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Commentary on Candidate Evidence
English (National 5): Reading for Understanding, Analysis and Evaluation
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Commentary on Candidate evidence
Candidate 5
The evidence for this candidate has achieved the following marks for each question of this course assessment component.
The candidate was awarded 17 marks.
Question 1
The candidate was awarded 2 marks.
The reference to ‘game after game’ was awarded 1 mark, and the accompanying
comment ‘continuously played’ (from the end of the candidate’s answer) was also
given 1 mark.
Question 2
The candidate was awarded 3 marks.
Bullet point one was given 1 mark for the idea of perseverance.
The candidate’s second bullet point is unfortunately a repeat of the first point
made, and was given 0 marks.
Point three ‘he wanted to play for the team so badly’ is a gloss of “yearned” and
covers the idea of Mark being keen to play for the team - this was given 1 mark.
In bullet point four, the candidate’s word, ‘pride’ shows understanding of the
“moment of glory” and, as the intensifier was already addressed in a previous
bullet point, the candidate was awarded 1 mark here.
Question 3
The candidate was awarded 5 marks.
Bullet point one contains the idea of “very few succeed” and was given 1 mark.
Bullet point two, ‘many stages of filtering,’ is a gloss of “the sifting process
begins…” and was given 1 mark.
Points three to five collectively convey the idea of a small number making it “all
the way to the top flight.” 1 mark was awarded here.
Point six gained 0 marks.
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Bullet point seven is a gloss of “Many struggle to cope with rejection,” and was
given 1 mark.
Point eight glosses the idea of depression, and was also given 1 mark.
Question 4
The candidate was awarded 1 mark.
The mark was given for the idea of multiplicity in ‘there are so many footballers
that have been turned away,’ but no mark can be awarded for the comment
about sand as the candidate’s meaning is not clear.
Subsequent comments are confused and gain no marks.
Question 5
The candidate was awarded 1 mark.
‘Without losers, etc’ is a correct selection under sentence structure, and was
awarded 1 mark for the reference. No further mark was awarded for the
accompanying comment.
The candidate has then offered another feature of sentence structure and cannot
therefore gain further marks as the question required analysis of two different
language features.
Question 6
The candidate was awarded 2 marks.
The comment ‘see through’ is a literal translation of “transparent” and shows no
understanding of meaning in this context. No marks were rewarded for ‘rewards
are real’ as the mark here was for the idea of chances rather than rewards being
widely available.
The final bullet point, however, offers a condensed answer and scores 2 marks
for the ideas that the most talented players succeed and that background is
irrelevant.
Question 7
The candidate was awarded 3 marks.
In bullet point one, no marks were awarded for ‘put through school’ as this is not
the same idea as “who have done well at school.” In any case, candidates need
glosses of both ‘educated’ and ‘self-assured.’
At the end of the bullet point, 1 mark was awarded for ‘higher probability of being
greater at football.’ Point two is the idea of “long ago,” and was given 1 mark.
No marks were awarded for bullet points three or four. Point four is another
attempt to address the first bullet on the marking instructions, but the candidate
simply lifts from the passage.
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Point five glosses “losing is essential” and was awarded 1 mark.
Point 6 is too reliant on lifts and was given 0 marks.
Question 8
The candidate was awarded 0 marks.
The candidate offers no identification of feature of sentence structure and thus
there is no appropriate comment. 0 marks awarded.
Question 9
The candidate was awarded 0 marks.
No selection is made from lines 60 – 64, and therefore no relevant explanation. 0
marks awarded.
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Candidate 6 The evidence for this candidate has achieved the following marks for each question of this course assessment component.
The candidate was awarded 23 marks.
Question 1
The candidate was awarded 2 marks.
1 mark was given for the reference – ‘absorbing,’ and 1 mark was given for the
comment on ‘constant imersion.’
Question 2
The candidate was awarded 2 marks.
In bullet point one, 1 mark was given for the idea of never been picked (‘wasn’t
good enough to join’).
In the second bullet point, the idea of perseverance clearly comes across – 1
mark.
In point three there is nothing on the intensity of Mark’s desire, and nothing on
getting in the team – 0 marks.
In the final bullet point there is no understanding of the moment of glory – 0
marks.
Question 3
The candidate was awarded 6 marks.
In bullet point one, ‘they are constantly stressed,’ is sufficient for the idea of
anxiety – 1 mark.
In the second point, ‘can’t take not being selected’ is acceptable for the idea of
struggling to cope with rejection – 1 mark.
‘become more shy in failure’ clearly suggests understanding of loss of confidence
– 1 mark.
‘can become severely mentally broken’ contains the idea of depression – 1 mark.
