Thursday, Feb. 2

Wish a very happy

birthday to Claire B. &Ellie!!!!

General Questions

MLA In-text Citation:

You always want to reference your source whether you summarize, paraphrase or quote

(see notes).

MLA In-text Citation:

• NAME: first word in in-text citation– As a lead-in or the C in CQE before you use a

source.– First time you use your source you should name

him/her/them and establish their credibility (a mother, a reporter for CNN, a scientist at Harvard)

• PAGE NUMBER: p. pg.

MLA In-text Citation:

An article written by Robert L. Maginnis, a policy analyst in the Cultural Studies Project at the Family Research Council, indicates my hypothesis had some truth to it. Maginnis states that “the erosion of values. . .to our youth.”

Why no (Maginnis 6). After the quote?Maginnis “” (6).“ “(Maginnis 6).

Word Count

1000 – 1500 Words

Around 4-6 pages

Student Papers from Advanced Comp

John Doe: 4 pages topic: Troops out of Iraq

Jane Doe: 6 pages topic: global warmingFollows the organization I supplied for you.

Has a great conclusion!Integrates the sources.

Body Paragraphs

• Can we only use the information that we already knew and from our sources on the essay, or can we look up random stuff?

• How to incorporate sources if they overlap topics?

• How to use CQE and make sense – how to use our sources and our own information.

• What structural elements do I need?

What structural elements do I need?

Topic Sentence (for a lot of you that will be one of your reasons).

CQEQ – is often a quote, summary, paraphrase

E – your words – explaining your point. Expanding the point. Explaining how the source connects to

your point or reason. Remember that you can put the three elements (CQE) in different order

(ECQE; ECQ; CEQ)

Other stuff

• Jerei needs a crew so he can talk about his topic and point and figure out what emotion would be a good hook.

• Andes – there is opposition, just google “teach creationism” – I have a website for you to pull up now.

• Steven – what do you need to know about your thesis?

If you want to work with me

In the back - we will read through Jane Doe’s paper like writers. We are looking at what she

does to create effective body paragraphs.

We will examine Topic Sentences (and connection to her thesis)

CQE – and how she does this differently in different paragraphs…it doesn’t have to be one formula.

Other Options

Read one of three essays for modeling:John DoeJane Doe

Orlov: Online Monitoring (professional)

Work on your own essay.POST IT if you have other concerns.

You may ask others for help – keep it at a whisper.

OPENERS

Review

• Grabber or Hook engage the audience

• Transition to thesis (background information? Connect the more broad idea in hook to the specific thesis?)

• Main Thesis assertion and reason(s)

PATHOS

LOGICAL

FUZZY

HUMOR

CURIOUSITY

PRIDE

ANGERSTUNNED

Hook / Grabber

• Surprising fact or statistic• Quotation – usually by a credible person• Anecdote – small story• History – context• Something unexpected about your topic

BOOKEND

Consider other methods of development

Analogy (be careful it’s not logically flawed).• Compare and contrast• Narration• Negation• Simile or Metaphor• Stereotypes

You hear the clock ticking in your head, and your teacher keeps erasing, in ten-minute decrements, the time you have left to complete the test. You do not remember anything from the last month of class. You probably should have studied more, watched less television, and spent less time on the phone. All the “should haves” are not important now. Ou need to finish the test and get out of here.

Post-it Exist Slip

What questions do you have about the research paper and the process of writing it.

Where do you feel lost?

What would you like individual, small group or whole class instruction on in order to write

this paper?

For your conference

Yellow folder with:All sources read, annotated, and ready to

discuss.MLA format on each source OR a final works

cited page.The most current working draft of your essay.Any questions

HOMEWORK

• Read your sources• Write your essay – work on this every night.

Integrate sources. Topic sentences, revise your thesis (assertion, because statement), ADD ADD ADD IMPROVE IMPROVE IMPROVE

• Draft #1 of your essay is due in-class on Monday, Feb. 6. You will need two copies of the essay with a works cited page attached.

