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Ways into Academic Writing
The academic writing programme atthe English Department
of Bern University
Franz Andres Morrissey
University of Bern
GmbH
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The Plan for the Presentation
• The Background
• The Didactics
• The Programme
• Strengths and Weaknesses
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The Plan for the Workshop
• Essay Structure• Paragraphing• Style and Register• Cohesion Devices • Analysis Literature• Comparison and Contrast (Linguistics)• Elements of an Introduction (Linguistics)• Forms:
– How to Plan a Paper – Paper Log– Assessment Criteria
The Theory
Overview of the programme and its aims
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The Background a)
Traditional essay writing course – general themes– focus mainly on correct English– 1 to 2 hours per week
Workload of academic tutors– supervision of papers– evaluation of content– dealing with structural and stylistic short-
comings
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The Background b)
Meeting where complaints from academic tutors were collected
• inconsistencies in stylistic control
“Students write pretty much how they would speak.”
• problems with logical development
“Texts start at the top left and end at the bottom right.”
• lack of clear structure“It’s often difficult to see where the essay is headed.”
• difficulties with focus or “main point”
“Students throw in anything they think may be relevant.”
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The Background c)
General disaffection:
Why don’t students know how to write?
Aren’t gymnasia doing their job?
Problem
difference between Germanic and Anglophone academic discourse
Michael Cline, Monash University:
The Germanic academic writer
expects a lot from the reader.
The Anglophone reader
expects a lot from the academic writer.
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The Background d)
Consequences of objectives of course• clarity of concepts and direction• structure of the paper • reader guidance all the way to the clinching
at the end
Evangelist Priest in Chicago: first A tells what A’s gonna tell’umthen A tells ‘umthen A tells ‘um what A tole them
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The Didactics a)
critical reading is essential for improved writing
but, to write one has to readWriting is a stand-alone skill.
formal writing is a skill that can be acquiredYou can write or you can’t…
rewriting, what’s that?
written - for better or for worseWriting represents one’s optimum achievement.
no direct feedback (puzzled looks, etc)
development may leave out crucial steps
ideas developed in authorial isolationWriting is a solitary occupation.
Some basic thoughts on writing
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The Didactics b)
writing and rewriting
readers and sample texts
techniques of academic discourse
developing the art of feedback
text cohesion peer assessment
elements of a good paper
students bring in their drafts
input in classworking at homeclasses as workshops
reading and emulating
texts are never finished
pooling of mindspooling of minds
The basic concept
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The Programme a)
describing a response to a work of art and justifying it
short paper on a linguistics topic, using references
analysing a short work of literature or newspaper article
short paper on a literary topic;
or
practice essay on an issue that requires arguing one’s corner
2nd Semester1st Semester
The written texts
describing a response to a work of art and justifying it
analysing a short work of literature or newspaper article
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The Programme b)
bibliographiesintroductions and conclusions
quoting from primary and secondary sourcescutting away the dead wood (relevance, verbal Styrofoam)
conclusions (refined)using a primary text to back up ideas
developing a topic for a personal projectlevels of formality
summarising and paraphrasing vs. (effective) quoting
elements of introductions
identifying key issues in background readingcohesion devices
preparing materials for a paperparagraphing
developing an introductiondeveloping and argument
approaches to texts and formulating an “argument”
overall text structure
2nd Semester1st Semester
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Strengths and Weaknesses a)
Weaknesses
• many students fall by the wayside (20-30%)• Quality of peer feedback is hard to predict• Workload of marking impact on quality of help
given by tutors• readers have different foibles and bugbears• students leave the course and the regimen of writing
on a regular basis• different focus and different style sheets in various
disciplines• not enough personnel for a more vigorous course
with more writing
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Strengths and Weaknesses b)
Strengths
• Students complete the long and arduous journey• Good writing and research habits are promoted• Students use the insights in other courses• Students hate the workload, but come to appreciate
the content (material used in other departments)• Reading groups have been established (all the way
to PhD and Habil level)
The Practice
Selective Activities
and Worksheets
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Structure I: An Essay
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With equal passion I have sought knowledge. I have wished to understand the hearts of men. I have wished to know why the stars shine. And I have tried to apprehend the Pythagorean power by which number holds sway above the flux. A little of this, but not much, I have achieved.
