Extended Constructed Extended Constructed ResponseResponse

A Memorable ExperienceA Memorable Experience

Personal NarrativePersonal Narrative

We will discuss two ways to add We will discuss two ways to add detail to your writing. detail to your writing.

Personal NarrativePersonal NarrativeWe will discuss two ways to add We will discuss two ways to add

detail to your writing. detail to your writing.

This will apply to your memorable This will apply to your memorable experience writing, as well as all experience writing, as well as all other writing we do in this class and other writing we do in this class and other classes. other classes.

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““Writers are like photographers with Writers are like photographers with giant zoom lenses, observing life in giant zoom lenses, observing life in incredibly fine detail, pulling back to incredibly fine detail, pulling back to make sweeping generalizations, then make sweeping generalizations, then zooming in again to make those zooming in again to make those generalizations come alive with generalizations come alive with detail….”detail….”

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When developing your writing, take a When developing your writing, take a “snapshot” with a magic camera that “snapshot” with a magic camera that not only sees sights, but can record not only sees sights, but can record smells, sounds, colors, and light. smells, sounds, colors, and light.

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When developing your writing, take a When developing your writing, take a “snapshot” with a magic camera that “snapshot” with a magic camera that not only sees sights, but can record not only sees sights, but can record smells, sounds, colors, and light.smells, sounds, colors, and light.

In your own piece, be sure to use as In your own piece, be sure to use as many of the five senses as possible- many of the five senses as possible- sight, smell, sound, feel, taste.sight, smell, sound, feel, taste.

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This summer I went to the pool with my This summer I went to the pool with my friends to swim. When I got there I dove friends to swim. When I got there I dove into the water. Then I played Marco Polo into the water. Then I played Marco Polo with my friends in the pool for a long time. with my friends in the pool for a long time. It was fun playing Marco Polo. I tried my It was fun playing Marco Polo. I tried my hardest not to get caught by the person hardest not to get caught by the person who was it. After we played Marco Polo we who was it. After we played Marco Polo we decided to dive off the high dive It took a decided to dive off the high dive It took a lot of my nerve, but I did it. My dive was lot of my nerve, but I did it. My dive was pretty good too. I can’t wait to go to the pretty good too. I can’t wait to go to the pool again next summer with my friends.pool again next summer with my friends.

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1.1. This summer I went to the pool with my friends to swim. This summer I went to the pool with my friends to swim. 2.2. When I got there I dove into the water. When I got there I dove into the water. 3.3. Then I played Marco Polo with my friends in the pool for Then I played Marco Polo with my friends in the pool for

a long time.a long time.4.4. It was fun playing Marco Polo.It was fun playing Marco Polo.5.5. I tried my hardest not to get caught by the person who I tried my hardest not to get caught by the person who

was it.was it.6.6. After we played Marco Polo we decided to dive off the After we played Marco Polo we decided to dive off the

high dive.high dive.7.7. It took a lot of my nerve, but I did it.It took a lot of my nerve, but I did it.8.8. My dive was pretty good too.My dive was pretty good too.9.9. I can’t wait to go to the pool again next summer with I can’t wait to go to the pool again next summer with

my friends.my friends.

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““Just as writers make physical Just as writers make physical snapshots, they can also take a snapshots, they can also take a snapshot of the thoughts in their snapshot of the thoughts in their characters’ heads, or in their own characters’ heads, or in their own mind…, mind…,

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A thoughtshot in fiction is simply a look A thoughtshot in fiction is simply a look at what a character is thinking and at what a character is thinking and feeling…feeling…

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Similarly, in a personal narrative a Similarly, in a personal narrative a thoughtshot is reflections, thoughts, thoughtshot is reflections, thoughts, feelings, opinions of the author.”feelings, opinions of the author.”

When creating a thoughtshot, start the When creating a thoughtshot, start the thought with beginnings like “I thought with beginnings like “I knew…” or “I thought to myself…”knew…” or “I thought to myself…”

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1.1. This summer I went to the pool with my friends to swim. This summer I went to the pool with my friends to swim. 2.2. When I got there I dove into the water. When I got there I dove into the water. 3.3. Then I played Marco Polo with my friends in the pool for Then I played Marco Polo with my friends in the pool for

a long time.a long time.4.4. It was fun playing Marco Polo.It was fun playing Marco Polo.5.5. I tried my hardest not to get caught by the person who I tried my hardest not to get caught by the person who

was it.was it.6.6. After we played Marco Polo we decided to dive off the After we played Marco Polo we decided to dive off the

high dive.high dive.7.7. It took a lot of my nerve, but I did it.It took a lot of my nerve, but I did it.8.8. My dive was pretty good too.My dive was pretty good too.9.9. I can’t wait to go to the pool again next summer with I can’t wait to go to the pool again next summer with

my friends.my friends.

Your turn!Your turn!

We will be creating a chart that We will be creating a chart that divides your “memorable divides your “memorable experience” into three parts- experience” into three parts- beginning, middle, and end.beginning, middle, and end.

Your turn!Your turn!

We will be creating a chart that We will be creating a chart that divides your “memorable divides your “memorable experience” into three parts- experience” into three parts- beginning, middle, and end.beginning, middle, and end.

You will develop a snapshot and a You will develop a snapshot and a thoughtshot for each part.thoughtshot for each part.

Your turn!Your turn!

We will be creating a chart that divides We will be creating a chart that divides your “memorable experience” into your “memorable experience” into three parts- beginning, middle, and end.three parts- beginning, middle, and end.

You will develop a snapshot and a You will develop a snapshot and a thoughtshot for each part of your story.thoughtshot for each part of your story.

You may work with a partner to create You may work with a partner to create your snapshots and thoughtshots your snapshots and thoughtshots together.together.

Your turn!Your turn!What What happened?happened?

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