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Research Proposal

Annotated Translation

Jumaliyati

Batch 12

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CHAPTER I

INTRODUCTION

1.1 Background of the Research

In this part of the study the researcher is going to describe the

justification of the research, relevant researches done, position of the

research, and significance of the research.

1.1.1 Justfcaton of the Research

In this study, the researcher wants to find out the difficulties

during the process of translation from English into Indonesian faced by the

translator (researcher) by annotating several words, phrases, clauses or

sentences that pose problems for the researcher (translator).

This area, namely annotated translation from one language into

another, is chosen by the researcher in order to widen her experience in

translation which is in line with her study and to detect the problems

emerging during the process of translation. The problems encountered will

be then analye and given plausible reasons for their translation. The

translation from English into Indonesian is elected due to the familiarity of

the language, Indonesian, mostly shown by the researcher as her native

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language. The boo! entitledJillians Escapeby "ennifer #al! is ta!en up

to be translated as it is one of online novels with in e$boo! form that has

not been translated by anyone. The reason in choosing this novel is

derived from the translator%s interest in a story where the novel based on

the author%s imagination in writing the novel about a woman who was the

proud mother of three beautiful children, at twenty$eight. &he was married

to the 'll merican uy' and they lived in an average home high in the

mountains. &he lived the merican dream, but underneath the facade, a

different picture emerged.

It is important to carry out this research as annotated translation

applies in practical sense the theories the researcher has studied in class.

1.1.! Re"e#ant Researches

*elevant researches that using the method of annotated translation

which is related to this research are summarie in a table below+

No. $ear Researcher Tt"e of the research Te%t Annotated

1 -- /unie! /ovia 0andra 1Terjemahan Beranotasi: Novel

The Mango Season.

n English novel+

The Mango Season.

-- 2osepha *espati 1Terjemahan Beranotasi:

Novel Under the Dragon :

Travels in a Betrayed Land.

n English novel+

Under the

Dragon : Travels

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in a Betrayed

Land.

3 --4 Tommy ndrian Terjemahan 5eranotasi !e dalam

5ahasa Indonesia/ovel!een

o" Ba##le !aryaMeg $a#ot

n English /ovel+

!een o" Ba##le

6 --4 7inny E!a 8eidasari nnotated Translation of Speed

o" Tr!st

management

boo!+ Speed o" Tr!st

9 --4 &uratni n nnotated Translation ofMy

Lover My %riend

n English novel+

My Lover My %riend

: --4 ;erlina urwanto n nnotated Translation of

Smart Medicine "or a )ealthier

$hild

medical boo!+

Smart Medicine "or

a )ealthier $hild

= --= ?ijanar!o gus

?ibowo

n nnotated Translation of

*lay to (o!r Strength

management

boo!+*lay to (o!r

Strength

@- --= &holihin n nnotated Translation of

Techni+!e and *rinciple in

n Educational

boo!+ Techni+!e

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Lang!age Teaching ,Teaching

Techni+!es in English as Second

Lang!age-

and *rinciple in

Lang!age Teaching

,Teaching

Techni+!es in

English as Second

Lang!age-

@@ --=


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#al!. This research concerns an analysis of translating English text into

Indonesian focusing on the giving annotation of the translation of the

translation strategies that are employed in the process of translation.

1.1.' (gnfcance of the Research

The result of this research can be used as input data by the

students of translation and translators in general as the difficulties during

the process of translation will be presented. The problems faced by the

researcher will be appeared by other translators who translate other text,

and the result of this research will give the additional solution for other

translators.

1.! Pro)"e* (tate*ent

a. ?hat are the difficulties encountered by the researcher during the

process of translationB

b. ;ow are the difficulties solved in the translationB

1.& Pur+ose of the Research

5ased on the problem mentioned above, the purpose of this

research is+

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a. to attain factual information concerning the problems faced by the

researcher in the course of translating the source text.

b. to describe the difficulty solved in the translation.

1.' (co+e of the Research

The research is only translating a source text, English, into a

target text, Indonesian, for as many as fifteen thousand words and at the

same time investigating and analying the problems that researcher found

in the process of translation.

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I. RE,IE- O RE/ATED /ITERATURE

I.1. Theoretca" Re#e0

In carrying out this research, the researcher needs to refer to some

theories, they will be discussed in this chapter.

!.1.! Theor of Persona" Pronoun

8arcella #ran! (@=), in her boo!Modern English, stated about

personal pronouns.