Three passions, simple but overwhelmingly strong, have governed my life: the longing for love, the search for knowledge, and unbearable pity for the suffering of mankind. These passions, like great winds, have blown me hither and thither, in a wayward course, over a deep ocean of anguish, reaching to the very verge of despair.
This has been my life. I have found it worth living, and would gladly live it again if the chance were offered me.
Love and knowledge, so far as they were possible, led upward toward the heavens. But always pity brought me back to earth. Echoes of cries of pain reverberate in my heart. Children in famine, victims tortured by oppressors, helpless old people a hated burden to their sons, and the whole world of loneliness, poverty, and pain make a mockery of what human life should be. I long to alleviate the evil, but I cannot, and I too suffer.
I have sought love, first, because it brings ecstasy—ecstasy so great that I would often have sacrificed all the rest of life for a few hours of this joy. I have sought it, next, because it relieves loneliness—that terrible loneliness in which one shivering consciousness looks over the rim of the world into the cold unfathomable lifeless abyss. I have sought it, finally, because in the union of love I have seen, in a mystic miniature, the prefiguring vision of the heaven that saints and poets have imagined. This is what I sought, and though it might seem too good for human life, this is what—at last—I have found.
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The structure II: An Essay
link parts
extend idea
Pity
Knowledge
Love
Three passions in my life
Conclusion
Theme 3
Theme 2
Theme 1
Introduction:
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With equal passion I have sought knowledge. I have wished to understand the hearts of men. I have wished to know why the stars shine. And I have tried to apprehend the Pythagorean power by which number holds sway above the flux. A little of this, but not much, I have achieved.
Three passions, simple but overwhelmingly strong, have governed my life: the longing for love, the search for knowledge, and unbearable pity for the suffering of mankind. These passions, like great winds, have blown me hither and thither, in a wayward course, over a deep ocean of anguish, reaching to the very verge of despair.
This has been my life. I have found it worth living, and would gladly live it again if the chance were offered me.
Love and knowledge, so far as they were possible, led upward toward the heavens. But always pity brought me back to earth. Echoes of cries of pain reverberate in my heart. Children in famine, victims tortured by oppressors, helpless old people a hated burden to their sons, and the whole world of loneliness, poverty, and pain make a mockery of what human life should be. I long to alleviate the evil, but I cannot, and I too suffer.
I have sought love, first, because it brings ecstasy—ecstasy so great that I would often have sacrificed all the rest of life for a few hours of this joy. I have sought it, next, because it relieves loneliness—that terrible loneliness in which one shivering consciousness looks over the rim of the world into the cold unfathomable lifeless abyss. I have sought it, finally, because in the union of love I have seen, in a mystic miniature, the prefiguring vision of the heaven that saints and poets have imagined. This is what I sought, and though it might seem too good for human life, this is what—at last—I have found.
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Paragraph Structure: Jane Austen
clincher4. In everything else the etiquette of the day might stand the strictest investigation.
discussion (anticipating criticism)
3. Nothing could be objected to when it came under the discussion of the neighbourhood, except that the carriage which conveyed the bride and the bridegroom and Julia from the church door to Sotherton was the same chaise which Mr. Rushworth had used for a twelvemonth before.
Illustration2. The bride was elegantly dressed; the two bridesmaids were duly inferior; her father gave her away; her mother stood with salts in her hands, expecting to be agitated; her aunt tried to cry; and the service was impressively read by Dr. Grant.
Topic1. It was a very proper wedding.
proper
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Manual labour of one kind or another, from digging roads to repairing high
voltage power lines, is perhaps the most crucial resource in any industrially
developing country. To begin with, ploughing fields, planting and harvesting
crops, and raising livestock are all important to development of the food supply
and require people who work with their hands. Secondly, mining natural
resources, building roads and bridges, and constructing dams for irrigation and
electrical power, all of which require enormous numbers of skilled manual
workers, are essential to any kind of industrial development. Moreover, the
manufacture, as well as the maintenance, of machines of all kinds demands a
large number of trained mechanics and technicians. Finally, the establishment
of efficient transportation and communication systems, essential services in a
modernising economy, relies heavily on a labour force of expert craftsmen who
take pride in their manual skills. Clearly, in agriculture and in industry, the
progress of a country depends on the busy hands of its working people.