In the fifth bullet point, the idea of the scouts causing nerves/pressure is
suggested by ‘they fear/respect the scouts’ - 1 mark.
The candidate’s final bullet point demonstrates a clear understanding of the idea
that selection starts early – 1 mark.
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Question 4
The candidate was awarded 1 mark.
0 marks were awarded for ‘miniscule’. However, 1 mark was awarded for
‘players…part of a huge body.’ No further mark was awarded because the
candidate does not go on to develop the point about the ‘chance of being
selected.’
Question 5
The candidate was awarded 4 marks.
1 mark was given for the appropriate reference (‘natural selection’), and 1 mark
for a good analytical comment.
1 mark was awarded for the identification of a feature of sentence structure
(‘short sentence structure’), again 1 mark for the accompanying analytical
comment.
Question 6
The candidate was awarded 1 mark.
The only correct material here is contained in bullet point two, which clearly
shows an understanding of “The best of the best shine through” – 1 mark.
Question 7
The candidate was awarded 3 marks.
In the first bullet point, the candidate demonstrates understanding of “mind and
body grow together” with the statement that ‘our physicallity and intelligence are
connected and develop together’ – 1 mark.
The second bullet point shows understanding of the idea that losing is
necessary/natural – 1 mark.
Point three relies too heavily on lifts from the passage – 0 marks.
In bullet point four, the candidate comes close to the idea that we react to failure
is crucial, but there is not enough to gain a mark – 0 marks.
Point five is a sufficient gloss of ‘It is natural to be sad’ – 1 mark.
Question 8
The candidate was awarded 2 marks.
1 mark for a correct identification of the feature of repetition.
1 mark for the relevant analytical comment.
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Question 9
The candidate was awarded 2 marks.
1 mark was given for a relevant selection.
1 mark was awarded for the comment which links the selection with specific
reference to a main idea of the passage.
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Candidate 7
The evidence for this candidate has achieved the following marks for each question of this course assessment component.
The candidate was awarded 27 marks.
Question 1
The candidate was awarded 2 marks.
1 mark for a correct reference. 1 mark for a good analysis of ‘deterred.’
Question 2
The candidate was awarded 3 marks.
In bullet point one, ‘didn’t get selected’ is an acceptable gloss of “never made it
onto”, and was therefore given 1 mark. (There is no requirement for candidates
to gloss the word “team.”)
In the second bullet point, ‘trialed’ is too close to “kept going to the trials;”
therefore 0 marks.
In bullet point three, 1 mark was awarded for ‘so badly…become better.’ Note
that the candidate deals with the intensity implied by “yearned” here.
In point four, there is enough in ‘privileged’ to show that the candidate
understands the idea that Mark wanted his moment of glory - 1 mark.
Question 3
The candidate was awarded 5 marks.
In bullet point one, ‘Only 2%’ shows understanding of the small number involved,
and was given 1 mark.
In the second bullet point, ‘rejection’ is a lift, but 1 mark was awarded for the idea
of ‘mental health damaged.’
In the third bullet there are too many lifts, and 0 marks were given.
In bullet point four, 1 mark was given for ‘quality is very good,’ which is a
sufficient gloss of “the standard was high.”
In the candidate’s fifth bullet point, 1 mark was awarded for the understanding
shown of the ‘nerve racking’ visit of the scouts.
In point six, 1 mark was given for ‘stage to stage gets smaller and smaller’ as it
indicates understanding of “only a handful were picked.”
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Question 4
The candidate was awarded 2 marks.
Multiplicity of the grains of sand – 1 mark. Multiplicity of players – 1 mark.
Question 5
The candidate was awarded 4 marks.
For sentence structure, 1 mark was awarded for the reference ‘without
losers…evolution.’ The candidate then refers to a list, which is incorrect.
However, the candidate goes on to correctly observe that the writer shows the
need for the negatives to allow for the positives. This comment was given 1
mark.
For word choice, 1 mark was awarded for reference to ‘inevitable,’ and 1 mark
was awarded for the correct analytical comment on the suggestion that failure is
a certainty.
Question 6
The candidate was awarded 3 marks.
In point one the candidate does not express a clear idea – 0 marks.
Point two is a condensed answer – ‘truly talented’ was given 1 mark for the idea
that most talented individuals do make it; ‘despite a hard background’ was given
1 mark for the notion of irrelevance of background.
In the candidate’s third point there were no marks for ‘no shortcuts,’ but 1 mark
was gained for ‘no help that will get you straight to your goal,’ as it addresses the
idea of a lack of nepotism.
Question 7
The candidate was awarded 4 marks.
In point one the candidate has correctly glossed “self-assured” as ‘self
confidence’, has the qualitative comment of ‘good education’ – 1 mark. But
‘better at football’ is too close to the original text and therefore cannot gain a
second mark (for “perform more effectively.”)
