Title: How and why Ilford has changed over time?

To understand how to structure the main body of an essay using PEEL

BRIDGES – Concentration and planning

Make notes in your draft book: What is an essay?

An essay is a long piece of writing, sometimes written from the author’s point of view. It is

written in paragraphs.

An essay consists of three major parts: the introduction; the main body; the conclusion.

Introduction

Main body

Conclusion

What has changed in Ilford over time?(Compare changes from the past to today)

What topics could you write a paragraph about? Some useful ideas • Land use changes • Migration • schools• houses• jobs• Religious places• Food places• Traditional cloth stores

Why do you think Ilford has changed over time?

What reasons could you write for each change?STEPS TO SUCCESS: See some examples: • You can link religion and migration)-Migration has brought people

of different cultural and ethnic origins which means Ilford has a lot of new religious places today. For example we have Mosques(names and which street are they on?), Buddhist temple (where exactly is it), Hindu temple and Sikh temples whereas 100 years ago. We only had Churches in Ilford(name some of the churches in Ilford and where exactly are they). We have to build these religious places because……

• Religion and culture can be linked with food and festivals

• Population increase can be linked with schools, houses, other buildings

Introduction (draft book)

Introductions are written at the start of an essay. They should be clear and precise. Introductions should indicate what the essay is about. It should be brief, saying only what is necessary and no more.

1 paragraph

TASK: Write your introduction in your draft book first.

Describe and explain how Ilford is changing over time - Introduction

STEPS TO SUCCESS:I think that Ilford has changed a lot/a little bit/has not changed over time.

The word change means…Ilford has seen many changes in the past 100 years or so, migration, population, religion, jobs and many more. I will describe and explain these changes.

Main Body (draft book):

Each paragraph is going to be structured using the

PEEL technique

Point (make a point)

Evidence (provide evidence to support the point)

Explain (explain that point)

Link (Link back to the essay title)

Point Make your point. Tell the reader exactly what your paragraph is about.

Evidence You should always include evidence to support your point. Evidence can be in the form of: quotes, statistics, facts, opinions and even photographs, diagrams or images.

Explanation Then explain how your point and evidence answers the question you have been asked.This provides clarification of your point to the reader.

Link Try to make a link back to the original title question/statement to make sure the paragraph is finished.

PEEL in more detail …

This is an important change which could be happening because people are migrating to Mallorca, perhaps for the good weather or job opportunities. It also means that Mallorca has to provide services, homes and jobs for people which could lead to building over green land.

The population has risen from 60,000 people in 1900 to 700,000 people 2012 and it continues to increase.

Over the last 100 years Mallorca has seen a significant amount of changes in population.

This shows Mallorca is changing over time as there has been a population increase and better opportunities for people moving there.

DON’T COPY THE PARAGRAPH. THIS IS JUST AN EXAMPLE TO SHOW YOU HOW TO STRUCTURE YOUR PARAGRAPHS.

3’ CHALLENGE IN YOUR DRAFT BOOK: Identify Point, example, explanation and link from the statements below?

Describe and explain how Mallorca is changing over time

Over the last 100 years Mallorca has seen a significant amount of social changes. The population has risen from 60,000 people in 1900 to 700,000 people 2012 and it continues to increase. This is an important change which could be happening because people are migrating to Mallorca, perhaps for the good weather or job opportunities. It also means that Mallorca has to provide services, homes and jobs for people which could lead to building over green land. This shows Mallorca is changing over time as there has been a population increase and better opportunities for people moving there.

Were you right in identifying- Point example explanation and link in the previous slide?

Describe and explain how Mallorca is changing over time

Conclusion (draft book)

Conclusions are written at the end of an essay. They should summarise what has gone before. A good conclusion draws together the threads which the writer has woven to form a tight, coherent whole.

An average essay can be improved by a strong conclusion; a good essay can be let down by a bad one.

(1 paragraph)

Conclusion See the Example below

In this essay I have spoken about how _______ has changed in Ilford.

The biggest change in Ilford is…

Overall, I believe that Ilford has changed a lot/a little because…

INDEPENDENT PRACTICE: Now write your own essay(neat book)

ESSAY TIME REQUIRED: 60’STEPS TO SUCCESS:

• Pick a change in Ilford• Make your POINT• Write the EVIDENCE you have• EXPLAIN your point• Link back to the question and another point• Repeat this for at least 3 points (see the structure in

following slide) • Write a conclusion and evaluate the biggest changes in

Ilford• S&C-How do you think Ilford will change in the next 25

years or so and why?

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PEEL techniquePoint (make a point)Evidence (provide evidence to support the point)Explain (explain that point)Link (Link back to the essay title)