Cohesion devices I
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Cohesion devices II
as a rule, for the most part, in general, in most cases, of course, on the whole, speaking generally, usually
Generalising
as one might expect, clearly, (it goes without saying), naturally, obviously, of course, surely
(Stating the obvious)
as follows:, for example, for instance, in this case, namely, such as, that is to say
Giving an example
also, as well as, besides, furthermore, in addition, in the same way, not only ... but also, what is more
Addition
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accordingly, as a consequence/result, because, because of this, for this reason, hence, in order to, in that case, it follows that, so that, therefore, thus, under those circumstances
Cause and effect
although, despite, even though, however, however much ..., in spite of …, nevertheless, on the contrary, still, whereas, yet
Contradiction(but ...) /
Concession
alternatively, in contrast to, on the contrary, on the other hand
Contrast
alternatively, in other words, or rather, (to be more precise), to put it another way
Restating in different
terms
Cohesion devices III
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in summary, to sum upSummarize
clearly, finally, in conclusion, so, therefore, thus, to conclude
Conclusion
as for …, clearly especially, in fact, in particular, mainly, namely, particularly, surely
Highlighting
apart from this…, as far as X is concerned, as for ..., It follows that, moreover, now, with regard to
Making a new start
A useful site:
http://owl.english.purdue.edu/handouts/print/general/gl_transition.html
Cohesion devices IV
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Analysis I: The Rabbits Who Caused All the Trouble
WITHIN the memory of the youngest child there was a family of rabbits who lived near a pack of wolves. The wolves announced that they did not like the way the rabbits were living. (The wolves were crazy about the way they themselves were living, because it was the only way to live.) One night several wolves were killed in an earthquake and this was blamed on the rabbits, for it is well known that rabbits pound on the ground with their hind legs and cause earthquakes. On another night one of the wolves was killed by a bolt of lightning and this was also blamed on the rabbits, for it is well known that lettuce-eaters cause lightning. The wolves threatened to civilize the rabbits if they didn’t behave, and the rabbits decided to run away to a desert island. But the other animals, who lived at a great distance, shamed them, saying, ‘You must stay where you are and be brave. This is no world for escapists. If the wolves attack you, we will come to your aid, in all probability.’ So the rabbits continued to live near the wolves and one day there was a terrible flood which drowned a great many wolves. This was blamed on the rabbits, for it is well known that carrot-nibblers with long ears cause floods. The wolves descended on the rabbits, for their own good, and imprisoned them in a dark cave, for their own protection.
When nothing was heard about the rabbits for some weeks, the other animals demanded to know what had happened to them. The wolves replied that the rabbits had been eaten and since they had been eaten the affair was a purely internal matter. But the other animals warned that they might possibly unite against the wolves unless some reason was given for the destruction of the rabbits. So the wolves gave them one. ‘They were trying to escape,’ said the wolves, ‘and, as you know, this is no world for escapists.’
Moral: Run, don’t walk, to the nearest desert island.
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Analysis II: Finding a Way in
1. Each student writes down 3 points that struck you about the text.
2. With your neighbour look at your combined 6 points.Put them into order of importance.
3. In groups of four:
What are the key points you would make about this text if you were to analyse it?
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Analysis III: Working with The Rabbits
4. Choose one specific example that demonstrates your point and analyse that example.
3. In one sentence, say what you will argue. How is that argument connected to what you find striking and how it is achieved?
• different groups and their depiction (wolves normally just eat rabbits)
• the reactions of each group – especially the “other animals”
• Irony (the tone of the text) • the use of the fable form • the way the ridiculous is presented as self-evident
(characteristics of rabbits linked to natural disasters) • expectations are overturned (the way statements are
distorted by shifts to other meanings of words)
2. Say what you find interesting / striking / effective about the text and identify how this is achieved.
• the dynamics of power• the way the powerful can use a variety of means to
control• the way the powerful can manipulate
1. First impression: Say very briefly what the text is about. (What is the main theme?)
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Analysis IV: The next step
The next step is to work with these points until you see an approach which allows you to:
• connect the most details,
or
• examine the details that particularly interest you
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Analysis V: A concrete example
Choose one specific example that demonstrates your point and analyse that example.
