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You have done a good job trying to develop your ideas for the first draft but there are
a few things you can consider improving to make it a better essay overall and to
make it easier for the reader to follow your good ideas
Be careful about your grammar You need to rephrase quite a number of your
sentences Eg (P3) lsquoHis sharing and wordings are definitely help enhance my
leadership skillsrsquorsquoAlso there is a quite I love it much in this bookrsquo
The section about Nickrsquos character traits is quite brief To sum up what kind of
qualities does he have Please analyze one by one and cite specific supporting
examples to illustrate
You also need to include a self-reflection in your essay Please develop this section
in your next draft
The Reference list should be written on a separate page For more information on the
APA style refer to httpwwwapastyleorg