Plain Language Law: Countdown to Organizational Change Melodee Mercer Veterans Benefits...

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If you are determined to have a disability…If you are determined to have a disability…

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If we determine that you have a disability…If we determine that you have a disability…

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1010It’s an evolution, not a revolutionIt’s an evolution, not a revolution

Look at the history of writing Look at the history of writing programs in your agencyprograms in your agency

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Muddy language is not confined to policies alone. Each of you has seen replies to simple questions in which the meaning was lost through hopelessly obscure wording. When a person writes to the Veterans Administration, he is entitled to an easily understood, frank, and courteous reply. If our replies cannot be understood, they are not only not worth writing, but they simply create additional work.

General Omar Bradley, the second administrator of VA, 1947

99Look at the history of writing Look at the history of writing programs in your agencyprograms in your agency

Plain Letters – 1955

Feelings – 1978

Just Plain English – 1985

Writing for Real People – 1991

Reader-Focused Writing Initiative

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88 Make managers the customerMake managers the customer

77 Pick a starting point that will Pick a starting point that will

have the most impacthave the most impact

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Letter Writing

Tier 1Orientation

4aForms design

4bReference writing

• Briefing paper• Congressional• Management briefing

66Large organizations should Large organizations should

pilot in small sectionspilot in small sections

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55 Find a training mechanism that will Find a training mechanism that will uniformly reach the most employeesuniformly reach the most employees

44Be sure to train reviewers from the Be sure to train reviewers from the beginningbeginning

33Your standard for ‘good writing’ should Your standard for ‘good writing’ should be what your readers think is goodbe what your readers think is good

VA: VA: Service Connected DisabilityService Connected Disability

Injured while on duty (but, not Injured while on duty (but, not on leave)on leave)

Injured while in the service Injured while in the service anytimeanytime

Injured on any jobInjured on any job

VA: VA: Service Connected DisabilityService Connected Disability

Injured while on duty (but, not Injured while on duty (but, not on leave)on leave)

Injured while in the service Injured while in the service anytimeanytime

Injured on any jobInjured on any job

VA and IRS

•You never cashed your check. •‘You will receive a new check shortly.’

You will receive your check by (2 weeks from date of letter)

22Recognize that poor writing is copied Recognize that poor writing is copied throughout your organizationthroughout your organization

Regulation

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11Bring all of the key players in the Bring all of the key players in the

room togetherroom together

Trained over 7200 employees Trained over 7200 employees Teach classes in letter writing, collaborative Teach classes in letter writing, collaborative

writing, regulation writing, white papers, and writing, regulation writing, white papers, and Congressional responsesCongressional responses

Briefed ManagersBriefed Managers Updated the correspondence manual to reflect Updated the correspondence manual to reflect

RFW principlesRFW principles Regulation Rewrite ProjectRegulation Rewrite Project In many offices, it continued without high level In many offices, it continued without high level

advocacyadvocacy VBA Insurance won a 2011 ClearMark VBA Insurance won a 2011 ClearMark

Category Award for best revised document in Category Award for best revised document in the public sectorthe public sector

So, how has it worked?So, how has it worked?

Have fun!Have fun!

10. It’s an evolution, not a revolution.9. Look at the history of your writing programs.8. Make managers the customer.7. Pick a starting point that will have the most impact.6. Large organizations should pilot in small groups.5. Find a training mechanism that will uniformly reach the most employees.4. Be sure to train reviewers from the beginning.3. Your standard for good writing should be what your readers think is good.2. Recognize that poor writing is copied throughout your organization.1. Bring all key players together.

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