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VOICE &
DICTIONSamples from student writing under test
conditions
(JC2, Term 1 2013)
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What ?
The choices a writer makesWords & phrases for impact,emotional connection,
visualisationSentence structures, pattern
& lengthFigurative language
Literary devices etc.
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What for ?
To defend &
convince !
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CLEARCONNECTIONS
to the question& its key words
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Is it impossible to have quality
time with the family ? ... greater ease at accessing social media
sites such as Facebook and Twitter.Eventually, this has led to the overusage oftechnology even at the wrong times. During
family dinners, youth may still be constantlyon their phones, oblivious to theirsurroundings. There may be physicalproximity between them and their families,
but there would be no engagement orfamilial communication. Time may be spentwith the family, but it would not be qualitytime if most of the members are engrossedwith their digital devices.
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NEVER
CONTRADICTYOURSELF
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Do not write in absolute
language that you cannot defend
How to edit the contradictions causedby language below ?
STAND : Quality time with the family is
very difficult to achieve, but notimpossible
One could argue that quality time isimpossible to achieve because the pace
of life today is too fast. On the other hand, it can also be argued
that quality time is possible if there isenough help for families from thegovernment or employers.
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LABEL PERSPECTIVES
CLEARLY
for a MEASURED,WELL-CONSIDERED TONE Proponents, Advocates, Supporters,
Opponents, Detractors, Critics, Optimists,Pessimists misapplied words ?
vs
Those/People who think/argue/believe that ...
vs
A government/business/viewer(specify) that is
concerned with/thinks that ...
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MEASURED,
WELL-CONSIDERED
TONEQualifiers, Intensifiers,Downtoners, Quantifiers
Modals
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TONE, VOICE,
DICTIONthat suits the topic
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ou re g on s eemphasized ?
Religion has been around almost ever since
humans possessed the ability to rationalise and think beyondbasic survival. This intrinsic desire to find out where we come
from and what is my purpose have resulted in what we see as
religion today. Back when people were afraid of nature, like
thunderstorms or hurricanes, and provided no scientific
reasoning as to why certain phenomenon occur, Man turned to
an alternative explanation a Higher Being. Certainly religion
serves other purposes, like salvation, making morality a part of
us, a mode of self-actualisation and many more. However, with
our current progress in the fields of physics, genetics and
biology, is there still a need to emphasise religion ? Humans
have established systems which seem to slowly chip away at thefundamental purpose of religion, be it through the law, science
and even politics. This writer believes that religion still has a role
to play in our modern world but an emphasis of it should not be
encouraged to the extent that is once was.
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VISUALISATION
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Is it impossible to have quality
time with the family ? ... Most parents would head to work early in the
morning and return at night, while the children would
have to go through the mundane routine of
schooling every weekday. The family would usuallysuccumb to lethargy after they head home, and may
be too exhausted to talk. For students, they are left
with piles of assignments to be done, restricting
them to their own tasks. They would be little time
each day to even have proper conversations with
each other within the family. This routine repeats
itself day after day...
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LISTING &USING A RANGE
for effect
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Are we addicted to technology
?
... If one sees technology as a solution to resolve anyproblem one meets in life like the difficulty in writing a
chemical equation or deriving a mathematical expression,
one could become over-reliant on technology. With the
creation of search engines like Google, more and more
internet users are depending on Google for answers in everyaspect of their lives, be it on the ways to living a healthy
lifestyle or the latest Korean celebrity stars updates. Many
users are also losing their ability to memorise or simply
remember what they wanted to search online because
Google will automatically and immediately show possible
matches to their questions just by typing a few key words.
Given a longer period of time, they become so over-reliant
that they turn to Google for anything from bread-and-butter
issues like job-hunting and cooking to aiding in their memory.
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BIG WORDS
Do they work
or not ?
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Samples :
Religion is powerful. It indubitably holdsinsurmountable power to influence the masses. In
contemporary society, there is a plethora of
different religions...
... Religion has brought about propitious benefits.
... Those who subscribe to this beliefabhorrently
kidnap children...
...Terrorists brainwash these men to perform
odious acts like bombing...
It would be insane if these aberrations of religions
were to be emphasised ...
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Samples : ... Religion promotes benevolence,
fraternity and other good values
The state grants its citizens volition to
choose which religion to put their faith in. Instability was natural corollary of this
incident.
In the case of riot, the emphasis onreligion would be inimical to society.
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