>ersonal pronouns refer to+

thespea'er, called the"irst person

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&ingularCI(spelled with a capital letter)

#or example+ 1?hat am Idoing hereBD (correct)

1?hat am doing hereBD (wrong)

!.1.& Theor ofPronomina Persona Pertama Tunggal

The theory of pronominapersona petama t!nggal is explained in

;asan lwi%s 5oo! Tata Bahasa Ba'! Bahasa 0ndonesia.

;asan lwi (--3) stated that+

1pronomina a'! le#ih !m!m dipa'ai dalam pem#icaraan !nt!'

men!nj!''an tenggang rasa terhadap sesama orang m!da/ 1

*ersona pertama a'! le#ih #anya' dipa'ai dalam pem#icaraan

#atin dan dalam sit!asi yang tida' "ormal dan le#ih #anya'

men!nj!n''an 'ea'ra#an antara pem#icara2pen!lis dan

pendengar2pem#aca/D (pp.9-$9@)

!.1.' Theor ofPronomina Persona Ketiga Tunggal

;asal lwi, et al(--3) found that+

*ersona 'etiga 3nya j!ga dipa'ai !nt!' s!#ject dalam 'alimat topi'4

'omen/

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Dalam 'alimat yang dinama'an topi'4'omen seperti5 s!#je'nya har!s

ditandai dengan pronomina 3nya/

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Dalam 6!j!d 3nya5 pronominal ini sering j!ga dipa'ai hanya se#agai

penanda 'eta'ri"an s!at! nomina ata! nominal/(pp. 9:$9).

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;asan lwi%s arti!ula theory+

rti!ula yang bersifat gelar pada umumnya bertalian dengan orang atau

hal yang dianggap bermartabat. 5eri!ut ini jenis$jenisnya+

(a) sang+ Hntu! manusia atau benda uni! dengan ma!sud untu!

meninggi!an martabat !adang$!adang juga dipa!ai dalam gurauan

atau sindiran. (;asan lwi, --@, 3-6$3-9)

!.1.4 Theor of Natura"5aton

/ida and Taber (@=:=) stated that 1Translation is the process of

reproducing in the receptor language the closest natural eJuivalent of the

source language message, first in terms of meaning and secondly in terms

of style.D (p. @), e.g. the word read... in the sentence 1 bric! and

stone monument near the entrance read+D is translated into

tertu"skan in the sentence 1&ebuah tugu batu bata di de!at pintu masu!

bangunan tertu"skan+D


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trees in the sentence 1she stopped in front of a gro#e of treesD is

translated into 1ia berhenti di depan +e+ohonan....D

ctually the phrase a gro#e of the trees means seke"o*+ok

+ohon ang tu*)uh )ersa*a. &o the translation 1ia berhenti di

depan seke"o*+ok+ohon ang tu*)uh )ersa*aD does not sound

natural. That is why it is translated into 1ia berhenti di depan

+e+ohonan....D

!.1.6 Theor of Undertrans"aton

Auff(@=4@) stated that 1 a translation may be shorter than the

original D (p. ), e.g. the clause consisting of eight words A knot )egan

to gro0 n her sto*ach is translated into the clause consisting of three

words Perutna terasa *u"as.

/ewmar! (@=4@) stated that 1a communicative translation is

li!ely to be simpler, clearer, more directconforming to a particular

register of language, tending to undertranslate.D (p. 3=), e.g. an idiom

kck the )ucket in a sentence 1&uicide was a pretty pathetic way to

kck the )ucket.D is translated into 15unuh diri merupa!an cara yang

sangat menyedih!an untu! *at.D n idiom kck the )ucket which

consists of three words is translated into one word *at which is

simpler, clearer and more direct compared with the literally means

tendang e*)er.

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s /ewmar! said undertranslation, Auff said too few words.

/ida and Taber (@=4) mention that 1There are Juite naturally

some expressions which are reduced in the process of transfer from one

language to anotherD (p. @:4).

E%a*+"e 12

1?hat sense do you ma!e of it, /ic!BD "ac! as!ed me.D is translated into

1Men!r!tm! #agaimana5 Nic'=> tanya Jac' pada saya.D KIIT8, p.@L

The interrogative sentence M-hat sense do ou *ake of tB% consists

of seven words and is translated into two words M... Menurutmu

bagaimana//.% Thus the translation is shorter than the original.

E%a*+"e !2

The phrase M7 s a)out to )eco*e 7% in the sentence 1Nh, and /ic!

&tone is about to become faithful husband and father.D is translated into

M calon% M?h5 dan Nic' Stone calons!ami dan ayah yang setia.%, so it

is apparent that the translation is much shorter than the source language.

/ewmar! (@=4:) also mentioned that Denerally, a communicative

translation is li!ely to be smoother, simpler, clearer, more direct, more

conventional, conforming to a particular register of language, tending to

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!nder4translate, i.e. to use more generic, hold$all terms in difficult

passagesD (p. 3=).

