Day 1

Elimination of double comparisonCorrect placement of B.C. /A.D.

Use of hyphen with compound adjectiveElimination of redundancy

The most earliest record of whaling as an organized business dates from around 875 A.D.

Two year whaling voyages were so common that the whole entire regions were depleted of whales.

Day 1 mostThe earliest record of whaling as an organized business dates from around A.D. 875.

Elimination of double comparisonCorrect placement of B.C. /A.D.

wholeTwo-year whaling voyages were so common that the entire regions were depleted of whales.

Use of hyphen with compound adjectiveElimination of redundancy

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Day 2

Use of semicolons in a series containing commas

Use of comma after introductory prepositional phrase for clarity

Spelling out numbers through one hundred

American whaling took place from Nantucket and Cape Cod, Massachusetts, New London, Connecticut, San Francisco, California, and Sag Harbor, New York.

In all more than 70 American ports sent out whalers.

Day 2

American whaling took place from Nantucket and Cape Cod, Massachusetts; New London, Connecticut; San Francisco, California; and Sag Harbor, New York.

Use of semicolons in a series containing commas

In all, more than seventy American ports sent out whalers.

Use of comma after introductory prepositional phrase for claritySpelling out numbers through one hundred

Day 3

Use of comma in large numbers expressed in numerals

Correct past verb tenseCombining sentences

The peak year for American whaling was 1846, when 736 vessels and 70000 people were engaged in the industry.

The decline in whaling was accelerated by the fact that there were fewer whales. The decline begun in 1847.

Day 3

The peak year for American whaling was 1846, when 736 vessels and 70,000 people were engaged in the industry.

Use of comma in large numbers expressed in numerals

The decline in whaling, which began in 1847, was accelerated by the fact that there were fewer whales.

Correct past verb tenseCombining sentences

Day 4

Sailing off of the shore of Long Island, a school of whales was seen.

Controlling endangered species, such as the whale, is everyones responsibility.

Correction of dangling modifier

Elimination of unnecessary prepositionUse of active voice to improve styleUse of apostrophe to show possession

Day 4 ofSailing off the shore of Long Island, we saw a school of whales.

Correction of dangling modifierElimination of unnecessary prepositionUse of active voice to improve style

Controlling endangered species, such as the whale, is everyone’s responsibility.

Use of apostrophe to show possession

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Day 5

Capitalization of name of organizationUse of comma to separate parts of an address

Correct subordinating conjunction

In 1946, the international whaling commission was established in Washington D.C.

This organization limits the number of whales that can be killed so the species will not become extinct.

Day 5

In 1946, the International Whaling Commission was established in Washington, D.C.

Capitalization of name of organizationUse of comma to separate parts of an address

This organization limits the number of whales that can be killed so that the species will not become extinct.

Correct subordinating conjunction