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The Introductory ParagraphThe Introductory Paragraph
References
© 2001 by Ruth Luman
The Paragraph that HooksThe Paragraph that HooksYour ReaderYour Reader
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An IntroductionAn IntroductionDefinition and Purpose
An introduction is the first paragraph in your essay andcontains the thesis statement. The main purposes of anintroduction are to…
catch your reader’s attention so that he/she will become interested in reading your essay.
present the focus of your essay and give your reader some general information about your subject.
An introduction always includes somegeneral statements about your subject and athesis statement that announces the focus ofyour essay. The thesis statement is usuallythe last sentence in the introduction becauseit is the most specific. Notice how theintroduction below begins with generalinformation and becomes more specific.
An IntroductionAn IntroductionGeneral Information and Focus
An IntroductionAn IntroductionGeneral Information and Focus
Specific focus ofessay and thesisstatement.
General statements provide backgroundinformation on the focus of health carefor homeless people with HIV.
There are a number of frightening disease epidemics occurring in
the United States today, but one of the most frightening is the
epidemic spread of sexually transmitted diseases. Among the most
serious of these sexually transmitted diseases is HIV which leads to
AIDS, a fatal disease. HIV is especially problematic among
homeless people. This particular population is difficult to treat due to
a number of barriers such as, limited access to health care, mistrust
of health care professionals, and a lack of awareness of the disease,
itself.
An IntroductionAn IntroductionA Closer Look
Let’s look at that introduction again and see how the sentences
become more and more specific leading to the thesis statement.
There are a number of frightening disease epidemics occurring in the United States today, but one of the most frightening is the epidemic spread of sexually transmitted diseases.
Among the most serious of these sexually transmitted diseases is HIV which leads to AIDS, a fatal disease.
HIV is especially problematic among homeless people.
This particular population is difficult to treat due to a number of barriers such as, limited access
to health care, mistrust of health care
professionals, and a lack of awareness of the
disease, itself.
GeneralStatements
MoreSpecific
Very Specific:Thesis
Statement
Example #2Example #2General Information and Focus
Here is another example of how an introduction can begin with general information and become more specific with a thesis statement at the end.
Example #2Example #2General Information and Focus
Specific focus ofessay and thesisstatement.
General statements provide backgroundinformation on the steps the Indiangovernment is taking to reduce population.
Overpopulation and finding ways to reduce it are big concerns
of many developing nations today. One nation that is concerned
about this issue is India. One of the biggest causes of overpopulation
in India is the high infant mortality rate. Parents often have more
children because they are fearful that if some children die, there
won’t be enough children to take care of them in their old age. India is
taking some important steps in dealing with this problem. Some of
the steps the Indian government is taking are providing birth control
for women, improving pre-natal care, and educating women on the
benefits of having fewer children.
Example #2Example #2A Closer Look
Look at the example below to see how the sentences in theintroduction become more and more specific leading to thethesis statement.
Overpopulation and finding ways to reduce it are big concerns of many
developing nations today. One nation that is concerned about this issue is India.
One of the biggest causes of overpopulation in India is the high infant
mortality rate.
Parents often have more children because they are fearful that if
some children die, there won’t be enough children to take care of
them in their old age.
India is taking some important steps in dealing with this
problem. Some of the steps the Indian government is
taking are providing birth control for women, improving
pre-natal care, and educating women on the benefits
of having fewer children.
GeneralStatements
MoreSpecific
VerySpecific:Thesis
Statement
An IntroductionAn IntroductionCatch the Reader’s Attention
In addition to stating the thesis and providing some general
information on your subject, an introduction also needs to catch areader’s attention and cause him/her to become interested inreading your essay. There are several ways you can introduceyour subject and catch your reader’s attention.
Use a story or example of a personal experience.
Use a quotation.
Use a question or questions.
A brief dramatic story or example can beused to get the attention of your reader. Look at the example below and think abouthow it catches your attention.
Catching AttentionCatching AttentionUsing a Story or Personal Experience
Personal Story or ExamplePersonal Story or Example A personal story can “hook” yourreader into wanting to read more.