In “The Rabbits Who Caused All the Trouble,“ Thurber takes one of the most commonplace hunter-hunted relationships in the animal kingdom and creates a tale which examines manipulation and its effects. The narrator presents a world in which the powerful manipulate reason by turning the sense of what is logical upside down.
In one or two sentences, say what you will argue. In the next sentence, explain how that argument is connected to what you find striking and how it is achieved.
• reason used to turn logic upside down• reversals• repetition• ridiculous as self-evident• dual meanings of words
Say what you find interesting / striking / effective about the text and identify how this is achieved.
the way the powerful can manipulateFirst impression: Say very briefly what the text is about. (What is the main theme of the text?)
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Analysis VI: Opening paragraph
In “The Rabbits Who Caused All the Trouble,” Thurber takes one of the most commonplace hunter-hunted relationships in the animal kingdom and creates a tale which examines manipulation and its effects. The narrator presents a world in which the powerful manipulate reason by turning the sense of what is logical upside down. He presents reversals from the outset, and by the end of the text, even the familiar saying “Walk, don’t run” has been inverted. The narrator uses repetition, he presents the ridiculous as self-evident, and he exploits dual meanings of words in order to show the ways the powerful can manipulate both language and situation. Because he has chosen the fable as his form, his examples resonate so that he depicts more than the world of these rabbits and wolves; the story becomes a critique of human behaviour.
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Analysis Linguistics I: The Topic and the DataThe Topic:
Write a paper about problems of prefixation in English adjectives
The Data:
disfigureddisgruntleddisinheriteddisinterested
impeccableimpossibleimpromptuincognitoinconsequentialineptinert
mischievousmisguidedmisogynist(-ic)mistakenmisunderstood
nondescript nonplussednon-standardnonchalant
unbeknownstuncouthunevenungainlyuntidy
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Analysis Linguistics II: An Approach
data limited to adjectives and ed-participlesonly limited discussion of etymologies
(remarks on limitations of research)
elements to be covered
prefix cannot be readily separated from the stem in some prefix+stem constructions
hypothesis / question / issue at stake
prefixation is more complex than it may seem
reason for interest
interpretations of prefixes in English as bound morphemes
(field or research approaches to date/in general)
prefixes un-, in-/im-, mis- and non- linguistic phenomenon
When prefixes do not seem to be bound morphemes
Topic/ Possible Title
examples where a) basic prefixation works, b) the meaning changes and c) the “stem” is not a word in English
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Analysis Linguistics III: Elements and Approaches
linguistic approachliterary approach
(remarks on limitations of research)(remarks on limitations of research)
elements to be covered to make the point
elements focused on for “proof”
hypothesis / question / issue at stake
argument
reason for interestwhat is striking
(field and/or research approaches to date)
(brief context/content)
Basics linguistic phenomenonBasics: Name of the text / author
TitleTitle
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Analysis Linguistics IV: From Approach to Introduction
(Due to limitations of space, analogous phenomena with nouns or verbs will be excluded from the discussion, as will a detailed consideration of the etymologies of the stem morphemes.)
only adjectives and ed-participleslimited discussion of etymologies
(remarks on limitations of research)
The discussion of the prefixes un-, in-/im-, mis- and non- will show that prefixation often works as predicted, but also that there are instances where the “stem” differs in meaning and lastly where the “stem” is not a word used in current English.
a) normal prefixation, b) “stem” exists but has different meaning, c) “stem” does not exist.
elements to be covered
In this paper, then, a number of adjectives will be examined in terms of where the separation of the prefix from the stem morpheme works according expectations but also where it shows phenomena that deviate from these expectations.
prefix cannot always be readily separated from the stem prefix+stem constructions
hypothesis / question / issue
However, not all words in English that seem to consist of a stem with a prefix seem to function according to this rule of word formation.
prefixation is more complex as it may seem
reason for interest
In the majority of cases the prefix can be added or separated from the stem with predictable results because the stem is usually used as a distinct word in the language.
limitations to interpretations of prefixes in English
(field / or research)
English adjectives, like other content words, can be modified in their meaning and morphology by prefixes.
