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For Heavens Sake, Get tothe Point!
BY: Amanda Hall
If an innocent, truly interested
reader picks up a book and wants to really
feel the story, is it more
effective writing if he reads,
The woman is an angel on
Earth, and God has only to open the
beautiful gates of heaven for her to enter
her worthy place in the everlasting
world, or The woman works tirelessly
for charity, contributing more than 20
hours every week at the Federation of the
Blind? No contest! While flowery
wording is often misguidedly chosen as a
writing style masquerading as effective, it
is really concise, direct writing with
optimal word choice that always better
conveys and captivates the reader.
Really, Less is More!
When it comes to writing, authors
lacking confidence, or just extremely
verbose, believe loading a sentence with a
lot of elaborate, descriptive words will
force the reader to feel the intended
emotion and be captivated; however,
using unnecessary, countless words in
general will mostly like confuse the reader
who has no hope of deciphering the point
the writer is trying to make, if there
actually is a point. Inexperienced writers
find it easier to exhaustibly describe
scenes or elaborate on feelings because it
is easier to fill up a page with words than
effectively and efficiently tell a story that,
in its telling, provides real experience to
the reader. According to Sherice Jacobs,
the education system today encourages
students to use creativity in their writing
to facilitate the expression of emotions.
Unfortunately this teaching style usually
leads to purple patches, otherwise
known as needless sections of flowery
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words that instead of captivating the
reader, draws him or her away from what
the writer is really trying to say. Most
people embark on reading for either work
or pleasure. When reading for pleasure,
the reader wants to be swept off his or her
feet with active text that allows ones own
imagination to fill in the blanks. Active,
exciting, effective story telling makes a
literary piece intriguing, whereas never
ending, over-inclusive storytelling leads to
disinterest, confusion and even coma-like
somnolence. Likewise, a reader tackling a
document for work, or a student
attempting an academic article with the
goal of the most expedient absorption of
content, does not want to waste any
time trying to glean importance out of a
piece dripping with inconsequential
verbiage and monotonous droning of
grandiose or trivial inclusions. In the
article Dos and Donts of Writing a
Compelling Opening Chapter, Idrees
Patel agrees, explaining
that tight writing is a
great way to keep the
reader engaged. Shorter
sentences make reading easier, because it
makes it more likely
the reader will be able
to remember what
was said.
The Fix
The fix to overloading a sentence
with a bunch of words is simplicity: keep
it short! Adding extra words in the hope
that a beautiful writing piece will grow is
a losing proposition, unless of course the
author is William Faulkner, an extremely
gifted master in writing long flowing
sentences. Unfortunately, in elementary
through high school, as well as on the
dreaded and college-determining
standardized tests such as the SAT, the use
of as many words as possible is
shamelessly encouraged by assigning
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papers with minimum word counts,
instead of papers geared to effectively and
consummately cover assigned points.
According to Jacobs, a reader wants to be
able to get straight to the point, so a writer
should limit taking short cuts, detours, or
becoming unnecessarily repetitive.
Effective word Choice
An unforgivable way to lose a readers
interest is through poor word choice.
Filling a sentence with a bunch of
adjectives to describe something is
monotonous and sometimes even
overwhelming to the reader. Good word
choice is like cooking: a chef doesnt want
to overpower the eater with a dizzying
array of spices because it makes the food
bitter, over stimulating the diners pallet.
On the other hand, if the cook does not
add enough spices, the meal is bland and
boring. Balance is the key and the same
principle applies to an inviting literary
work. Too many words can over stimulate
a readers brain; he or she simply cannot
process it, or may not have the energy or
motivation to try. Effective word choice
creates a nice flow, which resonates with
the reader and makes the story
delicious. In Element of Style,
William Strunk, Jr. concurs, explaining
that A sentence should contain
no unnecessary words, and a
paragraph no unnecessary
sentences.
The Fix
One valuable tool used to
attract and hold the readers attention is
the use of the strongest, most accurate
verb at every opportunity. For example,
the word finds is bland and not nearly
as dynamic and effective as explores. A
reader can visualize a character exploring
but is lulled to sleep picturing someone
finding something. Verbs, however, tend
to have a presence of their own and have
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to be treated with respect when writing; a
great verb can be ruined with a lack of
understanding by the writer. For example,
a sentence such as, The woman died a
horrific painful death, sounds idiotic and
unnecessary, whereas The woman died a
painful death, gets the point across
quickly and effectively.
Getting to the Point
Many an unsuspecting, aspiring
writer has been seduced by the promise of
flowery writing, which is both misguided
and tragic when attempted written pieces
become redundant, mind-numbing works
that serve to lull the reader into resigned
submission. In Writing Concise
Sentences, Gary Larson explains how
redundant phrases are bad habits just
waiting to take over a persons writing.
Larson asserts that this bad habit tends
to sprout from wordiness, a practice which
also results in a garden variety of
misinterpretations by the reader. As
previously stated, students are sometimes
encouraged to focus on writing a lot of
words because they are assigned a certain
length of paper, or that the piece needs to
be so many words. Teachers are
challenged to recognize the value of
writing 500 effective words instead of
1000 words chosen to take up assigned
space, and to encourage students to write
concise sentences that make sense, get to
the point, and are free of redundancy.
The Fix
Writers can avoid the pitfalls
accompanying flowery writing if they
crunch up their sentences. Sherice
Jacobs advises writers to read aloud a
couple of sentences and, if out of breath
due to the outrageous length, try making it
more digestible for the reader by
eliminating extra words. Teachers can
likewise motivate their students to
produce powerful, charismatic writing by
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challenging them to write a consummate
piece that meets their own satisfaction.
Conclusion
The misguided promise that
flowery writing is effective will
unfortunately continue to influence the
novice writer trying to impress
unsuspecting readers everywhere, but it
by no means has to become a death
sentence to once-promising literary works.
If writers commit to concise writing they
will prove that less is really more and will
be victorious in the eyes of the reader.
Finally, writers cant forget the main
ingredient
for good
writing:
good word
choice. Mastering the arts of balance and
effective word choice are the keys to
memorable writing, mesmerizing lucky
readers and guaranteeing their overall
satisfaction.
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Work Citied
"Does Your Writing Suffer from Purple
Overload?." Ed. Sherice Jacobs.
N.p., n.d. Web. 14 Jan. 2012.
Hynes, Tom. "Saying It Short: 'A Less Is
More' Guide to Effective Writing ."
PR Newswire. N.p., Apr. 2011.
Web. 14 Jan. 2012.
"Sticks and Stones ." N.p., n.d. Web. 14
Jan. 2012. .
"Writing Concise Sentences ." The Guide
to Grammar and Writing , n.d.
Web. 14 Jan. 2012.
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