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Shumski
Darren Shumski
Amold
English Comp.
6 September 010
This weekendwhen I walked into my great grandmother'snursing home I realizedmany
things about he pastand present didn't want to believe. I didn't want to believe that she really
is dying, una-t+*{ldidn't want the time that we have together o finally be coming to a close
,.;Lar€ _with our memories eft afvrha(they currently are. I wanted he present o continue on into the
future, but it will not in the time here o come-but as I walked into the door of her qom it wasi^JVr f € ,.
like walking into the front door of her old apartmentwhen I had first move{GQrwiren I was
five.
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As I walked n that apartment san excited ittle kid, with my older brotherTravis,
didn't know what the day had n store or us. It could beplayingblack ack, war, or various
other cardgames.We couldpossiblybe making cookiesor my personal avorite, solving
l?/crosswordpuzzleslbut who knew/l would have beenperfectly content with any of the options.' t I
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Shepulled out hJr ar of coins, mostly pennies,and dumped t on the table. This meant we
-'rywould be betting on card gamesand then going to the store o purchasegum or whatever else
with our winnings. We divided up about 500penniesand pulled out the deck of cards, he game
was called21, alsoknown as black ack. Handafter handwent by alongwith the time. Pennies
changedhands as dinner time rolled around. That meant we got to help her cook dinner,
whatever we wanted o eat. I loved peanutbutter and elly so I would just make myself one of
thoseand cut up a Granny Smith apple and dip that in peanutbutter also. I don't recall what she
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dused o make for herselfor Travis,but I loved my dirner/She then took us to the store o cash n
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our winnings. I loved gettinga king sizepackof Reese upswhenthey were only a dollar. I
would put them in the freezer ight when we got back. They would be perfectly frozenby the
time "Cops" cameon. Being five I wasn't supposedo watch hat show, but that's what older
relatives are for. We would sit there and watch that until about9 o'clock, then she would make
us all two bagsof popcornbefore America's Most Wanted"cameon. We usuallywould fall
asleep uring hat show. It kind of scaredme being soyoung,but we loved watching t. She
would always get us blankets after we fell asleepand we would spend he night there. In the
morningsshewould get up and make us breakfast,scrambledeggsbacon and toastbeforeour
mom came and got us from her apartment.
{ro^r As I went and satdown on her bed n her nursinghome remembered er beforeshegot
Alzheimer's and dementia.Thoughshedidn't rememberus as we walked nto her room andsaid
"Hello," we cameand ried to makeher as happy aspossible.I broughtup her old record
collectionbecause he oved alking about t. As sheventured nto the conversation went into a
dazeof the first daywhen I was about13 and askedabout hat recordcollection.---'7---
Shebegan o explainhow her atehusbandand shealwaysused o dance o her old
recordcollection,so on that day I askedher o show me somesimplemoves o polkadancing.
Though tough for her to do sheagreed. We put on the first record. Shebegan o explain the
logistics of the danceand the moves. We danced or hours; I wasgettingbetter with eachnew
song hat came on. After shegot tired we sat down and she alked about her late husbandand
her life when shewas a kid, and how different things were back then. She alked abouther time
during World War II and the Cold War. She was a woman who lived through many different
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times of life. She ived throughthe flappers,hippies,and the life of disco, and the birth of rock
with Elvis and the Beatles,but most of all, she oved to dance o polka music.
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Darren Shumski
English
R. Amold
20 September 010
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*,i\Vrrn)u,Wil'((t" ' Reflection
I wrote my memoir about my great grandmother, Grandma Pumpkin." Personally 'm
| ,,lo not a big fan on planning papers. feel like the best way to write a paper s to just dive right in,
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I unlessof course t is a researchpaperor somethingof that nature. I get my ideaswhile I am
. t t l . .c I . .t 0 l ]wri t ing. Oncelstartwithonemainidea,orstartelaborat ingononetopic lget ideasforanother
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! I Al topic or ideas or moredetails, nd keep hose n mind for later n thepaper. am not a big fan'lD P-i-\,
, ./1',of brainstormingor takingnotesas goeither. Once startwriting thepapert just flows from r / _; \ ur uralr l srurururB ur klrturB uurss as r BU Erursr. \_[ luri l sri lrr wrrurlB urs Papsr rrJusr r
',.p& ',[ow I feel,andwhat think.
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J\ rw' Also in thebodyparagraphs f my paper includedmoredetailsabouthow all of these
eventswith my great grandmothermade me feel, happy sad so on so forth. Now that I read he
last comment on the evaluationpaper 'm going to go on a rant abouthow I feel about this paper.
I do not like writing memoirs. Personally feel like if I wanted otherpeople o know aboutmy
feelings, or pastI would tell them. I don't like being forcedto write aboutmy pastwhether I'm
comfortablewith it or not (which I am comfortable with this subject; 've come to accept he fact
that my great grandmotherwill not be here for much longer). I am comfortable with my writing
abilities and feel like my actualwork in this paper s very good. I feel like I went very in depth
into this paperand revealedquite a few details hrough the useof imagery. Like I said
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PeerReviewSheet:SignificantEventPaper
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Author: Before xchangingapers ithoneof yourclassmates,ill in the ollowingnformation
about ourdraft.
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Reviewer: Read he author'scommentsabove,andread he entiredraft throughoncewithout making
any comments.Thenreread he draft in order o answer he following questions'
L Locateoneor two keyscenesn thenarrative.Give an exampleof where he writer usesvivid
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