Term 2 year six speech

Target Mark Comment

Write with appropriate structure and organisation.

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I personally think that the way I structured my speech was quite well structured and also quite well organised. I could have done a bit more on my opening, but other then that, it was organised great!

Use quality openings

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I really liked my opening because the rhetorical questions that made you think about the cruelty to the moon bears. I also liked it because it wasn't too many questions so the audences didn’t get board.

Use paragraphs effectively

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I did use paragraphs effectively exept of the fact that my introduction was two paragraphs! Also that my opening had some facts that I could have saved!

Write with detail 1 2 3 4 5

I thought I wrote with detail and was so good at making it sound disgusting so they felt sorry for the moon bears! But on the other hand, I could have writen with more facts

Set out arguments and draw them to a conclusion effectively

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I didn’t have enough facts to draw them to a conclusion too well. But with the facts I did have, I thought it was good!

1. In what way(s) do you think you could have improved the delivery of your speech?

I think I could have slowed down a little or could have Spoke a little louder. Maybe I could have drank more water before I started so I could have a very clear voice.

2. After watching everyone’s speech, what were some things that stood out in your mind?

3. Things that stood out in my mind were Thousand of people died because of animal testing kills millions of people. A British innocent man got the death penalty when he didn’t kill any one!

4. How did you prepare for the speech?5. I prepared by Practicing a lot in front of my pets and my

parents so much that I could recite it without looking at my queue cards. I prepaid before the speech by drinking a lot of water so I wouldn’t get foam in my mouth.

4. What were two things that you think were ‘fantastic’ about your speech?

What I thought was fantastic about my speech was the amount of discussing things so the audience really doesn’t like what the farmers. I also liked how I said three good ways to help a moon bear!

5. How do you feel about giving speeches?I acutely don’t mind giving speeches as much as most people but I

don’t really like saying it in front of people I don’t know. I don’t like saying it when hundreds of people are looking at me.