英語訂正（川口→三木）2015/11/19

原文To foster Historical Thinking Skill by Creating StoryNecessary Relationships and Elements of Characters In historical learning, historical thinking skill is important. This thinking is an ability to learn lessons and apply them to the modern problem. Considering why the result is derived is important to foster this skill. Thus, the objective of our study is to foster this skill by making learners consider why the result of historical event is reached. In historical events, there are various relationships to lead the result. In order to grasp reason of the result in the historical event, it is necessary to understand essential relationships for satisfying condition to establish the history. We propose a method to support understanding necessarily relationships by creating a story. In this method, firstly learners learn about relationships in the historical event. Secondly, they create a similar story to the historical events. Finally, they compare the historical event with the story and recognize necessarily relationships. We are developing a system for supporting this method.This method supports leaners creating the story by abstracting character’s state. In creating the abstraction, it is important how properties are set. If asset is set for a property, money cannot be set because of asset includes a concept of money. Therefore, we need to set some appropriate properties for future work. In addition, must develop the support system.

タイトル To foster Historical

Thinking Skill by Creating Story

Necessary Relationships and Elements of Characters

物語作成によるヒストリカルシンキングスキルの育成 重要な関係と登場人物の要素

タイトル To foster Historical

Thinking Skill by Creating Story

Necessary Relationships and Elements of Characters

← の” f” は大文字

タイトル1. To foster Historical

Thinking Skill by Creating Story

2. Necessary Relationships and Elements of Characters

タイトルが二つ タイトル１とタイトル２の関連性が低い 1 をスキル育成システムの開発、 2 をサブタイトルにしてしまってはどうでしょう

タイトル1. To foster Historical

Thinking Skill by Creating Story

2. Necessary Relationships and Elements of Characters

Develop System of Fostering Historical Thinking Skill by Creating Story: Necessary Relationships and Elements of Characters

1 パート目 In historical learning,

historical thinking skill is important. This thinking is an ability to learn lessons and apply them to the modern problem. Considering why the result is derived is important to foster this skill. Thus, the objective of our study is to foster this skill by making learners consider why the result of historical event is reached.

1 ～ 2 文目 歴史学習では、ヒストリカルシンキングスキルが重要である。これは授業で学んだことを現代の問題に応用する能力のことである。

1 パート目 In historical learning,

historical thinking skill is important. This thinking is an ability to learn lessons and apply them to the modern problem. Considering why the result is derived is important to foster this skill. Thus, the objective of our study is to foster this skill by making learners consider why the result of historical event is reached.

3 ～ 4 文目 歴史の結果が得られた理由を考察することはヒストリカルシンキングスキルの育成に重要である。よって、我々の研究の目的はこのスキルを学習者に歴史事象がなぜその結果至ったかを考えさせることにより育成する事だ。

1 パート目 In historical learning,

historical thinking skill is important. This thinking is an ability to learn lessons and apply them to the modern problem. Considering why the result is derived is important to foster this skill. Thus, the objective of our study is to foster this skill by making learners consider why the result of historical event is reached.

3 ～ 4 文目 reach

“ 結果”、”結論”に達する reach は他動詞→ 目的語がいる

1 パート目 In historical learning,

historical thinking skill is important. This thinking is an ability to learn lessons and apply them to the modern problem. Considering why the result is derived is important to foster this skill. Thus, the objective of our study is to foster this skill by making learners consider why the result of historical event is reached.

3 ～ 4 文目 reach

“ 結果”、”結論”に達する reach は他動詞→ 目的語がいる why the historical event reached its result.

2 パート目 In historical events,

there are various relationships to lead the result. In order to grasp reason of the result in the historical event, it is necessary to understand essential relationships for satisfying condition to establish the history.

5 文目 歴史事象には、結果へ至るための様々な関係がある。

2 パート目 In historical events,

there are various relationships to lead the result. In order to grasp reason of the result in the historical event, it is necessary to understand essential relationships for satisfying condition to establish the history.

6 文目 歴史事象の結果の理由を把握するには、歴史をうち立てる条件に必要な関係を理解することが必要である。

3 パート目 We propose a method to

support understanding necessarily relationships by creating a story. In this method, firstly learners learn about relationships in the historical event. Secondly, they create a similar story to the historical events.

7 文目 我々は物語作成によって必要な関係を理解することの支援方法を提案する。

3 パート目 We propose a method to

support understanding necessarily relationships by creating a story. In this method, firstly learners learn about relationships in the historical event. Secondly, they create a similar story to the historical events.

7 文目 necessarily→necessary

3 パート目 We propose a method to

support understanding necessarily relationships by creating a story. In this method, firstly learners learn about relationships in the historical event. Secondly, they create a similar story to the historical events.

