Make Sentences Parallel in Structure and Meaning 句子結構需有一致性

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 (Original) The temperature rose to boiling point and the height was controlled by fluctuation of the variables. ◦ In the sentence, putting the first part in active voice and the second part in passive voice creates an unbalanced feeling.

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Make Sentences Parallel in Structure and Meaning句子結構需有一致性

Parallelism in technical writing means that all parts of a sentence must have a similar construction.

(Original) The temperature rose to boiling point and the height was controlled by fluctuation of the variables.◦ In the sentence, putting the first part in active voice and the

second part in passive voice creates an unbalanced feeling.

(Revised) The temperature rose to boiling point and fluctuation of the variables controlled the height.

(Original) Department managers must either assume sole responsibility for the success of a project or authority must be delegated to subordinates.◦ In the sentence, the correlative expression of either…or does

not have a parallel structure.

(Revised) Department managers must either assume sole responsibility for the success of a project or delegate authority to subordinates. The committee should decide what to do immediately.

(Original) Success in school depends on the following◦ Preparing for class assignments,◦Consulting the teacher during office hours,◦All textbook materials must be thoroughly read,◦Getting at least seven hours of sleep daily, and ◦All appointments must be kept.

Sentences containing lists must be parallel in structure. Success in school depends on the following:◦ Preparing for class assignments,◦Consulting the teacher during office hours,◦Thoroughly reading all textbook materials,◦Getting at least seven hours of sleep daily, and ◦Keeping all appointments.

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