Level 5 exemplars and comments Paper 1 Sample 1: Part I ... · Sample 2: Section A, Question 1. Comments (i) A very strong response in the way it is structured, developed and supported

Level 5 exemplars and comments

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Part I, Section A, Question 4

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This response examines a great variety of symbols, including the conch, the fire, the meat, the beast

and Piggy’s glasses, demonstrating a good understanding of their implications and the ways they

reinforce themes and contribute to plot development in Lord of the Flies. The section on how certain

symbols are associated with key characters is also very detailed, but could have been further

enhanced by indicating clearly what symbols Simon is connected with, and how they serve to reveal

his character.

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Part II, Question 22

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This insightful essay explores how mental and physical suffering are presented in Othello and The

Painted Veil from a wide range of perspectives. It shows the candidate’s thorough grasp of the topic

by analysing not only the characters’ thoughts and actions, their speeches and facial expressions, but

also how cinematography and imagery are used to create impact. It also clearly distinguishes how

these forms of suffering lead to different endings in the two texts.

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Section B, Question 5

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(i) A very well-written, analytical response here. Points out similarities and differences in the

external influences. Commentary about sexual connotations in both poems very impressive.

An understanding of relevant poetic techniques is also woven into the answer.

(ii) Correctly identifies voice of “the Knight” and explains this as a structuring device,

providing insight into his predicament.

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Section A, Question 1

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(i) A very strong response in the way it is structured, developed and supported throughout.

This candidate points out the more obvious strategies but develops the answer further in

identifying Iago’s use of ambiguity, facial expressions, etc.

(ii) Demonstrates a clear understanding of not only Othello’s precise feelings here, but also the

ironic significance and foreshadowing in terms of later plot events.

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Extended Essay: Narrative and Voice in The Catcher in the Rye

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The candidate has established a central thesis right at the beginning and succeeds in following this

line of argument throughout the essay. The essay follows a central argument which is

well-substantiated with detailed textual references. The essay displays a very thorough

understanding of the text, especially the narrative styles of the author. Ideas are presented succinctly

and confidently and are well-supported. The writing style is analytical and the essay is

well-structured. Completely fulfills the requirement of the task.

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Creative Writing: Head in the Clouds

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An original short story with a sense of humour and suspense maintained throughout. The choice of

diction and description of the setting are appropriate to the theme and plot. Some thoughts are put

into developing the main character and the storyline. The story is well-structured with a twist of plot

towards the end. The ending echoes with the theme and the opening of the story. Engages the reader.

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Level 5 exemplars and comments Paper 1 Sample 1: Part I ... · Sample 2: Section A, Question 1. Comments (i) A very strong response in the way it is structured, developed and supported