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Remembertoincludeexpandednounphraseswhereappropriate.

SeeE.g.Pitch-black,windingtunnels.

HearE.g.Haunting,howlingwind.

SmellE.g. Dampearth.

Feel/touchE.g.Close,claustrophobicfeeling.

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black light silent dry

death quiet clear old

ice hills plain life

brave feather coal pale

mud big grave day

dry bone time cold

old solidChurchmouse lion

large dust elephant rock

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Aftereveryturn,therearepitch-black,windingtunnels whichseemaslongasthe

riverNile.

Relentlessly,thecold,airlessroomssuffocateandstrangletheirvictims.

Crumblingdebris isacascadingwaterfallbreakingtheeerie,stillsilence.

Enormous,loomingstatues,whichareasoldastime,standtall.

Piecetogetheryourvocabularyandideastocreateyourdescriptivesentences.

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Aftereveryturn,therearepitch-black,windingtunnelswhichareaslongastheriverNile.Relentlessly,thecold,airlessroomssuffocateandstrangletheirvictims.Crumblingdebrisisacascadingwaterfallbreakingtheeerie,stillsilence.Enormous,loomingstatues,whichareasoldastime,standtall,andallaround,thehauntingwindscreamsmyname.Thearomaofdampearthlingersintheancientcrypt,andfrighteningshadowsleapanddanceinthelamplight.Inthedistance,mysteriousdoorstrytotrickandtease.Hieroglyphswalkthewallsastheyhavedonesincethedawnoftime.Suddenly,aglimpseofglitteringtreasurecatchesmyeye…

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Canyoufindandhighlightexamplesof:Expandednounphrases?SimilesMetaphorsPersonificationCanyouidentifywhichsenseshavebeenusedtodescribe?

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AsIenteredthecrypt,Icouldn’tseeathing.ItwaspitchblackintheresoIhadtofeelmywayaround.

Then,Isawthetreasure!IreachedforthehandleandstartedtoturnitbutIcouldn’treachit.

Withoutwarning,afamilyofmummiesbegantochasemethroughthecrypt.

Suddenly,IheardanoisesoIwalkedtowardsit.Infrontofmewasaroomfilledwithdoors.

Cunningly,Iusedmybooktofigureoutwhichdoortotaketothetreasureroom.

Finally,Imadeitoutbytheskinofmyteeth.Theycan’treachmehere!

Readthesentencescarefullyandplacetheminchronological(time)orderonthestoryboard.

Then,drawapicturetomatchthetext.

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Whatisyourcharacterthinking?

Whatisyourcharacterfeeling?

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Widesmiles/biggrinsRelaxed/openbodylanguageChatty/conversationalLaughingQuick/easymovementsEyecontactLiftedspiritsHeartbursting

TearsClosedbodylanguageQuietLowgaze/lookingdownSolemn/graveexpressionHunchedHuggingselfSlowmovements

FurrowedbrowHeartracingFistsclenchedStompingShakingMindracingSeeingredHeavy/harshmovements

ScratchingheadFurrowedbrowQuestioningSearchingQuestioningbodylanguageHeadshaking

EyeswidePupilsdilatedDrymouthTremblingPalmssweatingTensebodylanguageHeadshakingQuestioning

FixedstareResolutelookDeepbreathingDeafearsTensebodylanguageDefinitemovements

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Canyoufindthesediaryfeatures?

Lookattheexamplesyouhavebeengiven.Howmanycanyoufind?

Features

Deardiary

Signoff

Pasttense

Writteninthefirstperson– I,me

Timeconjunctions

Paragraphs

Informal(chatty)language

Describesimportant places/events

Includes thoughtsandfeelings

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Bytheway…

You’llneverbelievethisbut…

Guesswhathappened…

Thethingis…

Iwon’tevengothere…

Anyway…

Besides…

Perhaps…

Maybe…

Iwonderif…

Canyoubelieveit?

Whathappenedwas…

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Maybe whatdidIhavetolose?

Thethingis nothingbadcouldhappentomehereright?

Besides today,Iwouldfindthetreasureroom.

Iwonderif theyallhadastoughatimeasme?

Anyway thestatuehitme!

You’llneverbelievethisbut

Iwasn’tleavingthereemptyhanded!

Matchthechattysentencestarterstotheendings.Doyoursentencesmakesense? Dotheyneedanyadditionalpunctuation?Whicheventaretheyabout?

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Todaywassuchanepicadventure!Thebestdayofmylife!

AsIenteredtheancientcrypt,Icouldn’tseeathing.ItwaspitchblackintheresoIhadtofeelmywayaround.MypalmsbegantosweatandmypupilsdilatedbutIwasdeterminedtomakeit.Maybetoday,Iwouldfindthetreasureroom?Suddenly,IheardanoisesoIwalkedtowardsit.Infrontofmewasaroomfilledwithdoors.Iscratchedmyheadandmybrowfurrowed.WhichdoorshouldItake?Thethingis,Iwasn’tleavingthereemptyhanded.

Cunningly,Iusedmybooktofigureoutwhichdoortotaketothetreasureroom.You’llneverbelievethisbutthestatueguardingthewayhitme,severaltimes!StraightawayIsawaglimmeringgoldenjackal.Ipickeditup…winner!Then,Isawthetreasure.IreachedforthehandleandstartedtoturnitbutIcouldn’treach.Myfistsclenched,myheartbegantorace,Ihadtoreachit.Iturnedthehandlewithallmymight.Anyway,whatdidIhavetolose?Besides,nothingbadcouldhappentomehereright?

Withoutwarning,afamilyofmummiesbegantochasemethroughthecrypt.Asquickasaflash,Iranthroughthenarrowcorridors.Myheartwaspoundingthewholetime.Theyalmostgotmebuttheyonlymanagedtoripoffmyclothes!Justthen,Icamefacetofacewithaboilinghotriveroflava.Icouldfeeltheheatonmyskin.IgrabbedmybookandittoldmetojumpsoIdid.Luckily,aninvisiblewalkwayformedandIranforit.Finally,Imadeitoutbytheskinofmyteeth.Theycan’treachmehere!Ismiledandbegantolaugh.That’swhenInoticedtheothersstaringatme.Iwonderiftheyallhadastoughatimeasme?Ilovethatplaceandwanttogoback!

Nextevent

Beginning

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Ending

• Firstperson• Pasttense• Timeconjunctions• Chronologicalorder• Thoughtsandfeelings

Thoughtsandfeelings

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Thoughtsandfeelings

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Nextevent– enteringthetreasureroom,findingtreasure

Cunningly,Iusedmybookto…You’llneverbelievethisbut…

StraightawayIsaw…Then,Isawthetreasure…

Anyway…Besides…

Beginning– enteringthetomb,seeingthedoorsTodaywas…

AsIenteredthespookycrypt…Itwaspitchblackinthereso…Maybetoday,Iwouldfind…Suddenly,Iheard….Thethingis….

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Ending– thechase,leavingthecrypt

Withoutwarning…Asquickasaflash…Justthen…Luckily…Finally…Iwonderif…

• Firstperson• Pasttense• Timeconjunctions• Chronologicalorder• Thoughtsandfeelings

Thoughtsandfeelings

Thoughtsandfeelings

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