ThesisStatement
When the car accident happened, my brother was left with a
broken arm, leg, and hip. My mother nearly died due to head
injuries. However, we all survived due to the team of emergency
medical technicians who responded quickly to the scene and
provided us with the help we needed. After my experience of being
involved in a car accident, I saw how I could use my interest in first
aid and desire to help other people through becoming an
emergency medical technician. Now, after twenty years of work as
an EMT, I think it is the most rewarding job I could ever have and
feel that the occupation, itself, has numerous advantages over other
occupations in the health care field.
Personal Story or ExamplePersonal Story or ExampleExample #2
Here’s another example of how you can use a story to catch a reader’s attention in an introduction.
John’s parents divorced when he was in elementary school.
After the divorce, his mother had to go to work to support him and
his three sisters. This disrupted John’s home life in serious ways.
Without the constant supervision of his mother and the lack of a
father for a role-model, John began skipping school and socializing
with the wrong group of people. He eventually turned to taking
drugs and was later arrested for being a drug dealer and sent to
prison. John is not unlike other prisoners. In many prisons today,
over half of all inmates come from divorced families. Divorce can
be the catalyst that unleashes emotional problems in children
and can affect children psychologically, mentally, and socially.
Personal Story or ExamplePersonal Story or ExampleExample #2
An example of a story in the third person.
ThesisStatement
Sometimes controversial or well-knownquotations can be used to surprise yourreader. Look at the example below andnotice how a quotation can be used to getyou interested in the rest of the essay.
Catching AttentionCatching AttentionUsing a Quote
Using a QuoteUsing a Quote A well-known quotationfrom American literature.
ThesisStatement
Henry David Thoreau, an American poet, once wrote, “ Our life is
frittered away by detail… simplify, simplify!” These words of advice
are difficult to follow in a society where a hectic pace of life is the
norm and the attainment of more material goods is encouraged.
However, I believe that this philosophy of living simply has quite a
bit of merit. The difficulty of following this philosophy is knowing
where we should begin. If we examine Henry David Thoreau’s life
carefully, I believe we will find a number of ways in which to simplify
our own lives and yet live richly.(Quotation from: Watson, 1951)
QuotationQuotationExample #2
Here’s another example of how you can use a quotation to catch a reader’s attention in an introduction.
Horace once wrote, “ Many blessings do the advancing years
bring with them.” For many senior citizens in the United States
today, old age can often come as a curse. Many older people suffer
from ill health, loneliness, and/or financial instability; however, life
in later years does not have to be this way. Many senior citizens
can experience the blessings of advancing years that Horace once
wrote about. In order to do that, let’s consider ways in which old
age actually enhances life.(Quotation from: Watson, 1951)
QuotationQuotationExample #2
Quotation
Thesis Statement
Another way to catch your reader’sattention is with a question. Questions canmake your reader begin thinking about thesubject in your essay.
Catching AttentionCatching AttentionUsing Questions
Have you ever run in a marathon? Most marathons are twenty
six miles. Have you ever heard of one-hundred mile marathons?
The state of Colorado hosts a one-hundred mile marathon each
year. People from all over the United States and the world run in
this marathon. Some of the top runners in this race have been
members of the Tarahumara Indian tribe in the Sierra Madre
mountains of Mexico. Tarahumaras do not train for marathons, but
their lifestyle and culture promotes, develops, and supports this
type of athletic endeavor.
Using QuestionsUsing Questions Questions that may surprise your reader.
Thesis Statement
Did you know that one of the eight architectural wonders of the world
is located in Cambodia? Angkor Wat is an ancient Buddhist temple that
was the center of culture and religion for the Khmer empire for several
centuries. It was only recently re-discovered by a French explorer during
the 1800’s. It has now become one of the most popular tourist attractions
in Southeast Asia. If you visit Angkor Wat, you will find much to admire in
its size, historical significance, and beauty.
QuestionsQuestionsExample #2
Here’s another example of how you can use a question to catch a reader’s attention in an introduction.
Question
Thesis Statement
Body ParagraphsBody Paragraphs
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© 2001 by Ruth Luman
Writing Paragraphs of Importance Writing Paragraphs of Importance
Body ParagraphsBody ParagraphsPurpose
The body paragraphs in your essay supportthe main idea in your thesis statement bybreaking it down into smaller ideas or subtopics. Ideas in your paragraphs should relate back tothe thesis statement.
