Mon 10/5

• BELL WORK = 1. Which Trait did you do the best on? Why?

• 2. Which Trait did you struggle with the most? Why?• 3. Open your agenda and fill in for the week – I will

also go over it with you

• Due: Type Draft 2 due 10/5 (must print out)• CW: Peer Review• HWK: Final Draft typed due 10/8

Agenda Police

• Earn a BLUE prize ticket• EACH MONDAY – check the agenda of

EVERYONE at your table and make sure it is filled in correctly

• If anyone was absent – help them fill it in on Tues

• If an agenda at your table is missing anything – you will have a penalty – you must apologize to your table for failing to be of service to them!

Final Grade MP1

• Tomorrow I will check your planning guide to see that it is all filled in – you will get 10 points for it

• That will be your final grade for MP 1

• I will share your final grade with you on Weds if we have time!

Show your DraftHi-Lite PS

• Have Oops pass filled out if you plan to use it• If you don’t have it out when I get there,

demerits right away!• Worth 10 pts

Peer ReviewReader & Listener

• I will pair you with a partner for the first round of Peer Review• First I need a volunteer to do a MOCK REVIEW with me

• 1. Read story to Listener• 2. Listener asks 3 questions/areas that need more info

– Reader writes them down at end of draft and will address them by revising

• 3. Listener give Rose and Thorn – write on rubric of Reader– Rose = Trait best done and a LINE FROM PIECE to prove it– Thorn = Trait that needs work and a LINE FROM PIECE that needs

improvement• 4. Reader makes improvements later• 5. Swap Roles and Repeat

Tues 10/6

• BELL WORK = describe the climax of your story. What is uncertain? What makes it exciting?

• P7 = 8th graders go to gym for 15 mins if you haven’t already

• Due:• CW: Peer Review• HWK: Final Draft typed due 10/8

Fill in Pink Planning Guide

• I will check your planning guide

• Be sure ALL sections are filled in

• It is worth 10 points

Peer Review 2

• You choose a Listener!

• 1. Read story to Listener• 2. Listener asks 3 questions/areas that need more info

– Reader writes them down at end of draft and will address them by revising

• 3. Listener give Rose and Thorn– Rose = Trait best done and a LINE FROM PIECE to prove it– Thorn = Trait that needs work and a LINE FROM PIECE that

needs improvement• 4. Reader make improvements later

Edit for Conventions

• Look at each and every word• I will circle any spelling/capitalization,

punctuation, complete sentence errors

When you finish

• Live Reviews

• Want to get a better grade? Share your story now! Get feedback. Make improvements.

Team Building Activity

• Confusion…outside with something to write with

Weds 10/7Marking Period 2

• BELL WORK = what is your definition of poetry?

• Due:• CW: POETRY• HWK: Final Draft typed due 10/8 – that is

TOMORROW

What to hand in tomorrow…

• 1. Planning Guide/Rubric on back• 2. PS on Rubric on back• 3. Rough Draft 1• 4. Rough Draft 2• 5. TYPED FINAL COPY

• ***Name on EVERYTHING***

POETRY• Introduction to Poetry• Billy Collins• I ask them to take a poem

and hold it up to the lightlike a color slide

• or press an ear against its hive.• I say drop a mouse into a poem

and watch him probe his way out,• or walk inside the poem's room

and feel the walls for a light switch.• I want them to waterski

across the surface of a poemwaving at the author's name on the shore.

• But all they want to dois tie the poem to a chair with ropeand torture a confession out of it.

• They begin beating it with a hoseto find out what it really means.

What is it? – copy notes in red

• Poetry is one of the oldest forms of art. It is older than novels, short stories, and plays. It could have possibly been around before written language. Poetry combines the real with the imaginary.

• For years it was written in lines and stanzas that followed a certain pattern, rhyme, and rhythm. Today poetry does not have to rhyme!

• written art to express feelings by powerful, beautiful, imaginative, or elevated thoughts

Selecting A Topic

• When selecting a topic, remember that poetry can be written about anything. It should reveal the poet’s true feelings. Poets usually write about things that they feel strongly about. (ex.family, pets, special friends, special places or events in life, the beauty of nature)

• When written, poetry should contain strong, active words that show rather than tell. A poem should create an effective image in the reader’s mind. (a word picture)

Show Don’t Tell• The teacher was angry.

– The teacher yelled at the young boy jumping on the table. Her face was blistering red. She slammed her books on the desk. She stomped around the room. She threw a whiteboard marker at him. A vein was pulsing in her forehead. She had bloodshot eyes.

• The girl dumped the boy.– The boy chased after the girl. The girl said, “I don’t think this will work out.” The boy stomped away

furiously with bloody murder in his eyes. The girl shoved a hand in his face and walked away with no regrets. She shoved the bracelet he bought her back into his hands. He stomped away using colorful words.

