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EXPOSITORY ESSAY - SCIENCE FAIR PROJECT-
Student details: Name Monnapat Panutavakul Class M 4/1 Number 26 Weebly ID 33659.weebly.com Mobile number 087-1365529 Email [email protected] Published file name expository_science_formative (Monnapat)
Table of Contents 1. TABLE OF CONTENTS
2. FORMATIVE REQUIREMENTS COVER3. BRAINSTORM / RESEARCH (ideas, reference paper,
mind-map) 4. EXAMPLE OF PROJECT (cut/paste from reference paper.)5. GRAPHIC ORGANIZER (flow chart)6. ESSAY MAP 7. ORIGINAL DRAFT: (Name of peer who revised) 8. REVISED DRAFT: (Name of peer who edited)9. PUBLISHED WORK- ORIGINAL 10. RUBRIC (self graded)11. PUBLISHED WORK - TEACHER’S COMMENTS
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Friday 26th November, 2010 Teacher: Neville
Expository Essay- Science Fair Project.(One page essay)
Students are expected to explain the process of a Science Fair Project,
as published in Teaching ESOL Through Science Fair Experiments, by Judie Haynes.
Structure Expository Essay, published on student’s weblog (including all prewriting).
Procedure Students log on to class weblog/ formative page and download the following files: EXPOSITORY SCIENCE FORMATIVE SCIENCE PROJECT
The EXPOSITORY SCIENCE FORMATIVE file should be immediately published onto the student’s weblog.
The above files contain all the information needed to complete this exercise.
Students’ production
By Wednesday 8 th December, 2010 , students will have completed their work.
Students are required to publish updates of their file, progressively.
Teacher will then comment on individual student’s 9. PUBLISHED WORK- ORIGINAL and email it to them for pasting to the final page of their file;11.PUBLISHED WORK - TEACHER’S COMMENTS
Objectives
Students will display knowledge of the elements of an Expository Essay by explaining the process, in logical order, for a science fair experiment.
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PROJECT EXAMPLEEgg in a Bottle
Question
What happens when air molecules expand?
Hypothesis
I think that air pressure will make the egg fit through the neck of a bottle.
Materials Hard-boiled egg A glass bottle Piece of paper Matches
Procedure
1. Hard boil an egg. 2. Take the shell off the egg. 3. Light a small piece of paper and drop it into the bottle. 4. Put the egg on the neck of the bottle.
Results
The egg dropped into the bottle.
Conclusion
The fire makes the air molecules move further apart and expand. The pressure pulls the egg into the bottle.
References: Haynes, J. (2006). River Edge Public Schools River Edge, N.J. Tampa, Florida
BRAINSTORMING, RESEARCH, MIND-MAP
GRAPHIC ORGANIZER
TOPIC:
Egg in a BottleLAST: The fire makes the air molecules move further apart and expand. The pressure pulls the egg into the bottle.
Egg in a Bottle
Question Materials
Hypothesis
Procedure
Conclusion
Result
Variable
What happens when air molecules expand?
air pressure will make the egg fit through the neck of a bottle.
-Hard-boiled egg -A glass bottle -Piece of paper -Matches
the amount of air in the bottle.
1. Hard boil an egg. 2. Take the shell off the egg. 3. Light a small piece of paper and drop it into the bottle. 4. Put the egg on the neck of the bottle.
The egg dropped into the bottle.
The fire makes the air molecules move further apart and expand. The pressure pulls the egg into the bottle.
ESSAY MAP
Introduction
Hook, Background, Purpose of Writing, Main ideas
Main idea 2
Hypothesis
Main idea 3
Materials needed
Have you ever tried to put the egg into the bottle? Normally, the aperture at the top of bottles usually be narrow. People who have tried to push the egg into bottle ever knew that the egg will split out. As a matter of fact, the aperture is smaller than the egg but there’s the way to do it so now I’m going to explain you the process of this interesting
Supporting details 2
2.1 air pressure will make the egg fit through the neck of a bottle.
Supporting details 3
3.1 Hard-boiled egg 3.2 A glass bottle 3.3 Piece of paper 3.4 Matches
Conclusion
Summarize Main ideas, Link to P.O.W. Make a point
Main idea 1
QuestionSupporting details 1
1.1 What happens when air molecules expand?
The conclusion for the story of this experiment that I have previously explained is the fire can make the air molecules move further apart and expand. This pressure pulls the egg into the bottle. All I have mentioned explained how the experiment operated by scientific method clearly shown in step by step provides the success of the experiment.