E%a*+"e 12

1I lost that battle too.D is translated into MSaya 'alah j!ga/%

The sentence I "ost that )att"e too. consists of five words and is translated

into three words MSaya kalah juga/% which is apparently shorter.

E%a*+"e !2

MThey *ade ther a++earanceon the stage to perform a classic drama

8acbeth%. The sentence is translated into


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Auff (@==-) stated that 1Idiomatic expressions are notoriously

untranslatable.

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If the expressions cannot be directly translated

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Hse a non$idiomatic or plain prose translation.D (p.@@), for example, an idiom

1...take on...D in the sentence 1...she began to Juestion her decision to take

onthe position at such a dangerous place.D is translated into 1... ia mulai

mempertanya!an !eputusannya untu! *ener*a!edudu!an di tempat

yang berbahaya ini.D

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Thus the active ... has not changed et ...is altered into the passive form

... belum diubah ...

0atford (@=6) mentioned that 1In grammar, structure shifts can

occur at all ran!sD. (p. ).

E%a*+"e 12

M&o what%d that guy doBD% KIIT8, p.@L, is translated into MJadi5 apa yang

dila'!'an orang it!=%/Thus, the active ... do 7is translated into a passive

...dilakukan ...

E%a*+"e !2

The active voice Mas!% in the sentence MThere wasn%t much else "ac! could

ask.% is translated into the passive construction M... dtanakan ...%in the

sentence %Tida' #anya' yang #isa ditanyakanoleh Jac'/% KIIT8, p.@=L


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and I had us in the air in five minutes.%, Therefore, the translation becomes

MJac' meny!r!h saya !nt!' mendarat'anpesawat% so there is a change

of cohesion, namely from the third personal pronoun Mit% into a noun

Mpesa6at%. Thus, the word Mit% is a cohesive device.

E%a*+"e !2

M the same picture as the one shethrew at me., is translated into M

gam#ar ser!pa yang dilemparLaurie'epada saya/

The word Mshe% in the same picture as the one shethrew at me. refers to

M

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@ohesi sering p!la dicipta'an dengan mema'ai 'ata yang ma'nanya sama

se'ali #er#eda dengan ma'na 'ata yang diac!nya/ ?'an tetapi5 yang

penting dalam hal ini ialah #ah6a 'ata yang diganti'an dan 'ata

pengganti men!nj!' 'e re"eren yang sama(pp. 6, 6=).

E%a*+"e 1+

MItstill loo!ed and felt li!e a cop car, which made me very

uncomfortable.% from the previous sentence MI even tried to ta!e my

#irebird instead of his =arauder.% The sentence is translated intoMMobil

Maraudernyamasih 'elihatan dan terasa seperti mo#il polisi5 yang mem#!at saya sangat tida' nyaman/The

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I.!. Defnton of Ter*s

I.!.1. Annotated Trans"aton

This study applies the term of annotated translation. ?hat is meant by

annotated translation in this studyB ?illiams and 0hesterman (--)

explained+

translation with a commentary (or annotated translation) is a form of

introspective and retrospective research where you yourself translate a

text and, at the same time, write a commentary on your own translation

process. This commentary will include some discussion of the

translation assignment, an analysis of aspects of the source text, and a

reasoned justification of the !inds of solutions you arrived at for

particular !inds of translation problems. Nne value of such research

lies in the contribution that increased self awareness can ma!e to

translation Juality. 2ou might also want to show whether you have

found any helpful guidelines for your translation decisions in what you

have read in Translation &tudies. (p.)

!.!.!. Intros+ect#e and Retros+ect#e (tudes

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The researcher also uses the terms of introspective and retrospective

studies. These definitions of terms are ta!en from ?ebsterGs Third /ew

International Aictionary (@==3).

@. Introspection is 'the examination of oneGs own thought and feeling

a loo!ing into oneself+ self$examination also such examination

including oneGs sensory and perceptual experience especially

underta!en under controlled conditions of experiment opposed to

retrospection.' nd introspective is 'of or belonging to

introspection employing, mar!ed by, or tending to introspection'

(p. @@4). &o the term of introspective study is a study that

investigates oneGs own thought and feelings+ a loo!ing into oneself

in line with translation+ as!ing one$self in which part the researcher

had difficulty and what the solutions are.

. *etrospection is 'an observation of mental processes through'

primal memory immediately after their occurrence.' In addition,

retrospective is 'contemplative of or relative to past events

characteried by, given to, or indulging in retrospection' (p. @=6@).

&o, the term of retrospective study is a study where the researcher is

contemplating of what theories and strategies she has used in the

process of translating.