Essay
Introduction &
Thesis Statement
Body Paragraph 1
_____________
Body Paragraph 2
_____________
Body Paragraph 3
_____________
Body Paragraph 4
_____________
Body Paragraph 5
_____________
Body ParagraphsBody Paragraphs
Most paragraphs contain between five to ten sentences. The first line of a paragraph is usually indented (begin a few spaces to the right of the margin) to show that there is a new paragraph.
Form
________________________ . ____________________. _____________________. _________________________. ____________________________. ____________________. ______________________. ______________________________.
indent
Key FeaturesKey Features Body paragraphs should should containsome of the following features…
A Topic Sentence
Supporting Sentences
A Concluding Sentence
Unity
Topic SentencesTopic Sentences
Every paragraph should have a topicsentence. This is the most important sentencebecause it expresses the main idea of theparagraph.
Definition
Body Paragraph
An important factor in learning a foreign language has to do with the
concept of intrinsic versus extrinsic motivation. When we do something
for the “fun of it” or because we enjoy it, that is called intrinsic
motivation. Extrinsic motivation, on the other hand, is when we do
something for the purpose of receiving some kind of external reward
such as money, time off from work, etc. Many education experts believe
that intrinsic motivation is more powerful when it comes to helping
students retain what they’ve learned. The question and challenge for
teachers today is, “How can we help our students become intrinsically
motivated in what we are teaching?”
ExampleExampleTopic Sentence
Topic Sentence: states the main idea of the paragraph.
Topic Sentence EssentialsTopic Sentence EssentialsComplete Sentence
There are several things you need toremember when writing topic sentences. Thefirst is that topic sentences are alwayscomplete sentences.
ExampleExample
Strategies of learning English.
There are many strategies
that you can use to help you
learn a new language.
Not a complete sentence
ExampleExample
The Day of the Dead.
The Day of the Dead is a special holiday in Mexico when people can get together to remember deceased loved ones.
Not a complete sentence
Topic Sentence EssentialsTopic Sentence EssentialsTwo Parts
A topic sentence contains the topic of theparagraph and a controlling idea. Thecontrolling idea limits the topic to somethingvery specific.
Topic Sentence Companies should develop more efficient forms of energy such as solar heating panels.
ExampleExampleThis sentence does not contain a controlling idea. This is not a good topic sentence, because it does not limit the topic to make it more specific.
Controlling Idea: limits the ideas in the paragraph and makes the sentence more specific.
Topic Sentence Companies need to develop more efficient forms of energy.
Topic: names the main idea
Example #2Example #2Topic and Controlling Idea
Topic Sentence
One of the most serious problems in today’s inner-city public
schools is overcrowded classrooms.
Topic: names the main idea or general subject of the paragraph
Controlling Idea: makes a specific comment about the subject. Tells the reader what the paragraph will say about the main topic.
Example #2Example #2Topic and Controlling Idea
Topic Sentence
One of the most serious problems in today’s inner-city public
schools is the low percentage of trained teachers.
Topic: names the main idea or general subject of the paragraph
Controlling Idea: makes a specific comment about the subject. Tells the reader what the paragraph will say about the main topic.
Be Careful!Be Careful!
Make sure that your topic sentence does not contain too many controlling ideas.
Be Careful!Be Careful!
Make sure that your topic sentence does not contain too many controlling ideas.
Topic Sentence The advent of the Internet has benefited society through improved communication.
ExampleExampleThere are too many controlling ideas to be covered in one paragraph. A good topic sentence should be limited to one controlling idea.
Most topic sentences contain only one controlling idea.
Topic Sentence The advent of the Internet has benefited society through improved communication, access to information, and streamlined commerce.
Supporting SentencesSupporting SentencesDefinition
Every paragraph has sentences that relateto the ideas in the topic sentence. Thesesentences are called supporting sentences. Look at the supporting sentences on the nextpage to see how the writer provided moreinformation on the subject in the topicsentence.
Supporting SentencesSupporting SentencesTopic Sentence
An important factor in learning a foreign language has to do with the
concept of intrinsic versus extrinsic motivation.
When we do something for the “fun of it” or because we enjoy it, that is called intrinsic motivation.
