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MsSarahHutchinson
SouthsidePhysiotherapyCentre
87Troutstreet
Carina
Date:10-04-2008
Re:GeorgeArthurBacon
DateofBirth:14-11-1940
DearMsSarah,
IamwritingtoreferMrGeorgeforahomevisitfollowinglefttotalhipreplacementsurgery
on3/04/2008.Hehasbeenonphysiotherapytreatment
tilldateandinsistsonearly
dischargetocareforhiswifewhoissufferingwithearlystageAlzheimersdisease.
MrGeorgesactivitieswererestrictedsincelastyearbygrindingpainin
thelefthipandhe
hashaddifficultyinclimbinganddescendingstairs.FollowingsurgeryhisX-rayreportsare
normal.
Hisphysiotherapytreatmentfollowingsurgeryisasfollows:
Heisabletowalkwithawalkingframetotheshower,andwalkswithoutlimpwiththeaid
ofwalkingstick(07/04/08).Hecanascendanddescendstairswiththeaidofwalkingstick
andcompletesexercisesregularlywhichincludeactivehipandkneebending.Yesterdayhe
waseducatedtodoself-exercises,
andtransportandhomehelpwasarranged. This
paragraphisabitrepetitive
MrGeorgeisaretiredschoolteacher.Helivesin10Foundationstreet,Carina.
HisPhonenumberis39760753.(subjectrequired)
Iwouldlikeyoutocontinuewithhisassessmentandexercisemanagement.Pleasedonot
hesitatetocontactmeforfurtherqueries.
YoursSincerely
Physiotherapist
The OET centre uses the assessment criteria below when
assessing
referral letters
Overall task fulfillment The letter structure is quite good but
the information does
not flow smoothly. Refer to the model letter for this task
for an example of how to make your letter more organised.
Word length is better at 179 words.
Comment: Replace with: Dear Ms
Huchinson (if you dont know her)or Dear
Sarah (if she is a well known colleague)
see below for details
Comment: Incorrect title. You have 4
choices, & 1 & 2 are best
1. I am writing to refer Mr Bacon
2.I am writing to refer this patient
3.I am writing to refer George4.I am writing to refer Mr George
Bacon
Comment: This sounds casual, Replacewith: since surgery
Comment: Present perfect required here,
replace with: have been restricted
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Comment: An article is required for parts ofthe body. For more
details follow this link:
http://oetonline.com.au/mod/assignment/view.
php?id=97
Comment: You need to add a subject after
and as it is different to the subject of the first
clause
1. First Clause: Georges activities
2.Second clause: George
See below for more details
Comment:No apostrophe required, Replace
with: Yours sincerely
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Comprehension of
stimulus
You have included the key points, but the information during
is not summarised clearly. At times you have written almost
directly from the case notes. Remember the case notes are
in short form and often have verbs and subjects omitted. It
is up to you to put the subjects and verbs in when you
create sentences, and it is much better to summarise the
overall situation rather than lots of specific
facts.Appropriateness of
language
Better paragraphing this time, with a strong introduction.
However paragraph 3 and the conclusion could be improved.
Refer to the model letter below for this task for an
example of how to do this.
Control of linguistic
features In this letter you made some errors of verb tense,
articles
and sentence structure. These are important parts of
referral letters so work hard to gain a good knowledge of
tenses. Refer to the information below, the useful websites
on the course page and the Grammar and Vocabulary Clinic
and study the rules, as you need this knowledge to approach
the exaam with confidence.
Control of presentation
features
A few errors with titles and the closer, otherwise good