!.!.!. Categor5aton and C"assfcaton

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?il!inson (---) stated that 1the data is very important to be

classified in order to ma!e it ready for analysis.

It refers as cleaning or organiing data.D (p. 4)

In this study, the term Mtranslator% and Mresearcher% is

interchangeable. In this research, the researcher also translates the

novel from the source of the data. Therefore when we tal! about the

researcher, we also tal! about the translator.

The term Mdifficulty% and Mproblem% is also interchangeable.

?hen the researcher tal!s about the difficulty of the research, it is also

referring to the problem of the research.

The term Manalysis% and Mannotation% is interchangeable. ?hen

the researcher analyes the data, the researcher also annotates the data.

II. RE(EARCH =ETHOD

This is an introspective and retrospective research where the

researcher herself translates the text and, at the same time, writes a

commentary on her own translation process.

II.1. Research Desgn

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The process of this study will be as follows+

@. The sources text is read thoroughly to give a full understanding

of the content.

. Independently the researcher translates the source text into

Indonesia (the source is in English)

3. t the same time she mar!s down the words, phrases, clauses,

sentences or any other language component that has becomes a

problem in the process of translating.

6. Auring the course of translating the text, the researcher regularly

consults her advisor to discuss problems she encounters

referring to the tas! underta!en.

9. These problematic items should be analyed and the researcher

then should give plausible reasons as to the solving of these

problems.

II.!. (ource of the Data

The source of the data in this research isJillians Escapeby

"ennifer #al!. The e$boo! was published by


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II.&. Co""ecton of the Data

The researcher collected the data during the process of translating

the source text from the target text. The researcher collected the data being

investigated (problems under study).

II.'. Ana"ss of Data

The collected data will then be categoried and classified in order

to be analyed in line with the relevant translation theories.

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I,. ANNOTATION AND ANA/$(I(

'.1 (ource Te%t and Its Trans"aton

&NH*0E TEOT (E/


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medieval castle.

The building was constructed of red

sandstone and bristled with turrets and

false battlements.

5attlement$li!e guard towers, rising

above the four corners of the wall and

the beautiful mountain bac!drop,

completed the picture of a grim

fortress.

bric! and stone monument near the

entrance read+ 1;illcrest 0orrectional

#acility, Effective 0orrectional

&ervices through Teamwor! and

Aedication.D

A knot )egan to gro0 n her sto*ach

as she turned off the ignition of her car.

abad pertengahan.

5angunan tersebut dibangun dengan

batu pasir merah dan dipenuh dengan

menara !ecil dan benteng palsu.

8enara penjaga seperti benteng, yang

menjulang di atas empat sudut dinding

dan gunung yang indah sebagai latar

bela!ang, meleng!api gambaran sebuah

benteng suram.

&ebuah tugu batu bata di de!at pintu

masu! bangunan tertu"skan+ 'emasyara!atan ;illcrest,


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&lowly, "illian opened her car door and

stepped out of her green &aturn.

s she wal!ed across the lot to the

reception entrance, she stopped in front

of a grove of trees surrounding a

memorial.

;er throat tightened as she read the

inscription on the mar!er, 1In honor of

those nd#dua"swho lost their lives

defending the honor of ;illcrest.

?e will never forget your ultimate

sacrifice protecting the safety of our

state.D

s "illian left the memorial, she began

to Juestion her decision to take onthe

position at such a dangerous place.

&aturn hijaunya.

Feti!a ia berjalan melewati tempat

par!ir menuju pintu masu!, ia berhenti

di depan pepohonan yang mengelilingi

sebuah prasasti.

Tenggoro!annya terce!at saat ia

membaca tulisan di prasasti, 'Hntu!

menghormati *erekayang !ehilangan

nyawa demi membela !ehormatan

;illcrest.

Fami tida! a!an pernah melupa!an

pengorbanan luar biasa !alian demi

melindungi !eamanan negara bagian

!ita.'

Feti!a "illian meninggal!an prasasti

tersebut, ia mulai mempertanya!an

!eputusannya untu! *ener*a

!edudu!an di tempat yang berbahaya

ini.

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&he had three small children at home.

&he wondered who would care for

them if something were to happen to

her.

s the woman arrived at the reception

door she too! a deep breath and

reached for the handle.

Nnce inside, she stepped over to the

desk, where an officer too! her name

and directed the pretty auburn$haired

woman to ta!e a seat in the lobby.

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?e are glad to have you here.D

"illian returned the woman%s warm

smile as she turned around to seat

herself in the waiting area.

&he had just set herpurse on the chair

beside her when she heard the soft

clic! of the door behind her.

