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Introduction
Formula – If you look at X (in book 1&2) youwill see Y & Z. (! factor)
"y eaminin# t$e scene w$ere % etc.e'idence of t$e etreme 'iolent nature oft$e culture deicted in The Odyssey can beseen.
t$er t$in#s – counterar#umentelanation of terms (de*ne only usin# t$etet) o'er'iew of t$e di+erent asects ofyour aer etc.
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,eetition is -ey
ec$anics
X/factor ! seci*c focus
First sentence ! If X/factor t$en Y (t$esis)
First sentence ! You mi#$t t$ink I0m crayic$ael but an eamination of X leads to Y.
Interestin# t$esis !/ ar#ument. ot trut$.
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3'ery essay s$ould start liket$is
4n eamination of t$e scene w$ere -in#enelaus ro'ides %elemac$us wit$ foods$ows t$at $ositality in The Odyssey seems to be a cultural test wit$ otentially'iolent conse5uences.
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o 3ssay 6$ould 6tart7
4n eamination of 8enesis s$ows t$at 8od0slo'e is eternal and $e makes co'enants wit$eole.
X/factor ! 8enesis (too #eneral)
%$esis ! 8od0s lo'e is eternal and $e makesco'enants (t$is is true it is not anar#ument)
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3ssay structure
Introduction (/factor elained t$esisoutlined)
9ara#ra$ 1/2 ( factor del'ed into)
9ara#ra$s :; (etra e'idence elored) –eac$ ara#ra$ s$ould elain w$at t$isnew e'idence is doin# $ere $ow it isrelated to your /factor
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>uotations ? 3'idence
%$e 5uote does not stand on its own and t$ere it is it isin your aer because you see somet$in# secial in it
You are a lawyer I am t$e @ury and @ud#e
Yes my client was disco'ered wit$ a smokin# #unstandin# o'er t$e dead body s$outin# AI did itBC.
If you look more closely $owe'er you see t$at $is #unwas a toy smokin# #un t$e deceased died of a brain
in@ury and AI did itBC is my client0s way of eressin# $isreli#ion.
3'idence is for you to use. ot for it to use you.
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=o not A>uote and=roC
b'iously 8od is a warm/$earted creature. A8odsaid DEet t$e water below t$e sky be #at$ered intoone area t$at t$e dry land may aear0C (:). %$e
t$in#s $e creates are done to imro'e t$e world.
%$e 5uote is not elained $ere
$ic$ art of t$e 5uote is t$e aut$or referrin# toGIt0s not clear from t$e 5uote w$at would beAimro'ementsC on t$e world. %$e aut$or $ascommitted 5uote and dro. %$eir ar#ument isweakened because of t$is.
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3lain your e'idence
%$e imortance of order in t$e "ible can beseen as early as its *rst few 'erses. A8odsaid DEet t$e water below t$e sky be#at$ered into one area t$at t$e dry landmay aear0C (:). ut of t$e anonymousmass of water 8od creates an orderedsace an AareaC of Adry landC distinctly
aart from t$e c$aos surroundin# it.
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Hse >uotations6arin#ly
=o you need t$e w$ole 5uoteG $yG If soelain w$y. If not @ust use t$e words t$atyou need.
3 – =isorder is clearly a bad t$in# in8enesis. %$e dirty room of 4dam is calledA*lt$ily unorderedC () 4bra$am0s animal
en is labeled Adis#ustin#ly wit$out orderC(J) and ,ebeka$0s uncombed $air isreferred to as bein# Ain a total disarray liket$e e'il of 6atan $imselfC (11).
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$at to ut
=o you $a'e any su##esti'e ideas based onyour t$esis t$at could be elored in afurt$er aer elsew$ereG
Ie – %$e notion t$at $ositality is a markerof 'iolence mi#$t be somet$in# to elorew$en lookin# at ancient 8reece as a w$ole –
does t$is t$esis $old u t$ereG
(a bi##er alication)
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$at is si#ni*cant about your*ndin#sG
%$ese *ndin#s su##est a recon*#uration ofour understandin# of culture as bein# not asocial #ood but rat$er a defensi'emec$anism for maintainin# owerstructures in society in #eneral.
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$at is missin#G (can includet$at)
9er$as an eamination of %$e Iliad incon@unction wit$ my *ndin#s on %$edyssey would counter or suort myt$esis.
9er$as by only lookin# at 'iolence/relatedmoments in t$e dyssey instead of eaceful
ones t$is t$esis mi#$t be takin# somew$atof a narrow 'iew of t$e book.
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Ideas from elsew$ere and YH
%$ese notions of $ositality mi#$t be usefulto t$ink about w$en eaminin# businessand t$e strict #uidelines of a businessmeetin# articularly in accountin# w$ereany failure to ad$ere to t$e norms is nottaken li#$tly.
Kow does w$at you0'e ar#ued come fromyour life (as a student as a erson as afamily member as a reli#ious erson as aolitical erson etc.