Revision of Narrative Lead ● Effective writers also reflect upon the changes they make in order to

become more aware of specific techniques they use during the writing process.

● Describe how you changed your opening. How did your change make your opening more engaging for the reader? Kind of Lead: Changes I made:Revision Reflection:

Can You Sense It?

Revising the Middle

Learning Targets

● Identify effective use of sensory details

and figurative language.

● Revise a narrative draft by adding

descriptive language.

Before Reading

“Show Don’t Tell”

“Don’t tell me the moon is shining, show me the glint of the light on broken glass”

-Anton Chekhov

About the AuthorImma Achilike is a student writer. She wrote this story as a student at Naaman Forest High School in Garland, Texas!

Metacognitive Markers

Use metacognitive markers to make mental notes as you read. Pay particular attention to

any words or phrases that stand out to you as confusing, powerful, or interesting.

Personal Narrative

Personal Narrative

Personal Narrative

After Reading

Complete the Graphic Organizer to analyze the organization and use of language in “Why Couldn’t I Have Been Named Ashley?”

After Reading

Complete the Graphic Organizer to analyze the organization and use of language in “Why Couldn’t I Have Been Named Ashley?”

Record textual evidence of language use in each part of the narrative (sensory details, figurative language, precise words or phrases).

Learning Targets

● Identify effective use of sensory details

and figurative language.

● Revise a narrative draft by adding

descriptive language.

After Reading

Use Language that ‘shows’ by describing the photographs that follow, both literally and figuratively.

After Reading

Use Language that ‘shows’ by describing the photographs that follow, both literally and figuratively.

After Reading

Use Language that ‘shows’ by describing the photographs that follow, both literally and figuratively.

After Reading

Use Language that ‘shows’ by describing the photographs that follow, both literally and figuratively.

Looping

Language and Writer’s Craft: Punctuating Coordinate Adjectives

Coordinate adjectives are two or more words that equally modify the same object. Use commas to separate coordinate adjectives in a sentence.

Example: The pulsing, bass-heavy beat of the music flowed from the speakers.

In this sentence, pulsing and bass-heavy are coordinate adjectives. You can identify coordinate adjectives with a simple test. Try to:

● reverse the order of the adjectives, and● put and between the adjectives.

If you can do both of these things, the adjectives are coordinate and require a comma. Adjectives that give information about size, shape, age, color, material, religion, or nationality are not coordinate adjectives and need not be separated with commas.

Coordinate AdjectivesWhich of the sentences below have coordinate adjectives? Add commas where necessary.

1. Our internship program accepts only ambitious dedicated students.2. My little French music box now lay smashed on the floor.3. The rolling pitching tossing motion of the ship quickly made Elsie seasick.4. New York City’s bustling teeming sidewalks and streets were unlike any in

the small town Gary had come from.5. Grandma knitted the baby a blue wool sweater for her birthday.

Can You Sense It?

Review your draft and add sensory details and figurative language. Look for opportunities to replace non descriptive words more precise diction. Then, check that you have properly added commas to coordinate adjectives.

Check For Understanding

Describe how you changed the middle of your draft.