• The baby was hungry.– The baby wailed longing for food. The baby cried and screamed at the top of its lungs throwing and

breaking things hoping to be fed. He was furiously banging his rattle on the cradle walls. It was like nails on a chalkboard.

• The child was happy.– The child was ecstatic with laughter. He got the largest grin that stretched ear to ear. The child had

excitement in his eyes and confidence in his heart. This was the day to put everything on the line. The child skipped giddily all the way back to the house.

Guess the Tell

• The wind whipped the trees as it howled around the corner. Rain poured down the spout and flooded the yard.– There was a hurricane.

Show Don’t Tell• The teacher was angry.

– She had a mean smile on her face, and her face was red with steam coming out of her ears. She destroyed the VCR.

• The girl dumped the boy.– The girl slapped the boy and left (and stormed off). She soaked him with her

soda in his face and dashed out of the room.

• The baby was hungry.– The baby was crying and waving his bib and spoon in the air. The baby was

pointing to its mouth. The baby screamed and held his stomach. He was crawling to the fridge and hold his stomach. The baby’s stomach was growling, and he was crying. The baby starting eating everything. The flailed his arms while running at the fridge. The baby was rocking back and forth in his high chair until it fell.

• The child was happy.– The child was smiling and laughing. The child was skipping around. He got out of

school and smiled.

Guess the Tell

• The kid was screaming. The kid smashed his skateboard and broke it.– He was angry

The teacher was wagging her finger at the student eating a taco with a cherry red face, and her eyes were wide.She is angry.

He had big eyes aware of his surroundings with sweat trickling down his face.He is tired from running. He is playing football. He is scared.

Show Don’t Tell• The teacher was angry.

– Her face was red and her arms were on her hips and she was stomping.

• The girl dumped the boy.– The girl stood up with her hands on her hips and stormed off from the boy. The boy was

crying.– The girl slapped the boy and walked away with a smile on her face as the boy broke into

tears.

• The baby was hungry.– The baby was screaming and yelling and about to hop out of his seat holding up his

empty plate.– The baby was yelling loudly and smashing her fist on the table.

• The child was happy.– The boy jumped up and down and smiled while running to the car.– The boy walked away smiling with a toy in his hands.

DEAR

• Read a DEAR book and pay careful attention to the way it looks on the page

• Your writing should be just as polished

• Look at the punctuation

Thurs 10/8

• Bell Work = put your papers in order:– 1. Planning Guide/Rubric on back– 2. PS on Rubric on back– 3. Rough Draft 1– 4. Rough Draft 2– 5. TYPED FINAL COPY

• On your BELL WORK paper, predict what grade you will get, what you think you deserve and why.

• Due: Final Draft typed• CW: Poetry• HWK:

Poetry Format

• Stanza = a poetry paragraph

• Can be a little as 1 line or as long as 100+

Roses are red,Violets are blue.

Candy is sweet,Just like YOU!

Roses are red,Violets are blue.Candy is sweet,Just like YOU!

Daffodils are yellowPansies are pinkIf you like meJust give me a wink

The Red WheelbarrowWilliam Carlos Williams

so much dependsupon a red wheelbarrow

glazed with rainwater

beside the whitechickens.

• Like this poem – so much depends on the little things when it comes to poetry

• What is so important about the wheelbarrow?

• You need to look at each little piece as special

• You need to look at the poem as a whole

Rhyme

• Words that share the same ending sound

• Cat -• Dog - • Baby - • Sky - • Tree -

• Simile - A comparison between two objects using a specific word such as "like", "as", or "than".

• Ex. Her smile is as bright as the sun.• The boy looked like an angry bull.

• Metaphor - A comparison between two objects with the intent of giving clearer meaning to one of them. Use "is" or "was", to make the comparison.

• Ex. Her smile is the bright sun.• He is an angry bull.

Simile / Metaphor

• Eyes to ocean– Rachel’s are glistening like an ocean.

• Boy to animal– The boy was like a fat baby hippo.

• Child to a sound– The child was like a race car, really loud.

• Teacher to a bee– The was as busy as a bee.

• Eyes to ocean– Logan’s eyes are a glistening ocean.

• Boy to animal– The is a fat baby hippo.

• Child to a sound– The child was a race car.

• Teacher to a bee– The teacher is a busy bee.

Simile / Metaphor

• Eyes to ocean– Her eyes were as colorful as the ocean.

• Boy to animal– Zach ran like a cheetah.

• Child to a sound– Jakob’s voice is like a mouse.

• Teacher to a bee– She buzzed like a bee in your ear.

• Eyes to ocean– Her eyes were the colorful ocean

• Boy to animal– Zach was the cheetah.