Puic!ly she turned to see a tall,

uniformed man standing in the

doorway.

12ou must be "illianBD the man

inJuired, smiling at the woman n

front of h*.

&he Juic!ly rose to her feet and wal!ed

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;e he"d hs hand outto sha!e "illian%s

hand, her pale s!in a stri!ing contrast

to the man%s deep ebony complexion.

"illian forced a nervous smile as she

Juietly said, 1I am pleased to meet you,

anggil saja a!u Tom.

Ai !antor !ami sulit untu! tetap

bersi!ap formal terlalu lama.'

&ementara Tom dan "illian berjalan

menyusuri gang panjang menuju !amp

tahanan beru!uran sedang, rasa

mulasnya mulai ber!urang saat acara

!eliling dan cerita Tom !eti!a berada di

lembaga pemasyara!atan tersebut mulai

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the long corridor to the medium

custody compound, she felt the !not in

her stomach begin to loosen as Tom%s

tour and stories about his time in the

correctional facility began to set her

fears at ease.

The young woman 0as a*a5edby the

attractive charcoal drawings that lined

the walls leading to the control center.

1These drawings were all made by our

inmate arts Q crafts classes,D Tom told

"illian with a glint of pride in his dar!

eyes.

t the end of the hallway, the officer

and the young woman ca*e to a sto+

in front of a large steel and glass

s"dng door.

1This is the control center,D Tom told

membuat !eta!utannya ber!urang.

?anita muda tersebut *engagu*

berbagai gambar arang menari! yang

berjajar di dinding menuju !e ruang

pengawasan.

'&emua gambar ini dibuat oleh

narapidana !ami di !elas seni Q

!erajinan,' dengan bangga Tom

mencerita!annya !epada "illian.

Ai ujung lorong, opsir dan wanita muda

tersebut )erhentdi depan +ntu geser

)esar ang ter)uat darbaja dan !aca.

'Ini ruang pengawasan,' Tom

memberitahu !aryawan barunayang

merasa ingin tahu.

Feti!a pintu bergeser terbu!a, "illian

dan Tom masu! !e dalam sebuah

ruangan kaca )erge"e*)ung.

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hscurious new employee.

s the door slid open, "illian and Tom

stepped into a room 0here a g"ass

)u))"e greeted the*.

&uddenly, there was a loud slam as the

door shut behind "illian, and she

jumped in surprise.

Tom removed his identification card

from his wallet and held tto the

window for the officer inside the

bubble to see.

1lways show your IA here.

That is a facility policy to protect all of

our safety,D hesaid reassuringly in her

direction.

Tiba$tiba, terdengar bunyi bantingan

pintu tertutup dengan !eras di bela!ang

"illian, dan ia melompat !arena ter!ejut.

Tom mengeluar!an !artu identitas diri

dari dompetnya dan memperlihat!an

kartu denttas tu!epada opsir melalui

jendela bergelembung.

'>au harusselalu menunju!!an !artu

identitasmu di sini.

Itu adalah peraturan untu!

melindungi !eselamatan !ita semua,'

Fata To* sambil menentram!an

hatinya.

'"ason, ini "illian, manajer baruku.

Aia mengganti!an Felly. '

Npsir reen tersenyum !epada "illian

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1"ason, this is "illian, *new office

manager.

&he replaced Felly.D

Nfficer reen smiled down at "illian

and said, 12ou are wor!ing with the

best in the place.

I wor!ed with the lieutenant in the

segregation unit, and there is no

better.D

s Tom put his card bac! into his

wallet, he smiled at "illian.

1re you ready for your tour of the

facility, young ladyBD ;er stomach

tightened as she nodded tentatively at

erutnya terasa

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1I%m ready as I ever will be.D

&he nervously chuc!led.

'.! Dscusson

In the course of translating the source text, the researcherRtranslator has

found many difficult problems. ;owever, in this sub chapter, the researcherR

translator only too! 9 items that were the most difficult problems to be solved.

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The annotation of the translation focused on the problem grammatical structure

and lexicon.

'.!.1 ?ra**atca" (tructure

'.!.1.1 E%a*+"e of data

(ource /anguage Te%t Target /anguage Te%t

The young woman 0as a*a5edby

the attractive charcoal drawings

that lined the walls leading to the

control center.

?anita muda tersebut *engagu*

berbagai gambar arang menari! yang

berjajar di dinding menuju !e ruang

pengawasan.

