英语书面表达English Composition Writing

What makes What makes a good essay?a good essay?

The essayThe essay

A good essay is usually made up ofA good essay is usually made up ofa topic paragraph, some supporting paraga topic paragraph, some supporting parag

raphs and a concluding paragraph.raphs and a concluding paragraph.

Topic paragraphTopic paragraph

Supporting Paragraph 1Supporting Paragraph 1

Supporting Paragraph 2Supporting Paragraph 2

Supporting Paragraph 3Supporting Paragraph 3

Concluding paragraphConcluding paragraph

To many students, school life is To many students, school life is boring and tiring. However, I fiboring and tiring. However, I find my school life meaningful and my school life meaningful and colourful.nd colourful.

general statementgeneral statement

topic statementtopic statement

Topic paragraph Topic paragraph (Introduction paragrap(Introduction paragraph) h)

General statementGeneral statement Topic statementTopic statement

Supporting ParagraphsSupporting Paragraphs(Body) Paragraphs(Body) Paragraphs

TSTSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS

Firstly, ...Firstly, ...Secondly, ...Secondly, ...Moreover, ...Moreover, ...Finally, Finally, . . .. . .However, ...However, ...

In addition, …In addition, …Furthermore, ...Furthermore, ...

ConclusionConclusionPersonally,… Personally,… in conclusion, in conclusion, in brief, in brief, From what has been discussed above, From what has been discussed above, we may draw the conclusion that ... we may draw the conclusion that ...

In summary, it is wiser ... In summary, it is wiser ...

The paragraphThe paragraph

What makes a What makes a good paragraph?good paragraph?

A good paragraph is one that consists ofA good paragraph is one that consists ofa topic sentence and supporting sentences.a topic sentence and supporting sentences.

There are different kinds of bee. Some live in There are different kinds of bee. Some live in large groups like the honey bee, and make large groups like the honey bee, and make their nests in trees or holes in the rocks. Other their nests in trees or holes in the rocks. Other species make their nests in holes in the ground. species make their nests in holes in the ground. There are also varieties that do not live in There are also varieties that do not live in groups at all…groups at all…

topic sentencetopic sentencetopic sentencetopic sentence

Wherever you go in our school, you see Wherever you go in our school, you see green lawns and trees and beautiful green lawns and trees and beautiful flowers. Dotted among these trees and flowers. Dotted among these trees and flowers are many buildings of different flowers are many buildings of different styles. A stream runs through our styles. A stream runs through our school and you always see everything school and you always see everything reflected in the water. reflected in the water.

Topic sentence:________________Topic sentence:________________

just like a garden.just like a garden. Our school isOur school is

just like a garden.just like a garden. Our school isOur school is

just like a garden.just like a garden. Our school isOur school is

A good paragraph is one A good paragraph is one that contains proper linking words.that contains proper linking words.

I believe English is more important than other I believe English is more important than other foreign languages for many reasons.foreign languages for many reasons. First of First of allall, English is spoken by a large number of , English is spoken by a large number of people, and these people are the most widely people, and these people are the most widely spread across the world in a great many spread across the world in a great many countries. countries. SecondlySecondly, English is the most widely , English is the most widely used language on the internet. It has become used language on the internet. It has become an on-line language. an on-line language. ThirdlyThirdly, the 2008 , the 2008 Olympic Games will be held in our country Olympic Games will be held in our country and English will be very useful. and English will be very useful. Lastly,Lastly, … …

正确使用有关连接词 时间先后：first, then, later, in the end, eventually,

since then, after a while 转折关系：but, however, on the contrary, nevertheless因果关系：because, since, as, thanks to, owing to, as

a result of, for the reason that让步关系： though, although, even if, even though,

in spite of the fact that递进关系：what’s more, in addition, furthermore

on the one hand …on the other hand, 条件关系：if, unless, as long as, on condition that …

表 列 举： for example / instance, take…for example, that’s to say, in other words, as follows

表 总 结： in short, in brief, in conclusion, in a word, on the whole, as has been stated

A good paragraph is one A good paragraph is one with varied sentence patterns.with varied sentence patterns.

丰富的句式： ( 常用到的句型结构） 利用不同的句型来表达同一个意思， 能增加文章的文采。

e.g. What a kind boy he is! How disappointed he was !

感叹句

强调句 e.g. It was this young boy that helped the old granny. I do hope you can come if possible.

e.g. Only in this way can you solve this problem. There comes the police car. Hardly had they got to the station when they met the young man.

e.g. They read while walking or riding on a bus. Come to me if necessary.e.g. I saw a young lady walking slowly in the street with a handbag in her hand.

倒装句

省略句

with 短语

e.g. In my opinion, cyber cafes should be a place where we can find much useful information. Let’s come to the main teaching building, at the back of which stands the school library.

定语从句

e.g. That’s what I should do.We should do a favour to whoever needs help at present.

各种名词性从句

  e.g. Time passed quickly before we knew it. The moment we reached the farm, we got down to harvesting. So long as we work harder at our lessons, we’ll catch up sooner or later.

各种状语从句

1. To his surprise, the little girl knows so many things. （使用名词性从句）

2. Though I’m weak, I’ll make the effort. ( 使用倒装句 )

3. He did not know what had happened until he had read the news in the newspaper.( 使用强调句型 )

4. I passed the physics exam because of your help.( 用虚拟语气）

What surprises him is that the little girl knows so many things.

Practice 怎样使用较丰富的句式和高级词汇

Weak as I am, I’ll make the effort.

It was not until he had read the news in the newspaper that he knew what had happened.

I couldn’t have passed the physics exam but for your help.

