One Pager Recommendations

One Pagers• Mrs. Lund’s proofreading marks• One Pager: Take 5 minutes to reread your

essay along with the comments, both on the essay and on the rubric.

• Read the descriptors on the rubric for the level you reached.

One Pager Feedback• Rubric Focus was Criterion C: Appreciation

of the Author’s Choices. o Nearly all of you kept the author in mind.

Good job!• How you can improve on Criterion C

o Do more with your support. Go deep. Interpret thoroughly rather than skimming the surface and stating the obvious.

o What is the effect of the choices? That’s where you get to appreciation.

Conciseness• This was our language & style focus.

Many of you worked hard to be concise. But we can do better!oAvoid passive voiceoRead aloud. Listen to your essay. If

it sounds awkward or wordy, revise until it sounds right.

oUse Word’s Grammar & Style function to identify wordiness, passive voice, etc. in your writing and revise

If you have trouble identifying passive voice,

wordiness, or other style issues in your writing…• Use Word’s Grammar and Style functionNew Word:File: Options: Proofing: Writing Style: Grammar and Style: OptionsOlder Word: Grammar and Style: Options

• In both cases, check boxes for problems you are having (passive voice, wordiness, etc.)

Rubric Focus Moving Forward

• Criterion C: Not just demonstrating that you can identify the author’s choices, but showing appreciation of the author’s choices…fully discussing them and their effects

Language & Style Focuses

• Identifying and removing most passive voice• How to use semicolons, colons and dashes

Reflection and Goal Setting

• What’s one thing I did well in this essay?• What was one weakness in this essay?• Look back at your initial writing goals for the

year (Sept. 15). How are you progressing towards them?

• Using feedback and the rubric, set two specific, attainable goals you’d like to work towards in your next piece of writing. These may be the same goals or new goals. For example:

1. I want to fully use my support by discussing the effects of the author’s choices. 2. I want to remove passive voice from my writing and remember to write in active voice.

Confusion over “tone” and “mood”

• Review: Definitions• Identify “tone” and “mood” in the passage

from the novel (end of Part 1)o Think “tone of voice”. Use an adjective to

define the tone. Does the tone shift? Be ready to support your ideas.

o What is the mood of this section? How does Schlink create the mood? Is there a relationship between tone and mood?