FIRST:
What happens when air molecules expand?
NEXT:
My hypothesis is air pressure will make the egg fit through the neck of a bottle.
NEXT: Materials are hard-boiled egg, a glass bottle, piece of paper, matches
NEXT:
The variable is the amount of
air in the bottle.
NEXT:
Present the experiment by make graph, table and photo during the experiment
NEXT:
The egg dropped into the bottle.
NEXT: Hard boil an egg then Take the shell off it. Light a small piece of paper and drop it into the bottle then put the egg on the neck of the bottle.
ORIGINAL DRAFT Have you ever tried to put the egg into the bottle? Normally, the aperture at the top of bottles usually be narrow. People who have tried to push the egg into bottle ever knew that the egg will split out. As a matter of fact, the aperture are smaller than the egg but there’s the way to do it so now I’m going to explain you the process of this interesting experiment!
At first, we must have some question we want to know about the experiment something associate to the topic, show that how does the experiment
Main Ideas
Support P.O.W. Fact, Explain, Define, Other elements
Main idea 4
Variables in the experiment
Main idea 6
Result of the experiment
Main idea 3
Materials needed
Main idea 5
Procedures
Main idea 7
PresentationMain idea 8
Conclusion
Supporting details 4
4.1 the amount ofair in the bottle.
Supporting details 6
6.1 The egg dropped into the bottle.
Supporting details 3
3.1 Hard-boiled egg 3.2 A glass bottle 3.3 Piece of paper 3.4 Matches
Supporting details 55.1 Hard boil an egg. 5.2 Take the shell off the egg. 5.3 Light a small piece of paper and drop it into the bottle.5.4 Put the egg on the neck of bottle
Supporting details 7
7.1 Graph
7.2 TableSupporting details 8
8.1 The fire makes the air molecules move further apart and expand. The pressure pulls the egg into the bottle.
Supporting details
Detail supporting Main idea and further describe, explain, define, or give examples
interesting so my question is What happens when air molecules in the bottle expand?
Second, we should have the hypothesis, guess for something that might be possible in this experiment such as air pressure will make the egg fit through the neck of a bottle.
After that, list down and prepare the materials needed for this experiment. In this case we just need hard-boiled egg, a glass bottle, piece of paper and matches.
Specify the main variable; the variable of this experiment is the amount of air in the bottle. It’s also the important factor of the experiment that control the aspect of the result and conclusion of the experiment
Now, it’s the time we can carefully run the experiment by following procedure step by step. Begin as hard boil an egg then take the shell off it. Light a small piece of paper and drop it into the bottle then put the egg on the neck of the bottle.
After we’ve observed the experiment, the result that was shown is so wondering. The egg has perfectly passed through the neck of bottle and easily dropped into the bottle by didn’t split. Then, we need conclusion and presentation that we should present in the easy way such as table, graph and take the photo during the experiment for easy to understand.
The conclusion for the story of this experiment that I have explained is the fire can makes the air molecules move further apart and expand. This pressure pulls the egg into the bottle.
Finally, all I have mention above explain how the experiment operated by scientific method clearly shown in step by step provides the success of the experiment.
Peer’s name: Phakjira C. #25
REVISED DRAFT Have you ever tried to put the egg into the bottle? Normally, the aperture at the top of bottles usually be narrow. People who have tried to push the egg into bottle ever knew that the egg will split out. As a matter of fact, the aperture
is smaller than the egg but there’s the way to do it so now I’m going to explain you the process of this interesting experiment!
At first, we must have some question we want to know about the experiment something associate to the topic, show that how the experiment interesting does so my question is what happens when air molecules in the bottle expand.
Second, we should have the hypothesis, guess for something that might be possible in this experiment such as air pressure will make the egg fit through the neck of a bottle.
After that, list down and prepare the materials needed for this experiment. In this case we just need hard-boiled egg, a glass bottle, piece of paper and matches.