In point two, there is too much reliance on lifted material – 0 marks.
The candidate’s third point ‘failing is natural,’ is an acceptable gloss of “losing is
an essential…part of life” and was given 1 mark.
Point four seems to be close to “pathway” from the passage, but there is enough
in the comment about failure allowing us to ‘start a new dream’ to be awarded 1
mark.
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In point five the comment ‘it is normal to be unhappy’ is a gloss of “It is natural to
be sad,” and was awarded 1 mark.
Question 8
The candidate was awarded 2 marks.
A correct reference was made: ‘a new dream, a new hope, a new way of finding
meaning.’ 1 mark was awarded here.
The candidate identifies this as a list, which was incorrect, but goes on to make
an acceptable analytical point: ‘to emphasise that failure is not the end.’ 1 mark
was given for this comment.
Question 9
The candidate was awarded 2 marks.
The candidate made a correct selection: ‘Life is too short, too precious to be
derailed by failure. We have to accept it.’ – 1 mark.
The candidate states that there is a summarising function here, and goes on to
make a connection with a specific ‘main idea of the passage,’ that we should
welcome failure as it can be beneficial. 1 mark was awarded for this comment.
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Candidate 8
The evidence for this candidate has achieved the following marks for each question of this course assessment component.
The candidate was awarded 22 marks.
Question 1
The candidate was awarded 2 marks.
An appropriate reference ‘game after game’ was given 1 mark. The supporting
comment ‘play and play all day’ was also given 1 mark.
Question 2
The candidate was awarded 4 marks.
The candidate’s use of own words is initially quite weak but 1 mark was awarded
for ‘never got into the team’ as there was not a requirement here to gloss “team”
1 mark was given for ‘never gave up’ as it addresses the idea of perseverance.
1 mark was awarded for ‘wanted to play so much…get better at football’ which is
a gloss of “yearned…to progress.”
1 mark was given for ‘ability sadly lacked what the teams were looking for,’ which
is a gloss of “he was just off the pace.”
Question 3
The candidate was awarded 3 marks.
The first bullet point is an acceptable gloss of “struggle to cope with rejection,”
and was awarded 1 mark.
The candidate’s second bullet point relies too heavily on lifts and was awarded 0
marks. (‘serious things’ is an insufficient attempt to address mental health
issues.)
In the third bullet point ‘He was totally devestated’ glosses “I was crushed with
disappointment,” and was given 1 mark. In the same bullet point, an acceptable
gloss is also given of “…had only just started” – 1 mark awarded here.
No marks were awarded for the remainder of the points as too much is lifted from
the source text.
Question 4
The candidate was awarded 2 marks.
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The ‘just as…so…’ (in reverse) construction has been used effectively by the
candidate. Reference is made first to the fact that for ‘everyone 1 Premier league
player we watch there has been loads of people who have failed’ (1 mark). The
candidate then goes on to deal with ‘like grains of sand on the beach,’ adding the
acceptable comment that ‘there is so much and many of it’ (1 mark).
Question 5
The candidate was awarded 3 marks.
For imagery, the candidate makes reference to a ‘race’. 1 mark was awarded for
reference here. The candidate’s supporting comment came earlier in the
response (‘He shows the stages of trialling on football’) – 1 mark.
The candidate then goes on to deal with sentence structure. Reference is made
to the short sentence ‘But this is failure.’ 1 mark was awarded for identification,
but there was insufficient analysis to award anything further.
Question 6
The candidate was awarded 2 marks.
The first bullet was awarded 2 marks as two aspects of the answer are
successfully dealt with: irrelevance of background – 1 mark; ‘Their talent will
stand out.’ – 1 mark.
Question 7
The candidate was awarded 5 marks.
The candidate’s first bullet point was given 0 marks because of a reliance on lifts
from the text.
In the second bullet point, 1 mark was awarded for ‘Failing…is tottally
devastating’, which is a gloss of “failing is crushing”. 1 mark was also awarded
for ‘it’s normal to feel this way,’ as it is an acceptable gloss of “It is natural to be
sad.”
Bullet point three contains a sufficient gloss of “failure…how we respond to it,”
and was given 1 mark.
In point four, there is a clear gloss of “youngsters who are educated and self-
assured” – 1 mark.
Point five contains a gloss of “The German football system has embraced this
truth.” 1 mark was given here.
Question 8
The candidate was awarded 0 marks as the candidate’s response did not
address a specific aspect of sentence structure.
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Question 9
The candidate was awarded 1 mark.
A relevant reference is provided (1 mark), but the candidate does not deal with
the passage’s effective conclusion.
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Candidate 5
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Candidate 6
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Candidate 7
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Candidate 8
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