prefixes un-, in-/im-, mis- and non-
linguistic phenomenon
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Analysis Linguistics V: A possible IntroductionEnglish adjectives, like other content words, can be modified in their meaning and morphology by prefixes. In the majority of cases the prefix can be added or separated from the stem with predictable results because the stem is normally used as a distinct word in the language. However, not all words in English that seem to consist of a stem with a prefix seem to function according to this rule of word formation. In this paper, then, a number of adjectives will be examined in terms of where the separation of the prefix from the stem morpheme works according expectations but also where it shows phenomena that deviate from these expectations. The discussion will focus on the prefixes un-, in-/im-, mis- and non- and will show that prefixation often works as predicted, but also that there are instances where the “stem” differs in meaning and lastly where the “stem” is not a word used in current English. Due to limitations of space, analogous phenomena with nouns or verbs will be excluded from the considerations, as will be a detailed consideration of the etymologies of the stem morphemes.
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Comparison and Contrast I: Two Excerpts from NovelsEvery night he bolted himself in his room. As soon as he was still he felt the stillness around him and he had to make movements to destroy the stillness, to challenge the alertness of the room and the objects in it. He was rocking hard on the creaking board one night when he thought of the power of the rockers to grind and crush and inflict pain, on his hands and toes and the tender parts of his body. He rose at once in agony, covering his groin with his hands, sucking hard on his teeth, listening to the chair, as rocking, it moved sideways along the cambered plank. The chair fell silent. He looked away from it. On the wall he saw a nail that could puncture his eye. The window could trap and mangle. So could the door. Every leg of the green table could press and crush. The castors of the dressing table. The drawers. He lay face down on the bed, not wanting to see and, to drive out the shapes of objects from his head, he concentrated on the shapes of letters, working out design after design for the letter R. At last he fell asleep with his hands covering the vulnerable parts of his body, and wishing he had hands to cover himself all over.
Louis Vale let himself into his ground-floor flat in Curzon Street, slammed the metallic door, threw his briefcase onto the bed or divan (he preferred to call it a bed), and turned on his bath. His room, one of an enormous block, resembled the cell of some privileged prisoner. Bare but very expensive essentials were symmetrically arranged in a room so small and so dark that colour, untidiness, or time-wasting trivia of any kind would have been lost or unusable in it. Everything possible was flush with the walls. The cupboard for his clothes, the shelf for his alcohol, the wireless: even the lights clung like white bulbous leeches to the grey paint. There was a cringing armchair and a small double-tier table on which lay an ash tray, a telephone, and the current copy of The Architectural Review. The curtains were grey: he never drew them. His bathroom, equipped like a small operating theatre for the business of shaving, and now slowly suffusing with steam, was a bright uncompromising white. He emptied his pockets, flung off his clothes, and bathed. Ten minutes later he was in his dinner jacket swallowing whisky and water.
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Comp/Cont II: Overview of the General Approach
Compare and Contrast
How alike ?
How different? with regard to
with regard to
with regard to
…
Patterns of similarities and differences:
Argument or interpretation
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Comp/Cont III: How are the texts alike?
A House for Mr Biswas The Long View
How alike ?
• room / evening (Setting)• very detailed descriptions of setting (adjectives) • one man in a room actions and feelings• interaction of man and room
(confinement/prison)
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Comp/Cont IV: How do the texts differ?
How different? fear /conveyed via description of the room
with regard to
man’s feelings
feeling conveys by actions
protagonist’s thoughts are given
with regard to
narrationnarrator is a watcher, not omniscient
no namesman’s actions and fears
with regard to
kind of details
name/address/floor levelroom neutral and grey
potential causers of pain / furniture has power
with regard to
furniturecringing armchair, lights like leeches/room remains passive
protagonist covers his body
with regard to protagonist strips and has a bath
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Comp/Cont V: Now what do we do with this?xxxxxxxx with regard to
xxxxxxxxxxxxx
Patterns of similarities and differences:Same subject matter but treated in rather different ways: Room as place of enslavement in Text A vs. enslaved room in Text B
Argument or interpretation:Different depictions of loneliness in terms of power experienced (Text A) or exercised (Text B)
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Forms a)
Getting the elements of the paper into place• Topic• Point to
make/Argument• Importance/ Relevance• Methodology• Evidence (content of
paper)• Structure• References
(bibliography)
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Forms b)
Peer Group Assessment sheet
Find the theme
Find what works
Find what doesn’t
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Forms c)
Assessment Criteria
• Surface Features• Range• Structure• Content• Style
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Thanks for listening
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