Writing an Essay Part Two

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Writing an Essay

English 114Lesson 7: Part Two

Dr. Mercedes Torres

2007 Mercedes Torres Almodvar


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Quote

The real me is music. Music discovers

my inside feelings.It wakes up myemotions and the rest of me comes intoplay.

Christian A. Quines Santiago 114/05


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ExampleFavorite Song: BreakawayBreakaway

(Written by M. Gerrard/B. Benante/A. Lavigne) (used for educational purposes)

Grew up in a small townAnd when the rain would fall downId just stare out my windowDreamin of what could beAnd if Id end up happyI would pray

Trying hard to reach outBut when I tried to speak outFelt like no one could hear meWanted to belong hereBut something felt so wrong hereSo I prayed I could break away



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Example Ill spread my wings

And Ill learn how to flyIll do what it takes

Till I touch the skyAnd Ill make a wish, take a chance, make a changeAnd break away

Out of the darknessAnd into the sunBut I wont forget all the ones that I loveIll take a risk, take a chance, make a changeAnd break away


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Example

Want to feel the warm breezeSleepunder a palm treeFeel the rush of the oceanGet on board a fast trainTravel on a jetplane

Far away and break away

Ill spread my wingsAnd Ill learn how to flyIll do what it takes till I touch the sky

and Ill make a wish, take a chance ,make a changeAnd break away Out of the darkness and into the sun

But I wont forget all the ones that loveI gotta take a risk, take a chance make a changeAnd break away, breakaway, breakaway



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ExampleBuildings with a hundred floorsSwinging round revolving doorsMaybe I dont know where theyll take me butGotta keep movin on movin on

Fly away break awayIll spread my wingsAnd Ill learn how to flyThough its not easyTo tell you goodbyeI gotta take a risk, take a chance make a change

And break away

Out of the darkness and into the sunBut I wont forget the place I come fromI gotta take a risk, take a chance make a changeAnd break away, breakaway, breakaway



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Main Idea: What is each strophe about? Grew up in a small town

And when the rain would fall downId just stare out my windowDreamin of what could beAnd if Id end up happyI would pray

Trying hard to reach outBut when I tried to speak outFelt like no one could hear me

Wanted to belong hereBut something felt so wrong hereSo I prayed I could break away

The person is unhappyand dreaming and

hoping for somethingbetter

The person feels no

sense of belonging andwants to leave


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Main Idea: What is each strophe about? Ill spread my wings

And Ill learn how to flyIll do what it takesTill I touch the skyAnd Ill make a wish, take a chance, make a changeAnd break away

Out of the darknessAnd into the sun

But I wont forget all the ones that I loveIll take a risk, take a chance, make a changeAnd break away

The person will try toaccomplish other goals

and take chances.


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Preparing a Concept MapBreakaway

Childhoodmemories

Messageof hope

Inspires aphilosophy of life

Living in NY

Apartmentbuilding

Feeling afraid

Moving to PR

Hoping for abetter life

Being brave

Taking risks

Live a full life.Take a riskTake a chanceMake a changeBreak away

Concept Map


Title

Thesis Statement


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Thesis Statement Thesis statement: expresses the main idea

that will be developed for the entire essay It should be expressed in a complete sentence It expresses an opinion, attitude, or idea.

It should express only one main idea


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Visual Image When you listen to the song, what

visual image do you create in yourmind?

Breakaway is a song of freeingthe spirit to reach perfection. It

is my favorite because



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Visual Image


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Preparing a Concept MapBreakaway

Childhoodmemories

Messageof hope

Inspires aphilosophy of life

Living in NY

Apartmentbuilding

Feeling afraid

Moving to PR

Hoping for abetter life

Being brave

Taking risks

Live a full life.Take a riskTake a chanceMake a changeBreak away


Title

Thesis Statement Breakaway is a song of freeing the spirit toreach perfection. It is my favorite because.


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Organizing ideasThesis: Breakaway is a song of freeing the spirit

to reach perfection. It is my favorite because..

Subgroup 1:Childhood memories Living in New York was an experience that made me feel inprison

Apartment buildings limited your freedom

I always felt afraid that something bad would happen.

I would pray that someday things would be different. Moving to Puerto Rico was the best thing that ever happen

to me



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Organizing ideas Subgroup 2: Message

Breakaway was like my prayer in which Ihoped for a better life.

My dreams came true, but I had to bebrave to this new beginning

There were many risks that had to betaken



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Organizing ideas Subgroup 3: Motivating words for living

a full life.

Taking risks is part of reaching perfection

Chances are never programmed you needto take them as they come

We need to make changes in our lives andbreakaway from the comfort zone.



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Prepare an outline for the

essayI. Thesis Statement

A. SubtopicsB. Transition sentence

II. Subgroup 1 Topic sentences of developmental paragraphsA. DetailsB. DetailsC. DetailsD. Transition sentence

III. Subgroup 2 Topic sentences of developmental paragraphsA. DetailsB. DetailsC. DetailsD. Transition sentence

IV. Subgroup 3 Topic sentences of developmental paragraphsA. DetailsB. DetailsC. Details

V. Concluding Paragraph

Outline



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Outline the EssayBreakaway to Freedom

I. Breakaway is a song of freeing the spirit

to reach perfection. It is my favorite because..A. My childhood memories

B. Its message

C.

Motivating wordsD. Transition sentence



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Outline the EssayII. The song reflects my childhood memories.

A. Living in New York was an experience thatmade me feel in prison

B. Apartment buildings limited your freedomC. I always felt afraid that something bad would

happen.D. I would pray that someday things would be

different.E. Moving to Puerto Rico was the best thing that

ever happen to meF. Transition sentence



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Organizing ideasIII. Message

A. Breakaway was like my prayer in which I

hoped for a better life.B. My dreams came true, but I had to be brave

to this new beginning

C. There were many risks that had to be taken

D. Transition



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Outline the EssayIV. Motivating words for living a full life.

A. The song invites us to take a risk

B. It also tells us to take a chanceC. We need to make a change in our life

D. We have to break away from what iscustomary and conforming or just fromthe routine.



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Conclusion Breakaway is a song that inspires

anyone to follow their inner voice, andinspires us to be the best. It gives usthe opportunity to be free.


Essay


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Use of Transitions Examples of Transitions:

http://www.google.com.pr/search?hl=es&q=transitions+in+paragraphs&lr=



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References Ellis et.al. (1998). Write On! A Grammar-

Composition Workbook. Puerto Rico:

Editorial Plaza Mayor. Breakaway. M. Gerrard/B. Benante/A.

Lavigne)Used for educational purposes

Smalley, R.L. & Ruetten, M.K. (1995).Refining Composition Skills. Boston:Heinle and Heinle


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