Analysis of Student Essay

Highlight:

Maginnis in yellowMorton in pink

Stansbury in orange

1. Read the essay and highlight each source in the appropriate color.

2. Underline what the author writes to establish the credibility of her source the first time she mentions each source.

3. Write her thesis is this format at the top of her essay:

assertion because reason .4. When your group has finished, spend your

time reading your sources and identifying information you will use in your essay.

REVIEW

• Credibility• Lead-ins• What is her thesis?• There are three sections (points) she makes in

her essay in order to substantiate her thesis.• What are these three points or sections?

Quote

Quotations must be identical to the original, using a narrow segment of the source. They must match the source document word for word and must be attributed to the original

author.

MLA Citation

Paraphrase

Paraphrasing involves putting a passage from source material into your own words. A

paraphrase must also be attributed to the original source. Paraphrased material is usually

shorter than the original passage, taking a somewhat broader segment of the source and

condensing it slightly.

MLA Citation

Summary

Summarizing involves putting the main idea(s) into your own words, including only the main point(s). Once again, it is necessary to attribute summarized ideas to the original source. Summaries are significantly shorter than the original and take a broad overview of the source material.

• In his famous and influential work the Interpretation of Dreams, Sigmund Freud argues that dreams are the "royal road to the unconscious" (page #), expressing in coded imagery the dreamer's unfulfilled wishes through a process known as the "dream-work" (page #). According to Freud, actual but unacceptable desires are censored internally and subjected to coding through layers of condensation and displacement before emerging in a kind of rebus puzzle in the dream itself (page #).

Quote

• You can quote: a word - a full paragraph (block)

• BE EXACT! Don’t change verb tense, do not change a phrase, do not CHANGE the text at all.

• If you notice errors in the source, get a better source. Otherwise, put [sic] after their error.

Quote

As a rule of thumb, don’t quote more than a quarter of what you cite. Paraphrase the rest –putting

it in your own words.

Paraphrase

PURPOSE: To avoid making your paper sound like a ransom note. When you paraphrase, you put the author’s ideas in your own words which helps you to create a voice, a tone, and a consistent level of diction.

ETHICS: You must cite your source because these are not your original ideas.

How to paraphrase

1. Reword thoroughlyA. You are allowed to use words that can not be rephrased (names, prepositions, numbers), but even a single memorable, compelling adjective or metaphor left unparaphrased is plagiarism.

2. Do not keep the same structure and just substitute synonyms.

3. Avoid the “mosaic” – A combination of the writer’s phrasing and your own phrasing. BOO>

What vocabulary choices seem so perfect they might tempt copying?

But red-light cameras, which have been around for more than a decade, are picking up critics from California to Washington. They say that using pictures to convict motorists is an "Orwellian" threat to privacy. They challenge the theory that the cameras are infallible. "In other criminal cases, you have a right to confront your accuser," Tait says. "But with this technology, your accuser is a camera."

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What vocabulary choices seem so perfect they might tempt copying?

But red-light cameras, which have been around for more than a decade, are picking up critics from California to Washington. They say that using pictures to convict motorists is an "Orwellian" threat to privacy. They challenge the theory that the cameras are infallible. "In other criminal cases, you have a right to confront your accuser," Tait says. "But with this technology, your accuser is a camera."

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This is PLAGIARISM not Paraphrase

• But red-light cameras, which have been around for since the late 1990's, are picking up opponents from California to Washington. They say that using pictures to ticket motorists is an "Big Brother" danger to constitutional rights . They challenge the theory that the cameras are never wrong. "In other criminal cases, you have a right to confront your accuser," Tait says. "But with this technology, your accuser is a camera."

How do I avoid plagiarism?

Choose a passage you like.

Read it twice.

Then set it aside and don’t refer back to it as you attempt to filter its meaning through your own intelligence.

Double check to make sure your writing doesn’t steal any words or phrases.

Many citizens are upset by what they consider unconstitutional governmental surveillance and technology that may not be as accurate as claimed (Alvord).