Extrinsic motivation, on the other hand, is when we do something for the purpose of receiving some kind of external reward such as money, time off from work, etc.
Many education experts believe that intrinsic motivation is more
powerful when it comes to helping students retain what they’ve learned.
Supporting Sentences
Concluding SentenceConcluding Sentence
A concluding sentence is the lastsentence in a paragraph. A conclusion
canremind the reader of the main points of aparagraph and/or leave the reader withsomething to think about in relation to
thetopic. Look at the next page to see howthe writer used a concluding sentence.
Definition and Purpose
Concluding SentenceConcluding Sentence
A concluding sentence is the lastsentence in a paragraph. A conclusion
canremind the reader of the main points of aparagraph and/or leave the reader withsomething to think about in relation to
thetopic. Look at the next page to see howthe writer used a concluding sentence.
Definition and Purpose
Concluding SentenceConcluding Sentence
A concluding sentence is the lastsentence in a paragraph. A conclusion
canremind the reader of the main points of aparagraph and/or leave the reader withsomething to think about in relation to
thetopic. Look at the next page to see howthe writer used a concluding sentence.
Definition and Purpose
Concluding SentenceConcluding Sentence
A concluding sentence is the lastsentence in a paragraph. A conclusion
canremind the reader of the main points of aparagraph and/or leave the reader withsomething to think about in relation to
thetopic. Look at the next page to see howthe writer used a concluding sentence.
Definition and Purpose
Body Paragraph
An important factor in learning a foreign language has to do with the
concept of intrinsic versus extrinsic motivation. When we do something
for the “fun of it” or because we enjoy it, that is called intrinsic
motivation. Extrinsic motivation, on the other hand, is when we do
something for the purpose of receiving some kind of external reward
such as money, time off from work, etc. Many education experts believe
that intrinsic motivation is more powerful when it comes to helping
students retain what they’ve learned. The question and challenge for
teachers today is, “How can we help our students become intrinsically
motivated in what we are teaching?”
Concluding SentenceConcluding Sentence
This concluding sentence tries to leave a final thought with the reader by asking a question.
Concluding Concluding SentenceSentence
Useful Expressions
It is sometimes helpful to have a concluding expressionin your last sentence to signal the end of your paragraph.Some common expressions used in concluding sentencesare listed below.
As we can see,
These examples show that…
As a result,
In summary,
Finally,
Consequently,
Concluding Concluding SentenceSentence
Useful Expressions
It is sometimes helpful to have a concluding expressionin your last sentence to signal the end of your paragraph.Some common expressions used in concluding sentencesare listed below.
As we can see,
These examples show that…
As a result,
In summary,
Finally,
Consequently,
UnityUnityDefinition
Good paragraphs have unity. Thatmeans that each sentence in the paragraphis related to the topic sentence. Unifiedparagraphs also discuss only one main idea.
Body Paragraph
One of the recent status symbols for many American business people is the
palm pilot. Palm pilots are small electronic devices that help people organize
information such as dates for meetings, short notes, and addresses of contacts.
Fax machines are also very popular among office workers. With palm pilots, a
person can input information at any time and any place. Many business people
also have cellular phones so that they can make phone calls from just about
anywhere. When a person returns to the office from a business trip, he/she won’t
have to spend hours organizing notes or addresses, because the palm pilot
already has that information. All that person has to do now is hook up the palm
pilot to a personal computer, and voila! All the information from meetings is
efficiently organized on the hard drive of the personal computer!
Find the sentences that are “off topic” or do not relate to the topic
sentence. Topic Sentence
These sentences do not relate to the topic sentence in the paragraph. This paragraph does not have unity.
The ConclusionThe Conclusion
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Making Your Last Paragraph CountMaking Your Last Paragraph Count
The End
A ConclusionA ConclusionDefinition and Purpose
The conclusion is the last paragraph in your essay. A conclusion completes the essay and reemphasizes your thesis statement or main ideas. Look at the example thesis statement and conclusion below.
A ConclusionA Conclusion
First Sentence of Conclusion
Ultimately, because of the steps I took, I was successful in fighting the disease…
Thesis Statement
When I first found out that I was diagnosed with cancer, I took
two important steps to fight the disease.
