Slide 2 Elaboration: Development of IDEAS 2011 Compiled and
Created by Beverly Dunaway Slide 3 WHEN YOU ARE WRITING, IDEAS COME
TO YOUR MIND, BUT THEY ARE JUST IDEAS UNTIL THEY ARE DEVELOPED WITH
DETAILS. FOR EXAMPLE: THE IDEA OF AN UMBRELLA TO USE ON A RAINY DAY
IS COOL, BUT WHEN IT IS NOT OPENED AND IT RAINS, THERE IS A
PROBLEM. YOUR IDEA OF USING AN UMBRELLA IS EXTREMELY HELPFUL WHEN
IT IS FULLY OPENED ON A RAINY DAY! Slide 4 Slide 5 Let the world
read about your ideas you develop with details, elaboration,
anecdotes, examples, for instance! Dont be shy! Slide 6 THINK OF
FRESH IDEAS! TAKE YOUR IDEAS AND DEVELOP WITH DETAILS! BALANCE YOUR
WRITING BY DEVELOPING YOUR IDEAS EQUALLY IN YOUR PAPER! STAY ON
YOUR IDEA MORE THAN ONE SENTENCE! MAKE YOUR IDEA CLEAR TO THE
READER! DEVELOP AND ELABORATE EACH IDEA! DONT MAKE A LIST OF IDEAS!
Slide 7 Slide 8 Slide 9 BENJAMIN FRANKLIN: ELECTRICITY Slide 10
EVEN THE CLAM OPENS UP HIS SHELL TO SHOW THE DEVELOPMENT OF A
PEARL! Slide 11 Slide 12 Examples from unedited FCAT Writes Student
Anchor Papers (2010) Slide 13 Supporting ideas are offered with
adequate development ELABORATION: (We take the pizza out of the
oven and cut it in square pieces. The knife was so fast that I was
done in a minute. We served the pizza to the students. All of a
sudden, we hear the students shouting,"This tastes awful! What did
you guys do? All we taste is tomato sauce and dough!"). Slide 14
ELABORATION: SUPPORTING DETAILS Carefully selected details are
provided as support ([Drew], [Jenibelle] and I looked at each other
and groaned. The school bell rang and we dragged ourselves to the
cafeteria. We got in our blue uniforms and got to work. I served
pepperoni pizza on a tray. [Jenibelle] served mashed potatoes and
gravy. [Drew] got the easiest job. All she did was hand Gatorades
to students). Slide 15 (When we got into the lunchroom, it was all
neat and tidy, no lunch ladies serving up mystery meat. This was
going to be extraordinary. We followed and listened to the
principal as she led and told us about the lunch room. Principal
[Lodz] left us to do our easy job and told us to be ready for her
when she checks on us every half-an-hour. We got our hands cleaned,
and got comfortable before we even started cooking). Slide 16 (I
was putting pepperoni-flavored hot sauce on the pizza, and too much
came out. Then, this doesn't even sound like it has a smidgen of an
atom of a chance at all, the pizza started to grow, and grow, and
grow, and grow! It kept growing until it was a gigantic,
fire-breathing, pepperoni pizza! We were all very, very scared.
Even [Cody] was scared, the bravest of us five. Excuse me, four,
[David] had just run out of the room in a fit of what looked like
screaming terror). Slide 17 (When we got into the lunchroom, it was
all neat and tidy, no lunch ladies serving up mystery meat. This
was going to be extraordinary. We followed and listened to the
principal as she led and told us about the lunch room. Principal
[Lodz] left us to do our easy job and told us to be ready for her
when she checks on us every half-an-hour. We got our hands cleaned,
and got comfortable before we even started cooking). Slide 18 Slide
19 Supporting ideas are amply developed through the use of
anecdotes and specific details: For instance, Im a safety patrol.
As a safety patrol I have a giant job to enforce the rules. One
time there was a child named [Jake]. He thought it was cool not to
follow the rules. I was on duty. [Jake] came speeding as quick as a
cheetah and zipped past me. I told him to walk but, he didnt
listen. Then he slipped and scrapped his knee. That is the first
reason it is extremely important to follow the rules. Slide 20 In
the library all of the books are organized in to sections by
number. You have to treat books with care by bringing them back on
time and carefully turning the pages. That comes under the rule of
be respectful. If the school did not respect the books the books
would be every wear. They would be on the floor!! They would have
ripped pages!! That rule also helps to keep a healthy school
because you can be walking and then trip on a book. If you take
care of books you can keep them for a long time. Slide 21 Another
reason why school rules are important is so you cant cheat, or have
calculators on a test. If you copy off someones answers on a
worksheet, theyre not going to be there for you to copy off when
youre taking the test for it. Try your best. If you need help, ask
for it. Or what if someone copies off your test? Plus, what if when
you copy off someones answers, they have the answers wrong? Would
you be very happy? I know I wouldnt! If you use a calculator for an
answer, what if you lose the calculator? What then? You can learn
better if you just try and dont cheat or use calculator. Slide 22
My last reason why it is important to have rules is because you
need to listen. If a teacher is talking and you are not listening
you will not know what you are supposed to be doing. Normally if
the teacher thinks you are not listening they will ask you what
they said. Most of the time you will say what. Not often do you
know what they were saying but sometimes you get lucky. You also
need to listen if it is an emergency because a tornado could be
coming towards you. Slide 23 Slide 24 Slide 25