Ana"ss2

The passive construction M7 0as a*a5ed 7% from the sentence MThe

young woman 0as a*a5edby the attractive charcoal drawings...% is

translated it into the active voice M... mengagumi ...% Thus the whole

translation becomes M&anita m!da terse#!t mengagumi#er#agai gam#ar

arang menari'1% if the sentence is translated into M&anita m!da terse#!t

di #!at 'ag!m oleh #er#agai gam#ar arang menari'1% the translation will

not sound natural in Indonesian. Therefore, there is a syntactic changing of

sentence structure from passive voice M7 0as a*a5ed 7% into active

voice M... mengagumi ...%.

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s the door slid open, "illian and

Tom stepped into a room 0here a

g"ass )u))"e greeted the*.

Feti!a pintu bergeser terbu!a, "illian

dan Tom masu! !e dalam sebuah

ruangan kaca )erge"e*)ung.

Ana"ss2

The above sentence consists of an adjective clause M70here a g"ass

)u))"e greeted the*.% from the sentence Ms the door slid open, "illian

and Tom stepped into a room 0here a g"ass )u))"e greeted the*.% which

is then translated into a phrase M7kaca bergelembung/% Thus, there is a

change of the clause structure from an adjective clause to a"rasa nominal.

There is a syntactic changing of clause structure from an adjective clause

M70here a g"ass )u))"e greeted the*.% to a"rasa nominalM7kaca

bergelembung/%

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1?hat am Idoing hereBD "illian

Juestioned her sanity as she pulled

into the big par!ing lot.

'pa yang akula!u!an di siniB'

"illian mempertanya!an

!ewarasannya !eti!a ia dengan

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mobilnya masu! !e tempat par!ir

besar.

Ana"ss2

In the sentence above, the singular first personal English pronoun I

is translated into Indonesian pronomina persona pertama t!nggal

aku, because according to ;asan lwi (--3) 1*ersona pertama a'!

le#ih #anya' dipa'ai dalam pem#icaraan #atin dan dalam sit!asi yang

tida' "ormal 1 /D (p. 9@)

Therefore, the singular first personal English pronoun I is translated

into the choice of oral mode namely aku in Indonesian which refers to

pem#icaraan#atin., emphasis on stylistic appropriateness.

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&he had just set herpurse on the

chair beside her when she heard the

soft clic! of the door behind her.

Ia baru saja meleta!!an tasna di

!ursi sampingnya !eti!a ia

mendengar suara lembut pintu

terbu!a di bela!angnya.

Ana"ss2

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In the sentence above, the possessive adjective M7 her 7% referring to the

belonging to a woman, girl, or female animal that has already mentioned,

in this particular case, she or "illian is translated into the third personal

pronoun M7-nya % in Indonesia.

ccording to ;asan lwi (--3, 9:), there are three pronoun can

identified a possessive adjective namely dia, -nya dan beliau. In this case

the translation uses pronoun!nyabecause the third personal pronoun -nya

is used in a commentary$topic sentence. In this so called commentary$

topic sentence, the subject must be identified by a pronoun!nya. There is

a selection of appropriate genre, namely the possessive adjective M7 her

7% is translated into M7-nya .%

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1This is the control center,D Tom

told hscurious new employee.

'Ini ruang pengawasan,' Tom

memberitahu !aryawan baruna

yang merasa ingin tahu.

Ana"ss2

In the sentence above, the possessive adjective M7 hs 7% referring to the

belonging to a man, boy, or male animal that has already mentioned, in

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this particular case, Tom is translated into the third personal pronoun M7-

nya % in Indonesia.

In this case the translation uses pronoun!nyabecause in a commentary$

topic sentence, the subject must be identified by a pronoun!nyaand the

pronoun!nya can be used to identified a possessive adjective both

referring to a man or woman.

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Heheld his hand out to sha!e

"illian%s hand, her pale s!in a

stri!ing contrast to the man%s deep

ebony complexion.

/etnan Johnsonmengulur!an

tangan untu! menjabat tangan

"illian, !ulit putihnya berbeda sangat

mencolo! dengan !ulit gelap pria

itu.

nalysis+

In the above sentence the third personal pronoun MHe 7% is directly

translated into MLetnan "ohnson % instead ofpersona 'etiga t!nggal M

dia % in Indonesia, because the word M7 he 7% is a pronoun functioning

as one of the cohesive devices referring bac! to the man in the previous

sentence, M, where


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Thus, there is a syntactic changing of cohesion, from the third personal

pronoun MHe 7% is directly translated into MLetnan "ohnson .%

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Tom removed his identification

card from his wallet and held tto

the window for the officer inside

the bubble to see.

Tom mengeluar!an !artu identitas

diri dari dompetnya dan

memperlihat!an kartu denttas tu

!epada opsir melalui jendela

bergelembung.

