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NAME : LILY THEN ID NUMBER : 0313973 MODULE : ENGL0105 SESSION : APRIL 2013

ENGLISH 1 ASSIGNMENT - Essay Writing

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NAME : LILY THEN

ID NUMBER : 0313973

MODULE : ENGL0105

SESSION : APRIL 2013

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In some countries young people have little leisure time and are under a lot of pressure to work hard in their studies. What do you think are the causes and the effects of this condition? Plan your response,and then write a cause and effect essay.

In most countries young people are having leisure time for their leisure activities and they are greatly influenced in terms of studies. Leisure time is an equally important part of young people life. The main reason for this is to give young people mind break so the brain can build up, consolidate and put in order information received during the educational day. Young people tend to spend their spare time on hobbies, communicating with friends, parties, gym and others. But sometimes young people do not have enough free time. As our lives in this planet has become far more difficult and the surviving is hard, people have became rivals and seek for every opportunity that can ensure the living, besides the remarkable jump of world population, work chances are became too little to support these people. Nobody can deny that the key to success lies under hard work. Thus, everyone wants to be successful and happy. The competition for success, however, is the main cause for young people, which makes them concentrate only on their school performance. Consequently, youths are becoming obliged to provide most of their time learning academic subjects rather than socializing with peers.

One of the causes is about parental pressure. Pressure is being put on young people from their childhood because every parent wants to see his or her child do well in school and go on to have a successful career. This means that they exert pressure on their children to spend hours each day studying at home. Some even arrange extra tuition for their children. Nowadays, it is not uncommon for young people to spend another three hours at small private schools after their usual day at stale school is over. As a result,the whole day gets completed by workload. They will not have time to even talk with their children and communicate with them. In addition, parental pressure is the impact that leads the situation to look

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worse. Therefore, both education authorities and parents are having incredible influence. As a consequence, their leisure time is extremely limited and the pressure on them is considerable.

The other cause is related to the higher education system. The education system has also been changed to a larger extent. Each year, there are many times more applicants to university than there are university places. The result of this is that only those students with high grades manage to obtain a place. This contributes to the pressure on young people since they must work long hours to have any chance of success. many countries tend to have a very heavy education system. Some of the country, people have to spend almost eight hours at school every day. After coming back, there are tons of assignments which are supposed to be handed in the day after that. Obviously, they are left with very few choices except studying.

Besides that, the other cause is related to personal attitude. Young people could enforce himself or herself to study just to have certificates. Some young people might think further education is the only way for them to get employed or to earn their living. However, every young people needs to have social relationships and of cause to enjoy their life. Next, not many countries have good places for entertaining. Without being organised, young people can be trapped into criminal activities. Then, young people cannot have time to enjoy in social activities and cannot learn new skills that can give them a healthy life. 

In conclusion,putting lot of pressure on young people is not good for their health and this problem should be change and solve quickly. A young people come to life not for having leisure, but for deserving for success and enjoying the results of hard work that they done. But still they have to keep both leisure and obligations in moderation. To sum up, parents should not emphasize the importance of learning to reduce the stress on their children and the government also necessary to improve the education system to reduce pressure for students.

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PRE-WRITING

Introduction -Young people are having leisure time for their leisure activities and they

are greatly influenced in terms of studies.

-Young people do not have enough free time.

-Lives in this planet has become far more difficult and the surviving is hard.

2nd Paragraph - Parental pressure.

-They will not have time to even talk and communicate with their children.

-Parental pressure is the impact that leads the situation to look worse.

3rd Paragraph - Higher education system

-Education system has also been changed to a larger extend.

-Tons of assignments which are supposed to be handed in the day after

that.

4th Paragraph - Personal attitude

-Enforce himself or herself to study just to have certificates.

-Cannot have time to enjoy in social activities and cannot learn new skills

that can give them a healthy life.

CONCLUSION - Young people come to life not for having leisure, but for deserving for

success and enjoying the results of hard work that they done.

-Parents should not emphasize the importance of learning to reduce the

stress on their children and the government also necessary to

improve the education system to reduce pressure for students.

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http://ielts.studyhorror.com/writings/IELTS-Writing-Task-2-Study-Pressure-For-Young-People/12