Specify the main variable; the variable of this experiment is the amount of air in the bottle. It’s also the important factor of the experiment that controls the aspect of the result and conclusion of the experiment
Now, it’s the time we can carefully run the experiment by following procedure step by step. Begin as hard boil an egg then take the shell off it. Light a small piece of paper and drop it into the bottle then put the egg on the neck of the bottle.
After we’ve observed the experiment, the result that was shown is so wondering. The egg has perfectly passed through the neck of bottle and easily dropped into the bottle by didn’t split then, we need conclusion and presentation that we should present in the easy way such as table, graph and take the photo during the experiment for easy to understand.
The conclusion for the story of this experiment that I have explained is the fire can make the air molecules move further apart and expand. This pressure pulls the egg into the bottle.
Finally, all I have mentioned above explained how the experiment operated by scientific method clearly shown in step by step provides the success of the experiment.
PUBLISHED WORK
Have you ever tried to put the egg into the bottle? Normally, the aperture at the top of bottles usually be narrow. People who have tried to push the egg into bottle ever knew that the egg will split out. As a matter of fact, the aperture is smaller than the egg but there’s the way to do it so now I’m going to explain you the process of this interesting experiment!
At first, we must have some question we want to know about the experiment something associate to the topic, show that how the experiment interesting does so my question is what happens when air molecules in the bottle expand.
Second, we should have the hypothesis, guess for something that might be possible in this experiment such as air pressure will make the egg fit through the neck of a bottle.
After that, list down and prepare the materials needed for this experiment. In this case we just need hard-boiled egg, a glass bottle, piece of paper and matches.
Specify the main variable; the variable of this experiment is the amount of air in the bottle. It’s also the important factor of the experiment that controls the aspect of the result and conclusion of the experiment
Now, it’s the time we can carefully run the experiment by following procedure step by step. Begin as hard boil an egg then take the shell off it. Light a small piece of paper and drop it into the bottle then put the egg on the neck of the bottle.
After we’ve observed the experiment, the result that was shown is so wondering. The egg has perfectly passed through the neck of bottle and easily dropped into the bottle by didn’t split then, we need conclusion and presentation that we should present in the easy way such as table, graph and take the photo during the experiment for easy to understand.
The conclusion for the story of this experiment that I have explained is the fire can make the air molecules move further apart and expand. This pressure pulls the egg into the bottle.
Finally, all I have mentioned above explained how the experiment operated by scientific method clearly shown in step by step provides the success of the experiment.
Expository essay by Moonapat Panuvatakul #26 EP4/1 33659.weebly.com/ File: expository_science_formative (Monnapat)
Reference: Haynes, J. (2006). River Edge Public Schools River Edge, N.J. Tampa, FloridaPhoto: http://faculty.sdmiramar.edu/fgarces/zCourse/All_Year/Ch100_MM/aMy_FilesLab/06LbMM_Expt/Ex09_GasDemo/IdealGasPic/EggBottleSeq.jpg
Expository- Science FairObjective Emerging 1 Developing 2 Accomplished 3 Exemplary 4 Score
PUBLISHING
(Finished look)
The writing demonstrates little or no attention to visual presentation elements and is uninviting to the reader.
Limited attention to visual presentation is demonstrated. The writing creates low desire to be read. Reflects many “lost opportunities”. .
Attention to visual presentation elements is strongly exhibited with only a few minor “lost opportunities”
Attention to visual presentation elements is such that the writing has an immediate impact and is highly inviting to the reader.
Uniform spacing4
Appropriate use of font style, sizes and colors. 4
Appealing use of white space 4Effective integration of text and illustrations, photos, charts, graphs, maps and tables. 4
Skillful and tasteful use of colors in layout. 4
The blog reflects the personality of the writer. 4
EXPOSITORY ESSAY ELEMENTS
Gives facts. Explains. Steps in a process. Present ideas in logical order, correct sequence.
Writing does not display elements of an Expository Essay
Contains all elements but does not meet
criteria in one or moreAll elements are
present and complete.Expository Structure exceeds requirement 4
ESSAY STRUCTURE
INTRO- contains strong Purpose of Writing.
PARAGRAPHS-Topic sentence, plus supporting ideas and examples. Transitional words used.
CONCLUSION- links back to P.O.W.
Basic Structure is incomplete. Display
little structure.
Structure is generally evident and mostly
correctStructure is complete
Structure exceeds standards and
enhances the writing3