First sentence in conclusion reemphasizes ideas in thesis statement.
A ConclusionA ConclusionSo What?
In addition to referring back to your main idea, yourconclusion needs to show your reader the significance ofyour thesis. When discussing the importance of yourthesis, try to address questions such as…
How and why is this topic important?
How might this topic affect me or other people?
What can be learned from this topic?
Look at the example below of a conclusion that shows the reader the importance of the main idea of the essay.
Example #1Example #1So What?
Conclusion Paragraph Draft
Ultimately, because of the steps I took, I was successful in fighting the disease. I
was able to become healthy enough to attend my daughter’s wedding, and I no longer
worried about dying. Others suffering with cancer can learn an important lesson from
my experience: Don’t give up no matter how hopeless things may seem and always
get a second opinion from another doctor!
Example #1Example #1
The writer points out how the steps she took to fight cancer affected her and other people.
The writer discusses the importance of her topic by writing about the lessons that can be learned.
Look at the example below of a conclusion that refers back to the thesis statement and shows the reader the importance of the main idea of the essay.
Example #2Example #2Conclusion
Conclusion Paragraph
The decision to move to the United States was a difficult one for my parents to
make. Though I was angry with their decision at the time, I understand now that the
poor economy and political instability of my country forced them to immigrate.
Through this experience I learned that one simply cannot control all of life’s
circumstances. One must learn to deal with tough situations as they come and work
to be successful regardless of one’s location.
Example #2Example #2
The first two sentences
reemphasize the thesis statement.
The writer concludes by discussing the lessons learned from his experience.
Thesis Statement
There were several factors that caused my family to make the difficult decision
to immigrate to the United States.
Concluding an EssayConcluding an EssayTechniques
Some ways to enhance a conclusion are toinclude a…
Prediction
Recommendation
Quotation
Concluding an EssayConcluding an EssayA Prediction
A prediction talks about what might happen in the future. A prediction can be a good way to finish your essay. It can make your reader think about the possible results of your thesis statement.
PredictionPredictionExample
Finally, the importance of beginning a program to reforest parts of Haiti will be an important step in making thiscountry more economically self-sufficient. Without such aprogram in place, the people of this country will continue todestroy their natural resources for fuel in order to salvage theirpresent state of survival.
A program to reforest parts of Haiti is urgently needed.
Thesis Statement
A prediction is used to make the reader think about possible results of the thesis.
Concluding an EssayConcluding an EssayA Recommendation
A recommendation is often used by a writer after he/she has discussed a problem in an essay. A recommendation can be used to suggest a solution or call the readers to do something about the problem in the essay.
RecommendationRecommendationExample
As we have seen, international students face a numberof difficulties when coming to a new country to study.However, problems such as culture-shock and the languagebarrier can be lessened before a student comes to the newcountry through preparation. If you are considering going toschool in another country, you should begin learning about theculture, customs, and history of your host nation. Also, youshould be sure that you are proficient in the national languageor be sure to sign up for language classes once you are there.
A recommendation is used to suggest a solution to a problem.
Concluding an EssayConcluding an Essay“A Quotation”
A relevant quotation can bring goodclosure to your essay, especially if thequotation is from an expert on the topic inyour composition.
QuotationQuotationExample
David Werner, author of, Where There Is No Doctor,notes that, “Only when the people themselves become activelyresponsible for their own and their community’s health, canimportant changes take place.” This should be the mantra ofevery public health agency when looking at makingimprovements in common health problems. Unless acommunity understands the importance of the intervention andtakes responsibility for transformation, no long-lasting changeswill be made.
A quotation from an expert can be used to add credibility to a writer’s position.
A ConclusionA ConclusionUseful Transitions
It is sometimes helpful to have a transition at thebeginning of your conclusion to signal the end of youressay. Some common transitions used in conclusionsare listed below. Remember to use a comma after yourtransitions.
In conclusion,
In summary,
Thus,
Therefore,
To conclude,
In short,
A ConclusionA ConclusionExample of Transition Use
Thus, despite the advances in computer technology, the kind of computers that take on human characteristics often found in science-fiction movies are still a long way off.
The transition, thus, is used at the beginning of the conclusion to signal the end of the essay.