5. She walked out of the lab and many students followed her. ( 使用过去分词 )

6. They sang and laughed as they went back to school.( 使用V-ing 形式 )

7.I won’t believe what he says. （ no matter what 状语从句）

8.If you study hard, you will make rapid progress. （祈使句+and… ）

Followed by many students, she walked out of the lab.

Singing and laughing, they went back to school.

No matter what he says, I won’t believe.

Study hard and you’ll make rapid progress.

9 ． He had no sooner come back from Beijing than he was sent abroad. ( 使用倒装句 )

10.We all think he is a great man. (think highly of)

11.As a result the plan was a failure. (turn out)

12. When he spoke, he felt more and more excited. (the more…the more)

No sooner had he come back from Beijing than he was sent abroad.

We all think highly of him .

The plan turned out to be a failure.

The more he spoke, the more excited he felt.

Summary:

A good essayA good essay is usually made up of a topic is usually made up of a topic pparagrapharagraph, some supporting , some supporting paragraphsparagraphs and and a concluding a concluding paragraphparagraph..

A good paragraphA good paragraph is one that consists of a is one that consists of a topic sentence and supporting sentences.topic sentence and supporting sentences.

A good paragraphA good paragraph is one that contains prois one that contains proper linking words.per linking words.

A good paragraphA good paragraph is one with advanced vis one with advanced vocabulary and varied sentence patterns.ocabulary and varied sentence patterns.

ASSESSMENT

structureIs the essay divided into parts?

Does each part have a topic sentence?

contentAre all the details stated?

Is everything to the point(切题 )?

Language

Does the writer use any linking words?

Are there any mistakes?

Is there any advanced vocabulary（高级词汇） ?

Are there any good sentence patterns（句式） ?

Let’s improve it:

Good afternoon, everyone!    The topic of my speech today is “My Attitude to Pursuit of Fashion in School”. Now in our school there is a hot pursuit of fashion. Somestudents live a very expensive life … _______. _______, they hope to look smart and special. _______, they want to win others’ admiration and respect. In addition, it makes them feel cool . _______, we students should hold the right sense of values. We should practice thrift in our daily life . _____ , it is advisable for us to donate some pocket money to the Hope Project so that those poor children in rural areas can return to school.______, it is the inner beauty rather than our appearance that makes us respectable. Thank you for listening!

A. the reasons why they do so are as follows B. firstly C. last but not  least D. what’s more E. as far as I am concerned F. Secondly

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苏州市 2009 届高三教学调研测试 最近，国家教育部要求中小学生参加冬季长跑活

动：建议小学生每天跑 1000 米，初中生 1500 米，高中生 2000 米。对此，有些人表示支持，有些人表示反对。请你根据以下材料，写一篇以“ Should we give more attention to students’ health or grades?” 为题的短文，谈谈你的看法。

支持方的理由 反对方的理由 你的看法及理由 1 ．可以促进对体育的重视；2 ．可以增强学生的体魄；3 ．更有利于提高学习效率。

1 ．学生以学习为主，考试成绩决定个人前途；2 ．过高的要求学生难以达到；3 ．长跑可能引起感冒或伤害。

( 考生自行发挥 2—3点 )

注意： 1 ．词数 150 左右。短文的开头已为你写好，不计入总词数； 2 ．对所给要点，逐一陈述，设当发挥，不要简单翻译。

1.A good beginning makes a good ending.1.A good beginning makes a good ending.

2.Your composition should be divided 2.Your composition should be divided

into paragraphs.into paragraphs.

3.You’d better use some linking words.3.You’d better use some linking words.

4.Handwriting is of great importance.4.Handwriting is of great importance.

Suggestions:Suggestions:

第一段：

1.Some people agree to NO. One, because they usually think that ...In the meantime , ... In addition...

2. Some people think that A is right because ...

3. Some people suggest / say that ... At the same time they point out the fact that...What’s more...

4. Some people prefer NO. One. In their opinion A ... In addition ...

第二段：

1. On the other hand, some people hold that B is right. They think ...

2.But many more people don’t agree with them. They prefer B. They say that...The reason is that...

3.On the contrary, some people hold that ...

4.Some people think that B is better. It is clear that... What’s more, ...Also...

在第一段和第二段中一定要用原因或列举等方式展开段落。

第三段：提出自己的见解并且加以论证

1.In my opinion B is better than A. There is no doubt that ...

2.I support A. The reason goes as follows...

3.As far as I am concerned, I agree to the latter. First...Second... Finally...

4.It is likely that people will go on arguing over these questions. I think that everything has both its positive and negative sides. We should keep an open mind.

5.People will continue to argue over the questions, I think we’d better keep an open mind because everything has two sides. It all relies on... 6.Of these two ways of ...I prefer...First of all,... Second,...

Should we give more attention to students’ health or grades?

The Ministry of Education of China has urged all the students to participate in the winter long-distance running activity. It is suggested that primary school students should run 1,000 meters a day, junior school students, 1,500 and senior school students, 2,000.Different people always offer various views.

Some people say "yes" to this activity. They think, for one thing, it can make people pay more attention to physical education; for another, running can improve students’ health and help them study efficiently so they can have good grades.

However, others hold opposite opinions about the activity. They believe that learning is the most important task for students and their future depends on their grades in their subjects. Meanwhile, many can’t meet the high requirements. What’s worse, some will suffer cold and injuries.

In my opinion, it’s all right for schools to care about students’ health and carry out the activity step by step. Remember a good body helps make high efficiency.

What do you think about the concluding paragraph?

Is it a good one?

If not, how can you improve it?

In my opinion, it’s all right for schools to pay more attention to students’ health and carry out the activity step by step. Remember a good body helps make high efficiency.

In my opinion, it’s better for schools to pay more attention to students’ health and carry out the activity step by step, because a good body helps make high efficiency. What’s more, it not noly helps students get relaxed, but also will benefit them in their future life.