https://www.facebook.com/hocvietielts Page 1 The world's most well-know n philanthropis ts are mo stly billionaires or rich people, so the rich are most lik ely able to help the world better than others. Do you agree or disagree? It is true that (1) almost people (2) who are famous for charity often (3) rise from the wealthy. Therefore, some people believe that the rich tend to (4) capable to (5) build our society in a more positive way than the poor. In my opinion, this idea is (6) pretty logical for following reasons. To begin with, there are several reasons why wealth people are highly available to (7) philanthropize, and (8) by their contribution, they help others who do not have the same opportunities. Firstly, when people become richer, there would be (9) more their time and money left for charitable activities, such as raising funds for aid organizations or government. This money could be spent on (10) feeding those who are suffering from famine in Africa or (11) building more houses of (12) gratitude for poor children and the disabled in Vietnam for example. Secondly, the rich philanthropists have successful business, so they can find it easy to (13) give much more jobs from their companies. As a result, the unemployment rate would be reduced, and doing this can (14) alleviate huge strain on the economy. Having said that: (15) Poverty breeds crime. Indeed, the poor would find it difficult, if not impossible, to care about social issues in (16) modern life, while they still have to struggle to make ends meet. By contrast, those who get high income have more chances to access good education and health care systems, reducing the number of people who are suffering from illiteracy and diseases. Moreover, when it comes to environmental protection, rich people are likely to able to pay more expensive costs for means of transport consuming less fuel or (17) use green energy. That is, (18) less harm emissions can be released to our surroundings. In conclusion, I (19) think that it would be greater if there were more than one (20) Bill Gates or Warrant Buffett who not only are billionaires, but also promote the development of economy, bring a plenty of benefits for the world by charity. Corrections: (1): Almost là trạng từ. Em có thểdùng „most people‟ hoặc „almost all people‟.(2): “who are famous for charity ”~ lỗi diễn đạt. (3): rise là động t ừkhông dùng được ởđây.(4): capable là tính t ừ. Vịtrí này cần có một động từ. (5): to build our society: Không phù h ợp với context. Có thểsửdụng „to help the community‟đểthay thế. (6) „pretty logical‟ = cách diễn đạ t informal. (7): „philanthropize ‟không phải là verb. Bên c ạnh đó, „highly available to‟ không phù hợ p trong ngữcảnh này.