Ana"ss2

The word ... t ... refers to Midentification card% in the sentence MTom

removed his identification card from his wallet...%, which translates into...

kartu identitas itu7 .The word 7 t 7is a pronoun functioning as one

of the cohesive devices, but is translated into a phrase ... kartu identitas

itu.Thus, there is a syntactic changing of cohesion, from a pronoun ... t

...into a phrase... kartu identitas itu.

The pronoun Mit% in Indonesian language does not exist, that%s why it is

repeatedly mentioned in the target language, in this particular case,

Indonesian language.

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?hile the two waited to be allowed

through the entrance into the

facility, thelieutenant loo!ed at the

young woman and chuc!led.

&ementara mere!a menunggu untu!

diiin!an masu! !e dalam ruang

tahanan, sang letnan memandang

wanita muda itu dan tertawa !ecil.

Ana"ss2

In the sentence above the article M7@the 7% is translated into M7@ sang

% because it is consider to respect someone%s status according to ;asan

lwi, et al (--3). In translating the article M7@the 7% into M7@ sang %

there is a role of sociolinguistic and situational factors.

;asan lwi, et al., (--@) mentioned that+ D?rti'!la yang #ersi"at gelar

pada !m!mnya #ertalian dengan orang ata! hal yang dianggap

#ermarta#at/ Beri'!t ini jenis4jenisnya:

,a- sang: Unt!' man!sia ata! #enda !ni' dengan ma's!d !nt!'

meninggi'an marta#atA 'adang4'adang j!ga dipa'ai dalam g!ra!an

ata! sindiran/D (pp, 3-6$3-9)

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1"ason, this is "illian, *new

office manager.

'"ason, ini "illian, manajer baruku.

Ana"ss2

The possessive adjective M7@ * 7% in the sentence 1, this is "illian,

*new office manager.D is translated into the clitics form M7, -ku %

which refers to 1


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Teamwor! and Aedication.D melalui Ferja !elompo! dan

>engabdian.'

Ana"ss2

The word read in the source text is translated into tertu"skan in

Indonesian in order to ma!e the translation sound natural. The word

read... in English means ter)aca but it is translated into

tertu"skan.ctually the phrase A )rck and stone *onu*entread2

is translated into Se#!ah t!g! #at! #ata1 ter#aca:15 this translation

does not sound natural. That is why it is translated into Se#!ah t!g! #at!

#atatert!lis'an:1 refers to the naturaliation procedure.

'.!.!.! O*ttng

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A knot )egan to gro0 n her

sto*achas she turned off the

ignition of her car.

Perutna terasa *u"as !eti!a ia

memati!an mesin mobilnya.

The English clause MA knot )egan to gro0 n her sto*ach% which is a

long clause is translated into MPerutnya terasa mulas1 which shorter

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than the source language. &o, the translation uses fewer words compared to

the original text.

The word knot means otot menjadi keras dan sakit15so A knot

)egan to gro0 n her sto*ach literally means #tot perutnya menjadi

keras dan sakit1. This translation does not sound natural, that is why it is

translated intoPerutnya terasa mulas1. There is omitting information,

namely the clause MA knot )egan to gro0 n her sto*ach%is translated

into shorter clauseMPerutnya terasa mulas15%a reduction of expression in

the translation.

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12ou must be "illianBD the man

inJuired, smiling at the woman n

front of h*.

'Fau pasti "illianB' pria itu

bertanya, tersenyum pada wanita d

de+anna.

nalysis+

The adjective phrase M7n front of h*.% which consists of four words is

translated into M di depannya.%which consists of two words. &o, the

translation uses fewer words compared to the original text. The translator

can also translate the phrase with four words as M yang berada di

depannya.% but that would be necessary because the two words translation

M di depannya.% has already represented the meaning of the phrase.

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Auff(@=4@) stated that 1 a translation may be shorter than the original D

(p. ), in this case the adjective phrase M7n front of h*.% which

consists of four words is translated into shorter phrase M di depannya.%

which consists of two words.

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;e he"d hs hand outto sha!e

"illian%s hand, her pale s!in a

stri!ing contrast to the man%s deep

ebony complexion.


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t the end of the hallway, the

officer and the young woman came

to a stop in front of a large steel

and glass s"dng door.

Ai ujung lorong, opsir dan wanita

muda tersebut berhenti di depan

+ntu geser )esar ang ter)uat

darbaja dan !aca.

The English phrase M"arge stee" and g"ass s"dng door.% is translated into

Mpintu geser besar yang terbuat dari baja dan kaca.%which is longer

phrase compared the source language. &o, the translation uses many words

compared to the original text.