• Child to a sound– Jacob is a mouse.

• Teacher to a bee– She was bee in your ear.

FIND Simile/Metaphor• Shame

by Vivian Gilbert Zabel• I stand before the world,

My faults and shortcomings Exposed for all to see. Like a tacky, tattered blanket, A cloud of despair smothers me. Layers of gray with streaks Of blinding black press me To the ground, a broken statue, Tarnished by relentless rain And worn by whimpering wind.

• I cannot lift my head to watch In case others turn from me, Disdain displayed in their eyes. Shame turns confidence into Disgust for myself, burning Like a fire without warmth, Only a chill leaving no comfort. How can anyone love me When I remain disgraced in life By being who and what I am?

• poem has two similes and one metaphor. The one simile states that a cloud of despair, like a tacky, tattered blanket, smothers the narrator. The other says that disgust burns like a fire without warmth. The metaphor compares the narrator to a broken statue. All help strengthen the emotion in the poem, enhancing the feeling of shame. Alliteration is also used: tacky, tattered; blinding black; relentless rain; worn, whimpering, wind; disdain displayed.

• http://ezinearticles.com/?Emotion-in-Poetry:-Using-Metaphor-and-Simile&id=115598

• http://www.poets.org/viewmedia.php/prmMID/15433

The African American poet Gwendolyn Elizabeth Brooks was born June 7, 1917, in Topeka, Kansas. Later that year the Brooks family moved to Chicago. Brooks' mother discovered Gwendolyn's gift for writing when she was seven. She promptly encouraged this talent by exposing the girl to various forms of literature. Her parents, however were very strict and she was not allowed to play with the kids in the neighborhood. As a child she lacked the sass and brass of the other girls in her class and became very isolated. As a result, she made few friends while in school. When Brooks was at home in her room she often created a world of her own by reading and writing stories and poetry.

Write a Poem

Fri 10/9

• Bell Work = 1. open agenda to show Moodle PS or fill out oops pass

• 2. Write a metaphor to compare school to something

• 3. BrainTeaser: Johnny's mother had four children. The first was April, the second was May, and the third was June. What was the name of her fourth child?(Submitted by Peter Mannetti)

Review

• Show Don’t Tell• Rhyme• Stanza• Simile• Metaphor

We Real Cool by Gwendolyn BrooksTHE POOL PLAYERS. SEVEN AT THE GOLDEN SHOVEL.

We real cool. WeLeft School. We

Lurk late. WeStrike straight. We

Sing sin. WeThin gin. We

Jazz June. WeDie soon.

How many Stanzas are there?

Which words rhyme?

Alliteration - The repetition of initial consonant sounds. – Sally sold sea shells by the sea shore.– Kelly can’t quit; she’ll keep cooking.

• Imagery - Words or phrases that appeal to any sense or any combination of senses. – Sight, Sound, Smell, Touch, Taste

FIND Simile/Metaphor• Shame

by Vivian Gilbert Zabel• I stand before the world,

My faults and shortcomings Exposed for all to see. Like a tacky, tattered blanket, A cloud of despair smothers me. Layers of gray with streaks Of blinding black press me To the ground, a broken statue, Tarnished by relentless rain And worn by whimpering wind.

• I cannot lift my head to watch In case others turn from me, Disdain displayed in their eyes. Shame turns confidence into Disgust for myself, burning Like a fire without warmth, Only a chill leaving no comfort. How can anyone love me When I remain disgraced in life By being who and what I am?

• poem has two similes and one metaphor. The one simile states that a cloud of despair, like a tacky, tattered blanket, smothers the narrator. The other says that disgust burns like a fire without warmth. The metaphor compares the narrator to a broken statue. All help strengthen the emotion in the poem, enhancing the feeling of shame. Alliteration is also used: tacky, tattered; blinding black; relentless rain; worn, whimpering, wind; disdain displayed.

• http://ezinearticles.com/?Emotion-in-Poetry:-Using-Metaphor-and-Simile&id=115598

Alliteration Practice• Dogs

• Money

• Phone

Alliteration Practice• Dogs

• Money

• Phone

Personification

• giving human traits/actions/emotions to non-humans

• Ex. The sun smiled.• The flowers danced in the field.

Come up with your own examples

• Personify:

1. A clock

2. A tree

3. A car

Imagery … the cafeteria

• Our school cafeteria

• Looks like…• Smells like…• Tastes like…• Sounds like…• Feels like…

Make New Bell Work

Moodle Article Discussion4 Corners – you can only speak if you have the ??

• Is it FAIR to kids?• Will it CHANGE the behavior of the kid?

• Is it WORTH the embarrassment/damage?• Should it be LEGAL?

• What do YOU think in the best punishment?

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