7 文目 その前のパートから含めて、歴史における重要な関係は何と何のどんな関係かがわからない

前の全体ゼミで話したとして省略するなら、5 文目で「様々な関係」→「前の我々の論文で記載したような様々な関係」とする（？）

3 パート目 We propose a method to

support understanding necessarily relationships by creating a story. In this method, firstly learners learn about relationships in the historical event. Secondly, they create a similar story to the historical events.

8 ～ 9 文目 この方法では、まず学習者は歴史事象における関係を学習する。次に、歴史事象に似た物語を作る。

3 パート目 We propose a method to

support understanding necessarily relationships by creating a story. In this method, firstly learners learn about relationships in the historical event. Secondly, they create a similar story to the historical events.

8 ～ 9 文目 create a story similar to the historical events.

similar to で一つの形容詞のようです

4 パート目 Finally, they compare

the historical event with the story and recognize necessarily relationships. We are developing a system for supporting this method.

10 ～ 11 文目 最後に、歴史事象と物語を比較し、重要な関係を認知する。我々はこの方法を支援するシステムを開発しているところだ。

4 パート目 Finally, they compare

the historical event with the story and recognize necessarily relationships. We are developing a system for supporting this method.

10 ～ 11 文目 唐突なシステム これもタイトルをシステム作成にしてしまえば、少しましになるかも？

5 パート目 This method supports

leaners creating the story by abstracting character’s state. In creating the abstraction, it is important how properties are set. If asset is set for a property, money cannot be set because of asset includes a concept of money. Therefore, we need to set some appropriate properties for future work. In addition, must develop the support system.

12 ～ 13 文目 この方法は登場人物の状態を抽出することにより学習者の物語作成を支援します。抽象概念の作成において、どのようにプロパティを設定するかは重要である。

5 パート目 This method supports

leaners creating the story by abstracting character’s state. In creating the abstraction, it is important how properties are set. If asset is set for a property, money cannot be set because of asset includes a concept of money. Therefore, we need to set some appropriate properties for future work. In addition, must develop the support system.

12 ～ 13 文目 前にシステムを作ると書いたので、 methodではなく、サポートするのは system のほうがよいのでは？

5 パート目 This method supports

leaners creating the story by abstracting character’s state. In creating the abstraction, it is important how properties are set. If asset is set for a property, money cannot be set because of asset includes a concept of money. Therefore, we need to set some appropriate properties for future work. In addition, must develop the support system.

12 ～ 13 文目 leaner→learner

5 パート目 This method supports

leaners creating the story by abstracting character’s state. In creating the abstraction, it is important how properties are set. If asset is set for a property, money cannot be set because of asset includes a concept of money. Therefore, we need to set some appropriate properties for future work. In addition, must develop the support system.

12 ～ 13 文目 What is important in creating the abstraction is how properties are set. （抽象概念の作成において大切なことはどのようにプロパティを設定するかです）としたほうが自然らしいと書いてあるところも。

5 パート目 This method supports

leaners creating the story by abstracting character’s state. In creating the abstraction, it is important how properties are set. If asset is set for a property, money cannot be set because of asset includes a concept of money. Therefore, we need to set some appropriate properties for future work. In addition, must develop the support system.

14 ～ 16 文目 もし資産がプロパティとして設定されたなら、資産はお金の概念に内包されているためお金をプロパティとすることはできない。したがって、今後の仕事として適当なプロパティを決める必要がある。加えて、サポートシステムを開発しなければならない。

5 パート目 This method supports

leaners creating the story by abstracting character’s state. In creating the abstraction, it is important how properties are set. If asset is set for a property, money cannot be set because of asset includes a concept of money. Therefore, we need to set some appropriate properties for future work. In addition, must develop the support system.

14 ～ 16 文目 急にプロパティの例が出てきた感がある

for example とかほしいですかね

5 パート目 This method supports

leaners creating the story by abstracting character’s state. In creating the abstraction, it is important how properties are set. If asset is set for a property, money cannot be set because of asset includes a concept of money. Therefore, we need to set some appropriate properties for future work. In addition, must develop the support system.

14 ～ 16 文目 主語がない

サブタイトルの書き方 本題 : 副題と書くのが正解

本題 - 副題 - 本題～副題～

これらは ×

similar toA is similar to B

A は B と同じA is similar to B with C

A は B と C に関して同じ

similar と samesimilar

冠詞 the をとることはできず、 a をとる 完全一致でなく”似ている”というニュアンス

same 必ず the をつける 完全一致のときのみ使用可能