The literally translation of M"arge stee" and g"ass s"dng door.% ispintu

geser besar baja dan kaca which sound ambiguous, that is why the

translation is added other words in order to avoid ambiguity and the

meaning acceptable without doubt. There is adding information, namely

the phrase M"arge stee" and g"ass s"dng door.% is translated into longer

phrase Mpintu geser besar yang terbuat dari baja dan kaca.%

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s "illian left the memorial, she

began to Juestion her decision to

take onthe position at such a

dangerous place.

Feti!a "illian meninggal!an prasasti

tersebut, ia mulai mempertanya!an

!eputusannya untu! *ener*a

!edudu!an di tempat yang

berbahaya ini.

The English idiom M7 take on 7% is translated into a non idiom word M7

menerima7%, because according to Auff (@==-) 1If the expression cannot

be directly translated, use a non$idiomatic or plain prose translationD

(p. @@)

Therefore, the selection of the appropriate genre and type of discourse

namely an idiom M7 take on ...% is translated into non idiomatic word M7

menerima7.%

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t the end of the hallway, the

officer and the young woman ca*e

to a sto+in front of a large steel

and glass sliding door.

Ai ujung lorong, opsir dan wanita

muda tersebut )erhentdi depan

pintu geser besar yang terbuat dari

baja dan !aca.

Ana"ss2

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The idiomatic expressions M7 ca*e to a sto+ 7% is translated into non

idiomatic expressions M...berhenti...%. In order to ma!e the translation

sound natural, the selection of the appropriate genre and type of discourse

namely an idiom M7 ca*e to a sto+ 7% is translated into non idiomatic

word M...berhenti...%

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Nnce inside, she stepped over to the

desk, where an officer too! her

name and directed the pretty

auburn$haired woman to ta!e a seat

in the lobby.

5egitu di dalam, ia melang!ah !e

*e:a +ener*a ta*u, tempat

seorang petugas memanggil

namanya dan mempersila!an wanita

canti! berambut pirang tersebut

dudu! di lobi.

The word M7 desk 7% actually means M7 rece+ton desk 7% which is

implicit. The sentence should be written M7 she ste++ed o#er to the

rece+ton desk@ 7%. That is why it is translated into M7 ia melangkah ke

meja penerima tamu@ 7.% The implicit M7 rece+ton 7% is explicitly

translated into M7penerima tamu7.% The pragmatic altering the level of

explicitness, namely the implicit M7 rece+ton 7% in the phrase M7

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rece+ton desk 7% is explicitly translated into the phrase M7 meja

penerima tamu/%

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1lways show your IA here. '>au harusselalu menunju!!an

!artu identitasmu di sini.

Ana"ss2

In the sentence above the clause M$ou ha#e to 7% is implicit. The

sentence should be written M$ou ha#e to a"0as sho0 our ID here.% The

implicitly written words M$ou ha#e to 7% is explicitly translated into

MKau harus7% hence the Indonesian sentence becomes MKau harus

selalu menunjukkan kartu identitasmu di sini.% The pragmatic altering

the level of explicitness, namely the implicit M$ou ha#e to 7% is explicitly

translated into MKau harus7/%

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Nfficer reen smiled down at

"illian and said, 12ou are wor!ing

with the best in the place.

Npsir reen tersenyum !epada

"illian dan ber!ata, 'Fau be!erja

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bersama orangterbai! di sini.

Ana"ss2

In the above sentence the word M7 +erson 7M is implicit. The sentence

should be written M7@ $ou are 0orkng 0th the )est +erson n the

+"ace.% The implicitly written word M7 +erson 7M is translated into M7

orang...,% hence the Indonesian sentence becomes M7@Kau bekerja

bersama orang tebaik di sini.% The pragmatic altering the level of

explicitness, namely the implicit M7 +erson 7% is explicitly translated

into M orang 7/%

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In our office t shard to stay

formal for too long.D

Ai !antor !ami (translated explicitly

into keadaan *e*)uatsulit untu!

tetap bersi!ap formal terlalu lama.'

Ana"ss2

In the above sentence the translation of words M7 t s 7M is deleted in

order to achieve clearly meaning. The explicit M7 t s 7M is implicitly

translated into M7 keadaan membuat7.% If it is written MAi !antor !ami

keadaan *e*)uatsulit untu! tetap bersi!ap formal terlalu lama.% It

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doesn%t sound natural, that is why M7 keadaan membuat7% is implicit.

The pragmatic altering the level of explicitness, namely the explicit M7 t

s 7M is implicitly translated into M7 keadaan membuat7.%

B)"ogra+h

lwi, ;asan (@==4). Tata Bahasa Ba'! Bahasa 0ndonesia/ "a!arta+ 5alai >usta!a.

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