it would have been better if you separated the paragraphs into similarities and differences sothat the reader would be able to identify these more easily

QUESTION 3 - DOES THIS PAPER SUSTAIN A COHERENT POINT OF VIEW? WHY OR WHY NOT?

This paper does an excellent job of sustaining reasonable point of view. First, I see no changes orusage of "I, we or you" The general voice of this paper lets the reader know that it is the point ofview of the writer.

QUESTION 4 - COULD THE READABILITY, CLARITY, OR STYLE OF THIS PAPER BE IMPROVED?HOW?

The style of the introduction and conclusion seems to be good. But the body paragraphs couldhave been more clear if the similarities and the differences were more easily identifiable. In the 3rdbody paragraph you start off talking about the differences and then you suddenly start off talkingabout similarities. I believe that you do this also in the 4th body paragraph where you start off talkingabout similarities and then you suddenly begin with "however" and talk about the differences. Thistends to confuse the reader.

QUESTION 5 - RATE THE STRENGTH OF THIS PAPER'S THESIS.

1 = very weak, 5 = very strong

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QUESTION 6 - CAN THE CONCLUSION OF THIS PAPER BE CONVINCINGLY DRAWN FROM THETHESIS AND THE ARGUMENT MADE IN THE BODY OF THE PAPER? WHY OR WHY NOT?

The conclusion seems to do a good job in concluding your points overall. The rewording of thethesis is good and I believe that the overall conclusion is strong and you end this paper fairly well.

QUESTION 7 - DOES THE LOGIC OF THIS PAPER'S ARGUMENT EVER FALL FLAT? WHERE?WHAT MIGHT BE DONE TO CORRECT THIS?

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The logic of this paper's argument tend to tends to fall on the point of view of the writer. The logic isconsistent.

QUESTION 8 - DO YOU FEEL THIS PAPER RELIES ON EVIDENCE, OR ON OPINION OR INTUITION?IF THE LATTER, CITE EXAMPLES OF WHERE THIS PAPER RELIES ON OPINION AND INTUITIONAND GIVE SUGGESTIONS AS TO HOW THE WRITER CAN WRITE MORE OBJECTIVELY.

I believe that this paper relies on both evidence and opinion since there is quotation from the poemitself and the different points of view of the writer.

QUESTION 9 - HOW SMOOTHLY DOES THIS PAPER INTEGRATE EXAMPLES INTO ITS OWNARGUMENT? DOES IT CLEARLY ILLUSTRATE CONNECTIONS BETWEEN THE EVIDENCE IT CITESAND THE IDEAS THEY SUPPORT, OR DOES IT MERELY ASSUME THEM? EXPLAIN.

This paper puts in examples between paragraphs fairly well and places these example in goodspots. They support the writer's point of view.

QUESTION 10 - DOES THIS PAPER ADEQUATELY ADDRESS LOGICAL COUNTERCLAIMS?

This paper adequately addresses logical counterclaims.

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1. Nice beginning for your topic sentence!!

2. to take action???

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3. You start off with "on the flip-side" which hints that you will start discussing thedifferences, but you suddenly being with "similar" at the next sentence. I think you

should change the sentence order a bit.

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4. Suddenly "however" <br>?????

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5. repetition

6. Nice Concluding phrase.